The Boxer
True Story - Contest Entry29 total reviews
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Poet,
This is a creative theme for the short and colorful contest. I see you used two colors and incorporated them inside the poem well. Ali certainly was a talented boxer and it's so too bad he now has a disease because of it. You wrote this well and I wish you good luck in the contest. Blessings, chey
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2011
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Hi Poet,
This is a creative theme for the short and colorful contest. I see you used two colors and incorporated them inside the poem well. Ali certainly was a talented boxer and it's so too bad he now has a disease because of it. You wrote this well and I wish you good luck in the contest. Blessings, chey
Comment Written 07-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2011
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Thanks my friend for your review. Have a great day.
Comment from seewhatimwritingnow
Very interesting writing- I did think that you were saying that Muhammed Ali had failed to make it, though- which I found confusing. Your notes explain more than the poem itself does. Still, an enjoyable read. Best of luck in the contest. Betty
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2011
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Very interesting writing- I did think that you were saying that Muhammed Ali had failed to make it, though- which I found confusing. Your notes explain more than the poem itself does. Still, an enjoyable read. Best of luck in the contest. Betty
Comment Written 07-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2011
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I am sorry Betty for the confusion, but the poem was about me and the notes were about Ali. Ali is still alive and is 69 years old. Thanks
Comment from Xuders
I very much like the social issue that this poem takes on. We know so much more about the damage of concussions now, but sports authorities continue to downplay the threat--chiefly because sports is big business.
Good for this author for taking on the sports industry.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2011
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I very much like the social issue that this poem takes on. We know so much more about the damage of concussions now, but sports authorities continue to downplay the threat--chiefly because sports is big business.
Good for this author for taking on the sports industry.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2011
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Thank you for your review. Have a great day.
Comment from homebaker23
Well done with rhymes, used the colors which infer meaning to the structure of the poem. And I agree that boxing is an unhealthy profession.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2011
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Well done with rhymes, used the colors which infer meaning to the structure of the poem. And I agree that boxing is an unhealthy profession.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2011
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Thank you for your review. Boxing is a dangerous sport, but it has always been my favorite sport. You have a world champion from your country, Manny Pacciou (not sure of the spelling). He's one of the best that I've ever watched. Have a good day.
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your welcome.it's Manny Pacquiao. and yes, he is one of a kind. the best of the best...
Comment from daniela.albu
The poem is good, the colors are there but it is rather too long for the requirements of the contest. It rather tells a story in a poem than being a short, colorful one.
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The poem is good, the colors are there but it is rather too long for the requirements of the contest. It rather tells a story in a poem than being a short, colorful one.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2011
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Thanks
Comment from adewpearl
typo - over thier own lives - their
Your quatrains flow well with good abcb rhyming. You use colors, such asblack and blue bruises and greenback dollars effectively to add meaning to your story. Good luck in the contest with an entry that conveys a meaningful message. Brooke
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2011
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typo - over thier own lives - their
Your quatrains flow well with good abcb rhyming. You use colors, such asblack and blue bruises and greenback dollars effectively to add meaning to your story. Good luck in the contest with an entry that conveys a meaningful message. Brooke
Comment Written 07-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2011
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Thank you for your review and for catching the typo. Have a great day.
Comment from Yeti777
A very interesting read and a great story / lesson about involvement in this very difficult and competitive sport. I remember watching Ali as a young boy, and I loved his interviews with Howard Cosell. Great piece. Blessings. Sean
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2011
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A very interesting read and a great story / lesson about involvement in this very difficult and competitive sport. I remember watching Ali as a young boy, and I loved his interviews with Howard Cosell. Great piece. Blessings. Sean
Comment Written 07-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2011
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Thanks Sean for your review. Ali was something in those days. They use to call him "the mouth of the south". Have a great day.
Comment from sierra scribbler
This is great. The working in of the color requirements worked very well. The poem flowed well. I like the fact that it didn't take you long to put the gloves down.
I know that boxing is an amazing sport, but like you said: Is it worth losing our health over?
Nice!
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2011
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This is great. The working in of the color requirements worked very well. The poem flowed well. I like the fact that it didn't take you long to put the gloves down.
I know that boxing is an amazing sport, but like you said: Is it worth losing our health over?
Nice!
Comment Written 07-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2011
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Thank you for your great review. Have a wonderful day. Bill
Comment from jdrhye
Oh yes I remember Mahammed Ali it was tragic the last fight he took on and why, the love of the sport or male fighters ego? I watched the fight and remember it well amoung the great fights of his career, childhood memories. Your flow is good as is the message and story. thnaks for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2011
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Oh yes I remember Mahammed Ali it was tragic the last fight he took on and why, the love of the sport or male fighters ego? I watched the fight and remember it well amoung the great fights of his career, childhood memories. Your flow is good as is the message and story. thnaks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2011
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Thank you for your great review. Have a wonderful day. Bill
Comment from jamesfrancis
interesting. deserves its badge. Thank you for an entertaining and carrying read. My name is Jamesfrancis from Jamesfrancis.nl . check me out and Ill carry on reading through your portfolio :)
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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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interesting. deserves its badge. Thank you for an entertaining and carrying read. My name is Jamesfrancis from Jamesfrancis.nl . check me out and Ill carry on reading through your portfolio :)
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Comment Written 06-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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Thanks for your review. I just posted this poem a few hours ago and it has received 10 excellent reviews and one good review (yours). I would like to ask you for a clarification on why you
rated this poem "good". Thank you.
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i jsut thought it was a good poem mate. It was good! :)
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i jsut thought it was a good poem mate. It was good! :)
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i jsut thought it was a good poem mate. It was good! :)
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it was a good poem. so i marked it good.
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it was a good poem. so i marked it good.
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it was a good poem. so i marked it good.
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it was a good poem. so i marked it good.
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it was a good poem. so i marked it good.
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it was a good poem. so i marked it good.
