To the Fevered Writer Within
Addressed to that other part of me40 total reviews
Comment from Inge_Meldgaard
Great poem! I can relate to it all, except for the 'iambic' reference, that type of meter being beyond me, in most cases :} However, I appreciate the rhythm and rhyming in yours, and the flow is marvellous.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2010
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Great poem! I can relate to it all, except for the 'iambic' reference, that type of meter being beyond me, in most cases :} However, I appreciate the rhythm and rhyming in yours, and the flow is marvellous.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2010
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Thank you so much :-). I think most writers feel this way, at least a little!
Mike
Comment from R. K. Alan
Very nicely done... I liked your turn of phrase, the cadence and the rhythm of the piece... not the one in the mirror. I too struggle with lucid dreams of my characters that seem to flee when I awake. ARGH. Thanks for sharing this with all of us.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2010
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Very nicely done... I liked your turn of phrase, the cadence and the rhythm of the piece... not the one in the mirror. I too struggle with lucid dreams of my characters that seem to flee when I awake. ARGH. Thanks for sharing this with all of us.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2010
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There are few things more irritating than be able to remember that you'd thought up something brilliant, but not what it was! Glad you enjoyed my poem :-)
Mike
Comment from Jenn Starr
This is good and I love the picture! I actually relate to this! I had a pen name when I was 14 or so for all my dark writing because there were times it felt inspired by a part of me I didn't really know- yet some of my greatest writing at this time came from that part of me- so I like this because I understand it- but also because it's actually pretty hood for a rhyming poem- adult poems that rhyme often sound juvenile to me- it's easy and appropriate to write rhyming poems when we're young but it's a feat to do it as an adult- good work
JennStarr*
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2010
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This is good and I love the picture! I actually relate to this! I had a pen name when I was 14 or so for all my dark writing because there were times it felt inspired by a part of me I didn't really know- yet some of my greatest writing at this time came from that part of me- so I like this because I understand it- but also because it's actually pretty hood for a rhyming poem- adult poems that rhyme often sound juvenile to me- it's easy and appropriate to write rhyming poems when we're young but it's a feat to do it as an adult- good work
JennStarr*
Comment Written 17-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2010
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I used to avoid rhyming like the plague, because it tends to promote too jolly an atmosphere for me. However, I've come to see it as just another tool, and when used in an interesting manner it can really accentuate certain phrases to strengthen the poem.
As for the dark side, it's certainly where a lot of the creative energies dwell, I think, perhaps because it plays host to the thoughts and urges we deny ourselves daily. Either way, it makes for some good poetry!
Thanks for the review :-)
Mike
Comment from katz meow
What an outstanding poem, Mike. I was quite impressed by the chain of perfect quatrains-perfect rhyme and meter, with a smooth flow from one stanza to another. And through it all, lets say a thank you to your stubborn muse. An excellent poem...katz meow
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2010
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What an outstanding poem, Mike. I was quite impressed by the chain of perfect quatrains-perfect rhyme and meter, with a smooth flow from one stanza to another. And through it all, lets say a thank you to your stubborn muse. An excellent poem...katz meow
Comment Written 17-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2010
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Thank you, Katz :-). I was surprised to see this piece nominated, but it's a great feeling!
Mike
Comment from patmedium
I felt as if you finished this one too soon, somehow. Am I making sense here? I could relate so strongly and yet I felt you only scratched at the surface of the problem! LOL. Pat. xx
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2010
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I felt as if you finished this one too soon, somehow. Am I making sense here? I could relate so strongly and yet I felt you only scratched at the surface of the problem! LOL. Pat. xx
Comment Written 19-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2010
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lol, thank you, Pat. That sounds like a challenge, and I think I feel a sequel coming on! There is so much more I could have said.
Mike
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I sat and read this and truly felt as if you had only scratched the surface! I wasn't throwiung down the gauntlet, but I DID sit here and thing about this from my own POV ... and realised that mine's a mountain! Then I commented on it! LOL. Pat. xx
Comment from Freespiritaz
Great poem! I would give this six stars but I am all out for the week. I think I am going to have to ration them out more carefully. Wonderful imagery and word choice. I like how you have personified darkness and dawn.
My favorite line: "You twist my nightmares into words"
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2010
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Great poem! I would give this six stars but I am all out for the week. I think I am going to have to ration them out more carefully. Wonderful imagery and word choice. I like how you have personified darkness and dawn.
My favorite line: "You twist my nightmares into words"
Comment Written 19-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2010
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Thank you, Free :-). I'll take a willed six with grateful thanks. I'm so glad you enjoyed my poem!
Mike
Comment from sgalletti
What a wonderfully fun poem with great rhyme and subtle messages throughout about the writing process. It's amazing what happens at night. I wish I was as creative as you and could write an equally creative response. Suffice it to say, I loved it! I spend many nights creating amazing poems that are either captured on the paper next to my bed, lost forever, or found some other way in the morning (not by over shaving I must add!!). LOL...Great piece. Sue
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2010
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What a wonderfully fun poem with great rhyme and subtle messages throughout about the writing process. It's amazing what happens at night. I wish I was as creative as you and could write an equally creative response. Suffice it to say, I loved it! I spend many nights creating amazing poems that are either captured on the paper next to my bed, lost forever, or found some other way in the morning (not by over shaving I must add!!). LOL...Great piece. Sue
Comment Written 19-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2010
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Thank you, Sue :-). You're one of the very few who've noticed the thread of humour running through this one. It's been brewing ever since I wrote that muse poem in response to yours. Have a wicked day, and thanks for the sixer, it's a real confidence booster.
Mike
Comment from Kathryn Varuzza
Mike,
This is such a cool poem.
Great message.
So true, you capture our writerly selves so well.
I love the image.
Good title.
Interesting.
I like the first and the last 2 stanzas the best.
Kathryn
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2010
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Mike,
This is such a cool poem.
Great message.
So true, you capture our writerly selves so well.
I love the image.
Good title.
Interesting.
I like the first and the last 2 stanzas the best.
Kathryn
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2010
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Thank you, Kathryn :-). This certainly seems to be my primary subject recently. What makes us write is a beast both many-coloured and grey, methinks.
Mike
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I like this, Mike, albeit
quite dark - you drew me right
in. I enjoyed everything about
it, the content, the flow to words,
rhythm and rhyme, all excellent.
All in all, most impressive and
deserving of a six.
Margaret
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2010
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I like this, Mike, albeit
quite dark - you drew me right
in. I enjoyed everything about
it, the content, the flow to words,
rhythm and rhyme, all excellent.
All in all, most impressive and
deserving of a six.
Margaret
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2010
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Thank you, Margaret :-). I'm so glad you liked this one. Dark, yes, but also light, as it were. Thanks so much for the fantastic review!
Mike
Comment from krdeering
I believe I can give only two sixes to the same person in the same timeframe--and I just did it for you! After reviewing the other one about your muse, I looked for another post. You have lots of wonderful turns of phrase in this one, but the one that caught my eye/ear first is:
you fill my mind with alchemy
that wears iambic face.
and this entire quatrain:
When dawn awakes to rescue me
with regulated thought,
you shyly tuck your tail and flee
into reclusion bought
Wonderful piece of work. Pretty picture, too.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2010
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I believe I can give only two sixes to the same person in the same timeframe--and I just did it for you! After reviewing the other one about your muse, I looked for another post. You have lots of wonderful turns of phrase in this one, but the one that caught my eye/ear first is:
you fill my mind with alchemy
that wears iambic face.
and this entire quatrain:
When dawn awakes to rescue me
with regulated thought,
you shyly tuck your tail and flee
into reclusion bought
Wonderful piece of work. Pretty picture, too.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2010
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Once again, thank you! I'm bowled over by your wonderful reviews :-) I think this one had been writing itself in my sub-conscious ever since I wrote the other muse-based poem a couple of weeks ago.I'm so glad you enjoyed them both!
Mike
