Comment from Piggies Grandma

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your sedoku poem very much, robina. It is cleverly written and very well thought out. There is some good advice in your words.

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2011

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011

Thanks so much for your lovely review. Have a nice Sunday, Ine.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

Your sedoka is in good syllable count. I think there is supposed to be a space between the first three and the second three lines.
I like the way you contrast the joy of following God's word and the horrible consequences of sinning. Brooke :-)

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2011

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011

Thanks so much for your lovely review. Have a nice Sunday, Ine. No Brooke there is not; somebody said this yesterday and checked on the web- I would have expected it as well.

reply by adewpearl on 23-Oct-2011

I just looked it up and you're right - I've never written in this form. I think I thought that because some poems I've read on this site had a break. :-)

reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011

I think it might in a way benefit from that.

Comment from Dutchie

Excellent

Hi Ine,wonderful this Sedoka poem.
It give us a strong message that's worth it to live
our life in a decent way. Your words are formulated so well.
Well done. Liefs Fia

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2011

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011

Thanks so much for your kind review,Take care and have a lovely weekend, Ine.

Comment from the blue pixel

Excellent

I can only review your Sedoka on its form Ine as I can't relate to the religious content in your poem. Judaism has no notion of hell whatsoever. I know you will my ability to understand your content but you are spot on with your form. xx Pix

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2011

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011

Thanks so much for your kind review,Take care and have a lovely weekend, Ine. I know hon, even though baptised Protestant I can't relate that well to Hell. And don't read bible often , only go to church occasionally.

reply by the blue pixel on 23-Oct-2011

If there is a Hell Ine, I think I have experiences right here on earth but not anymore. xx

Comment from Chris Tee

Excellent

This is a excellent Sedoka we have here Ine old sport.The syllable count is spot-on and this has a splendid punch line.
Well done indeed.

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2011

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011

Thanks so much for your kind review,Take care and have a lovely weekend, Ine.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I admired the brilliant and symbolic artwork that compliments your poem so well. I liked your choice of the form for your subject and its shift in the end. -Joan

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2011

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011

Thanks so much for your kind review,Take care and have a lovely weekend, Ine.

Comment from Matoshka

Excellent

I loved your picture and the beautiful message that you send. Reading and resting in the word is the safest place in the world to be. I loved this very much. Blessings

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2011

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011

Thanks so much for your kind review,Take care and have a lovely weekend, Ine.

reply by Matoshka on 23-Oct-2011

You are so welcome Ine. Have a Blessed weekend too. Blessings

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

Nicely done. Great bright artwork.
I enjoyed your last three lines as my favourites.
"Sinning t'wards others
we should never ever do,
as it takes us straight to Hell."

Well done, and thanks for sharing.
Maureen

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2011

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011

Thanks so much for your kind review,Take care and have a lovely weekend, Ine.

Comment from Charlene0513

Excellent

To robina1978,
I truly like your poem as we should not transgress against another but if we are a true Christian who has His faith to believe then we must believe than we are forgiven; as He forgives all our debts by having paid the price for our sins on the cross that we will not go to hell.
Charlene

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2011

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011

Thanks so much for your kind review,Take care and have a lovely weekend, Ine. I do know of course-it's just a poem.

Comment from amada

Excellent

The artwork you selected in here is very telling and precise. I don't want to go upstairs in the midst of flames. Very good work here. My best line "Reading the bible
is really a must and joy."

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2011

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011

Thanks so much for your kind review,Take care and have a lovely weekend, Ine. Glad you liked it.