Comment from Earl of Oxford

Excellent

Hi, Jewell.

This is the sweetest tribute I've ever had, so thanks very much - though I'm far better than you say. MWAHA.

You call this 'good poetry', so in line with site reviewing directives, it's only worth a '4', but as it's better than good in my eyes, I'll stretch to a well-deserved 'excellent '5'

VERY poetic free verse, though I'd prefer to read it split into at least 4 sperate stanzas. This would avoid the off-putting block format, and also allow the reader to pause and think more at dramatic points.

Best wishes, Ray

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2013

Thanks Ray
I wasn't saying my poem was good poetry. Although I hope it is.
This poem is beseeching the reader to share themselves in deep expression.
I'll split some lines and definitely change what must seem like a self centered statement!
Thanks for stretching it to a 5.
So nice of you
Being your the obvious expert. ha ha

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is very well written, jewell, you did an excellent job writing this beautiful free verse poem filled with excellent imagery and emotion. i enjoyed reading this one.

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2013

Thanks Sweets

Comment from dmt1967

Excellent

Poetry is the writing of souls poets write from the heart and I can see you have done this I like the way you have put yourself into this poem thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013

THANKS

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

excellent use of enjambment to enhance the flow of your poem
excellent consonance of R sounds in pour into me a revelation a river
good consonance of F sounds in life flows/fire/feel/flame
beseech - the perfect verb choice to convey the intensity of emotion being expressed
more good consonance in later lines
I like the simile of a song like honey to the tongue of my spirit
I also like the extended food metaphor :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013

Interesting...
Do you ever feel a poem as you read it or just see academic qualities?
thanks for the review.

reply by adewpearl on 10-Jan-2013

I wouldn't read poetry if I just saw academic qualities. However, when I read reviews on this site, the vast majority of them are about feelings and feelings alone. I assume the writer has heard from quite a few people about responses to the emotions of the poem, and so I provide responses that the poet does not receive nearly as much of. It is difficult to read "tone" in what someone says over the internet, so I am going to disregard what seems to me to be a negative criticism of my review here.

reply by the author on 10-Jan-2013

Thanks for not being offended, Brooke. It was a total curiosity about your reviewing tactics.
Poetry moves me and I love hearing how my poetry moves the reader.Of course I want to know if it needs improvement as well.
Thanks for responding. :)

Comment from Rdfrdmom2

Excellent

VisionaryPoet777:

Good poetry allows me to see into the soul of the writer
It makes me feel something about the subject I've not
felt before
It makes me want to take action because of the message
It feels like something I could have written
It can be interpreted numerous ways
and more

thanks for sharing
love,
jan

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013

Thanks Jan!

Comment from Kingsland

Excellent

I really liked your last line in this poem. This poem has an emotional attitude of the poetic graces. This is well written in every respect and so very easy to read. I enjoyed partaking in this poetic voice... John

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013

and the last line is the first...

Thanks John

Comment from Galactia

Excellent

This is an excellent ode to poetry poem. I myself have been so lost for words to find to write anything.

I love the words....

I know what is in you
even when blindness
to your own perfection
hinders your insight
May I draw from your well?
Please make the music of your life
so enthusiastic
I'll want to dance
in your presence
and sing a new song
Like honey
to the tongue of my spirit
and gentle persuasion-
an appetizer for my soul

This free verse poem sure flowed like honey.

Great job.
Regards
tia

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013

thanks dear. I really appreciate this!

Comment from words

Exceptional

What a lovely ode to poetry.

I especially loved

:May I draw from your well?
Please make the music of your life
so enthusiastic
I'll want to dance
in your presence
and sing a new song

Bravo!

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013

Thanks dear soul! This means the a lot to me! You're one of our best free versers. :)

Comment from Sasha

Excellent

It is poetry like this that causes me to stumble when I want to write it. I just don't have the confidence to do it. This is beyond superb. This is so original and wonderfully uplifting too. Marvelous work with this one.

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013

Thanks so much Smurphgirl!

Comment from mshirachot

Excellent

This is indeed good poetry...it flows with the rhyrhm of the Word which you've expressed in your own dleightful way.

These lines below is where I really would like to be:
"I want to linger
in your nuance
where your perfect joy
magnifies my smile"

His presences brings wholeness and I do need to someone find more time to linger in Him.

The only suggestion I have is that the type style is rather small for these tired eyes. Other than that...beautiful!

Thanks for sharing!
Blessings!
Marsha

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013

Thanks, doll!