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Comment from nancy_e_davis
This is a beautiful poem . I love the picture and the presentation although it could use a little more contrast between the print and background. I found it hard to read.
The rhyme was perfect and so was the meter 8 syllables per line. It couldn't be more perfect. Thank you for sharing. Good luck in the contest. Honeycomb
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
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This is a beautiful poem . I love the picture and the presentation although it could use a little more contrast between the print and background. I found it hard to read.
The rhyme was perfect and so was the meter 8 syllables per line. It couldn't be more perfect. Thank you for sharing. Good luck in the contest. Honeycomb
Comment Written 17-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
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Thank you so much! Wow! I'm so honored to think you found this 'exceptonal.' Your kind comments really encouraged me, and I'm delighted that you enjoyed it. I'll make the contrast deeper. I think you're absolutely right about that. Hugs...
Comment from Belinda
How sweet and delightful. I would fall in love too with the innocent little girl. And yes, she won't keep her innocence for long, undortunately.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
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How sweet and delightful. I would fall in love too with the innocent little girl. And yes, she won't keep her innocence for long, undortunately.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
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Thank you so much Belinda, for your understanding comments and kind review. I really appreciate this.
Comment from Lois Delaney
I love how your poem rhymes and flows so well. I can't think of anything I would change. It is just right and so very true. Childhood is a time of innocence. But life gets in the way and that part soon disappears. Well done!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
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I love how your poem rhymes and flows so well. I can't think of anything I would change. It is just right and so very true. Childhood is a time of innocence. But life gets in the way and that part soon disappears. Well done!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
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Thank you SO much Lois. What a wonderful review this is and the golden star is nice too. I sincerely appreciate your words and your generoous rating. Many hugs.
Comment from 4hisglory
If only we could stay as little children! Maybe we all should try to enjoy life more through the eyes of children.
Very good write!
The flow was good, rhyming good, and fantastic ending!
Blessing in the contest! LaVonne
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
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If only we could stay as little children! Maybe we all should try to enjoy life more through the eyes of children.
Very good write!
The flow was good, rhyming good, and fantastic ending!
Blessing in the contest! LaVonne
Comment Written 17-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
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Thank you so much for your kind review and delightful comments. I too wish we could at least keep some of a child's perspective as we grow older.
Comment from Bina1
This is too lovely, a delightful read. Thank you so for sharing, an excellent entry for the contest. Good luck. A sweet art selection to enhance your lovely words!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
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This is too lovely, a delightful read. Thank you so for sharing, an excellent entry for the contest. Good luck. A sweet art selection to enhance your lovely words!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
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Thank you so much for your kind words about this poem. I'm glad you found it enjoyable.
Comment from abeetle
Brilliant! What a beautiful poem about innocence lost!
My favorite part was:A little further on, we saw
a spider dropping from a branch
to spin a silken web. In awe
she watched its graceful, airy dance
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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
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Brilliant! What a beautiful poem about innocence lost!
My favorite part was:A little further on, we saw
a spider dropping from a branch
to spin a silken web. In awe
she watched its graceful, airy dance
:)
Comment Written 17-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
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Thank you my dear abeetle. How sweet your review! I like that verse too. It paints a vivid picture, doesn't it? Thank you especially for such a high rating. You are incredibly generous and much appreciated.
Comment from OLA THOMAS
Good ode poetry contest entry. The choice of your subject is profound. Innocence is one thing a child loses and never to regain, and it is a really sad loss. Like this.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
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Good ode poetry contest entry. The choice of your subject is profound. Innocence is one thing a child loses and never to regain, and it is a really sad loss. Like this.
ola thomas
Comment Written 17-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
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Thank you so much Ola, for your wonderful review. I'm so glad you liked the subject matter here. Thanks for reviewing this.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes it is a shame that when we grow up we lose our innocence you have done very well with this poem it reads well and beautifully presented regards Jill
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
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Yes it is a shame that when we grow up we lose our innocence you have done very well with this poem it reads well and beautifully presented regards Jill
Comment Written 17-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
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Thank you so much for this kind review Jill. I'm delighted that you stopped by.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
What a sweet, beautiful, skillfully-written poem! "When awe becomes ambivalence" is an especially effective line; the last stanza, especially great!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
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What a sweet, beautiful, skillfully-written poem! "When awe becomes ambivalence" is an especially effective line; the last stanza, especially great!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
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Your review is so, SO encouraging and inspiring. Thank you for your kind words and generous rating. I'm really happy to know you liked this poem.
Comment from emmaysavage
Sweet is exactly the right word for this poem. You combine the quality of innocence with the natural world in a very engaging way. It was pretty believable until I came to the chipmunks, which were too too... However, I really liked the charm of this piece.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
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Sweet is exactly the right word for this poem. You combine the quality of innocence with the natural world in a very engaging way. It was pretty believable until I came to the chipmunks, which were too too... However, I really liked the charm of this piece.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
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I can see why you might find that odd, but my own experience with chipmunks when I was a youngster living in the woods made it quite believable to me. I never tried "chattering" with them, but I could sit on a mat of pine needles and watch them play quite close to me. I was amazed to see their lack of concern. Thank you for your kind and honest comments. I'm glad to hear from you.
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I can see why you might find that odd, but my own experience with chipmunks when I was a youngster living in the woods made it quite believable to me. I never tried "chattering" with them, but I could sit on a mat of pine needles and watch them play quite close to me. I was amazed to see their lack of concern. Thank you for your kind and honest comments. I'm glad to hear from you.
