If The Jester Cried At Night
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "As The Dark Clouds Roll In"A collection of favourite poems by mrgrunty.
35 total reviews
Comment from DySaintDrama
Your work is typically introspective and this is no exceptioin. Lonely, quiet, cold and sad. Does not sound like much fun. The way you structure your poetry is also evident here with your use of stanzas. Good one. Jeff
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Your work is typically introspective and this is no exceptioin. Lonely, quiet, cold and sad. Does not sound like much fun. The way you structure your poetry is also evident here with your use of stanzas. Good one. Jeff
Comment Written 31-Aug-2005
Comment from L K Pinaire
I liked this one also. Very nice. I almost laughed at the ending. I really enjoy your poetry. I think there must be a market for what you write.
Larry
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I liked this one also. Very nice. I almost laughed at the ending. I really enjoy your poetry. I think there must be a market for what you write.
Larry
Comment Written 31-Aug-2005
Comment from Veronica Grace
I like the way you put this together with the first line so telling. The poem was lonely but in a lighthearted sort of way. It was almost as if you were chuckling at yourself as you wrote this one. I like everything about it.
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I like the way you put this together with the first line so telling. The poem was lonely but in a lighthearted sort of way. It was almost as if you were chuckling at yourself as you wrote this one. I like everything about it.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2005
Comment from Mrs Jones
This is stunning poetry. I love the way you write.
"It's so quiet,
lost memories
tantalise the thought
of finding the smile I have lost." Maybe leave out or replace the first word lost.
Excellent
Rose
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This is stunning poetry. I love the way you write.
"It's so quiet,
lost memories
tantalise the thought
of finding the smile I have lost." Maybe leave out or replace the first word lost.
Excellent
Rose
Comment Written 31-Aug-2005
Comment from Black Wren
I like the way you cycle through with different words, describing them in each verse, until you end up back where you started.
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I like the way you cycle through with different words, describing them in each verse, until you end up back where you started.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2005
Comment from jkhudson
Such a sad poem full of imagery and emotion! I especially like the following verse for its fantastic use of words:
It's so cold,
quaking shivers
rumble like thunder
as the dark clouds roll in.
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Such a sad poem full of imagery and emotion! I especially like the following verse for its fantastic use of words:
It's so cold,
quaking shivers
rumble like thunder
as the dark clouds roll in.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2005
Comment from Sarlou
(It's) Wonderful! I really like the repitition at the start of each verse. (It's) very descriptive and excites all the senses. Flows well, good structure - nothing to change!
Sarlou xx
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(It's) Wonderful! I really like the repitition at the start of each verse. (It's) very descriptive and excites all the senses. Flows well, good structure - nothing to change!
Sarlou xx
Comment Written 31-Aug-2005
Comment from lerkun
Hmm, u home yet...if not, hope your booked soon. you sound really homesick and in need of strong ties....they'll come soon.....lerk
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Hmm, u home yet...if not, hope your booked soon. you sound really homesick and in need of strong ties....they'll come soon.....lerk
Comment Written 31-Aug-2005
Comment from Sallyo
You've certainly got a bleak wor(l)d view here, MrG. However, I like the way the silence and chill is reinforced in every stanza, and thdark little vein of humour in that last bit.
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You've certainly got a bleak wor(l)d view here, MrG. However, I like the way the silence and chill is reinforced in every stanza, and thdark little vein of humour in that last bit.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2005
Comment from CYRANOGATOR
Quite a true statement. We need to have many conversations with our self daily! We are the captains of our ship and we need maintain the control needed to survive. Hopefully happy, successful , and fufilled. Yet others make it through by just keeping breathing. Very good poem again. I will be looking for more.
Wally III
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Quite a true statement. We need to have many conversations with our self daily! We are the captains of our ship and we need maintain the control needed to survive. Hopefully happy, successful , and fufilled. Yet others make it through by just keeping breathing. Very good poem again. I will be looking for more.
Wally III
Comment Written 31-Aug-2005
