Comment from DMCranfield

Excellent

How fun! This poem was an excellent reminder of all of my Disneyland vacations, and the times my own children had birthdays when they were little.

Thank you so much for sharing in such a fun and whimsical way.

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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012

Thank you for reading and sharing your comments. Who doesn't like Mickey, right? I appreciate your time. John

Comment from pattipac

Excellent

Your Disney birthday poem for Aiden was filled with children's beloved Disney characters and fun rides. Most of all, it was all about Aiden. Your love and happiness shown through.

 Comment Written 08-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012

Thank you patti for reading and sharing your comments, I appreciate it. John

Comment from justatuna

Excellent

This was really an excellent write. It's not my venue, but that doesn't mean it wasn't wonderful. You took me to a different place. Memories. I don't have a 6 for you. Sorry. Your flow was excellent. Great rhyming scheme. Very well done.

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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012

Thank you justatuna for reading, commenting and wishing a six on me. Sixes are great but the written word is even better. Thanks again, John

Comment from Joannforsberg

Excellent

clap, clap, clap.... you deserve to win. And, she is adorable in that photo.


Bambi colored invitations
Dumbo used the phone,
Donald quacked around the pond
Pluto wrote it on his bone.

Ariel sung under the sea
Belle sung to the castle crew,
Simba roared to Mufasa
Aladdin boarded his carpet and flew.

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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012

Thank you so much Joann for uour words of encouragement. I truly appreciate it. John

Comment from squid152

Excellent

One of the longest quatrain poems I have ever read. Great personal picture. I loved happiness shows no age and how all the Disney characters entered into your young one's life. She will never forget.-Gary

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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012

Thank you Gary for reading and for your great review, means a lot. John

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

I think you should tell her it was real and she'll be indebted to you for the rest of her life.LOL. It was a lot of fun and full of detail. I was starting to think you were super rich, until I read it was all a dream. Nice gift for your granddaughter.

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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012

Thank you GW, if only I were super rich to do something like that. Thank you for reading and commenting. John

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

You did an excellent job of naming the Disney characters. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.

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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012

Thank you c_lucas for taking the time to read and comment. John

reply by c_lucas on 08-Nov-2012

You're welcome, John. Charlie

Comment from juliedickson55

Excellent

So cute, the image and a fun poem...

I love the last stanza:
"Laughter is timeless
Imagination is a gauge,
Dreams last forever
Happiness shows no age ..."

A lovely dream to have and good job on this poem

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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012

Thank you Julie. After looking at your bio, your written comments gave me more confidence. I wasn't sure about the last stanza, about where to put it. It took some time to develop. Thank you again, john

Comment from Angel Blessings

Excellent

Nice poem good flow. Good presentation, good rhythm and rhyme. Good children poem. What a magical moment. Loved everything about your story behind the poem . Good job"

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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012

Thank you so much Angel for stopping by to read, review and share your comments. I do appreciate it all ,
John

Comment from Deborah Marie

Exceptional

I am truly amazed on how well this "story in a poem is written." It has definitely kept my attention. What a wonderful dream, indeed. Can't think of a better one for my big "little" girl who is twenty (20). This is an exceptional contest contender... I am learning a lot from this site and now know more about how to conquer this style of poetry writing.

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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2012

Thank you Deborah for reading and sharing. Thank you as well for the generous rating . I truly appreciate it. John