Words of Advice
A poem to myself18 total reviews
Comment from Bayberry
There's a very good balance of warnings and support in this entry for the Poem to YOU contest. It's easy to tell that a lot of life's lessons were learned very well. Best wishes in the contest, Josie
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2012
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There's a very good balance of warnings and support in this entry for the Poem to YOU contest. It's easy to tell that a lot of life's lessons were learned very well. Best wishes in the contest, Josie
Comment Written 23-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2012
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Josie ~
Thank you so much for the wonderful review and the well wishes!
Comment from Kezzmond
This is the message I tell myself constantly! The amount of times I let a boy upset me because he doesn't feel the way I feel about him! When I take a second to think, I think about how many more friends I have than that boy, what better grades, higher goals, and I realised there are much more important things to be worrying about and so much more to be happy about.
Your message is very clear and it is a poem I definitely think a lot of young (and older) girls should read, as your poem would make the world a HAPPIER and more CONTENT and secure place.
However it doesn't remind me that much of a poem, but rather a message of wisdom from an adult to child. But that does not mean that your message is any less significant, but I think maybe more metaphors, rhyme, imagery etc would make it a bit less like a rant from your mother.
Thank you for reminding me of all the good things in life, of which we should make the most of.
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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2012
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This is the message I tell myself constantly! The amount of times I let a boy upset me because he doesn't feel the way I feel about him! When I take a second to think, I think about how many more friends I have than that boy, what better grades, higher goals, and I realised there are much more important things to be worrying about and so much more to be happy about.
Your message is very clear and it is a poem I definitely think a lot of young (and older) girls should read, as your poem would make the world a HAPPIER and more CONTENT and secure place.
However it doesn't remind me that much of a poem, but rather a message of wisdom from an adult to child. But that does not mean that your message is any less significant, but I think maybe more metaphors, rhyme, imagery etc would make it a bit less like a rant from your mother.
Thank you for reminding me of all the good things in life, of which we should make the most of.
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Comment Written 23-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the review. Rhyme just isn't my thing, I prefer complete freedome with my poetry, as opposed to having to work within confines to fit the rules of different forms of poetry.
Comment from adewpearl
it'll get you far - I really prefer it will to it'll, which just has an "off" sound to it, and since they both are spoken in two syllables, you really don't gain anything from it'll
I very much like your wise advice to your younger self
excellent alliteration in hold your head up high
and in first and foremost
Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2012
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it'll get you far - I really prefer it will to it'll, which just has an "off" sound to it, and since they both are spoken in two syllables, you really don't gain anything from it'll
I very much like your wise advice to your younger self
excellent alliteration in hold your head up high
and in first and foremost
Brooke :-)
Comment Written 23-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2012
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I will look at that suggestion in the morning when I get on the computer. Thank you for the wonderful review.
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
Very true message to the world and to ourselves.If you don't think much of yourself nobody else will. A very good write with imagery and flows. Mary
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2012
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Very true message to the world and to ourselves.If you don't think much of yourself nobody else will. A very good write with imagery and flows. Mary
Comment Written 23-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2012
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Thank you.
Comment from missy98writer
Poet,
Your free verse poem is very well written with terrific I imagery that paints a picture in the readers head. Your free verse is in correct form with excellent rhythm and meter, great alliteration, fine metaphor usage and very good descriptive writing. I enjoyed your last two stanzas: "Love yourself, first and foremost, Hold friends and family close. See yourself for who you are... A strong, willful young lady, A mother and wife in the making, Take this time to learn yourself, So that one day you won't lose yourself To your worst nightmare." I wish you good luck in the A Poem To YOU writing prompt contest. I would recommend your poem to other reviewers. Keep on writing with a creative pen. Nice day to you.
Missy.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2012
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Poet,
Your free verse poem is very well written with terrific I imagery that paints a picture in the readers head. Your free verse is in correct form with excellent rhythm and meter, great alliteration, fine metaphor usage and very good descriptive writing. I enjoyed your last two stanzas: "Love yourself, first and foremost, Hold friends and family close. See yourself for who you are... A strong, willful young lady, A mother and wife in the making, Take this time to learn yourself, So that one day you won't lose yourself To your worst nightmare." I wish you good luck in the A Poem To YOU writing prompt contest. I would recommend your poem to other reviewers. Keep on writing with a creative pen. Nice day to you.
Missy.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2012
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Missy ~
Thank you so much for the review! :)
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, you did a great job writing this poem about the letter you would write to yourself. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2012
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this is very well written, mystery writer, you did a great job writing this poem about the letter you would write to yourself. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest
Comment Written 23-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2012
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sweetwoodjax ~
Thank you for the review!
Comment from sunnilicious
Words of Advice
A Poem to YOU! writing prompt entry
That's a nice poem in naked form. It is firm in beliefs of what the future should be for a normal life. Good work.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2012
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Words of Advice
A Poem to YOU! writing prompt entry
That's a nice poem in naked form. It is firm in beliefs of what the future should be for a normal life. Good work.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2012
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sunnilicious ~
Thanks for the wonderful review. :)
Comment from Bindu Saxena
If I were to write a poem for myself,it would be something similar. It's not only for you and me,it must apply to all.
Nice!
Positive affirmation, confident and re-assuring.I fully endorse the views and give it a five stars.
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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2012
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If I were to write a poem for myself,it would be something similar. It's not only for you and me,it must apply to all.
Nice!
Positive affirmation, confident and re-assuring.I fully endorse the views and give it a five stars.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2012
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Bindu Saxena ~
Thank you for the wonderful review. :)
