Tantalizing Eyes
Viewing comments for Chapter 44 "Chapter thirteen; part one"Dishonesty VS Love. Which will win?
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Comment from AmberRose
I enjoy your writing style. the flow is easy and consistant. This is a good chapter and seems to be a solid piece. well done.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2010
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I enjoy your writing style. the flow is easy and consistant. This is a good chapter and seems to be a solid piece. well done.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from minopavlic
Mrs. Wilkey, you certainly have a very distinctive, if not unigue style in your writing. I was made a part of the story and myy interest was captured from the opening.
I'm sorry to be reading this late, just wanted you to know Iill be looking for your next project.
Mino
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2010
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Mrs. Wilkey, you certainly have a very distinctive, if not unigue style in your writing. I was made a part of the story and myy interest was captured from the opening.
I'm sorry to be reading this late, just wanted you to know Iill be looking for your next project.
Mino
Comment Written 26-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from daniela.albu
This excellent romance fiction flows naturally and keeps the reader abreast. Of course Leya could have jut shot her father without killing him but then we would not have the cartel revenge and all the rest for the story to continue at a quick pace.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2010
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This excellent romance fiction flows naturally and keeps the reader abreast. Of course Leya could have jut shot her father without killing him but then we would not have the cartel revenge and all the rest for the story to continue at a quick pace.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from wierdgrace
Oh my god, this is getting so much more exciting, and as always, I truly love your characters, Leya, and Steven, I can picture Hectors body on the floor, what a mystery, what well happen next, You found a perfect picture for the taskforce cabin, I have trouble with that, I am wording on talking some my self. great job my friend, as you know.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2010
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Oh my god, this is getting so much more exciting, and as always, I truly love your characters, Leya, and Steven, I can picture Hectors body on the floor, what a mystery, what well happen next, You found a perfect picture for the taskforce cabin, I have trouble with that, I am wording on talking some my self. great job my friend, as you know.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2010
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Thank you for your review and support.
Comment from axelbeariter
The cabin is somewhere around Jackson Hole, WY. I'll need money for a flight/in interior monologue, she wouldn't think WY-leave that out---If I ask the men, they'll wonder why I'm asking. I wonder if there's a map in Steven's office."/too many wonders-use they'll be curious why I'm asking for the first one---Leya removed her shoes as she walked up the basement stairs/use slinked up or something else for walked-too close to saw Derek walk---Very unusual ending. Well done!
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2010
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The cabin is somewhere around Jackson Hole, WY. I'll need money for a flight/in interior monologue, she wouldn't think WY-leave that out---If I ask the men, they'll wonder why I'm asking. I wonder if there's a map in Steven's office."/too many wonders-use they'll be curious why I'm asking for the first one---Leya removed her shoes as she walked up the basement stairs/use slinked up or something else for walked-too close to saw Derek walk---Very unusual ending. Well done!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2010
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I will recheck those areas. Thank you for your eagle eyes.
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Iâ??ve posted a new story, Whereâ??s my pen? I hope you enjoy it. Axelbeariter
Comment from Harrisa
Leya let her love for Stephen guide her actions. It's too bad her father put her in such a hard situation. Now she has to live with the fact that she killed her father. This is a really good chapter.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2010
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Leya let her love for Stephen guide her actions. It's too bad her father put her in such a hard situation. Now she has to live with the fact that she killed her father. This is a really good chapter.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2010
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I am honored. Thank you for your kind review and the stars.
Comment from zmacgirl
Your chapters just keep getting better and better. I've read several of them and I have really enjoyed each one. I love the strained relationship between Steven and Leya. Great job. I hope they end up living happily ever after.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2010
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Your chapters just keep getting better and better. I've read several of them and I have really enjoyed each one. I love the strained relationship between Steven and Leya. Great job. I hope they end up living happily ever after.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Ann Smith
This story has good details and suspense that make for a fast read. I can see Leya pointing the gun at her father and wondering if she will be able to follow through. I hope Steven will find her and now I'm wondering if there will be revenge? ann
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010
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This story has good details and suspense that make for a fast read. I can see Leya pointing the gun at her father and wondering if she will be able to follow through. I hope Steven will find her and now I'm wondering if there will be revenge? ann
Comment Written 25-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate your support.
Comment from Sharkey
I like the twist in the story...I really was't expecting Leya to kill her father but I think you did it in a way that was believable. good job.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010
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I like the twist in the story...I really was't expecting Leya to kill her father but I think you did it in a way that was believable. good job.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is another very well written chapter from you. i am getting a kick out of reading your story. i am going to miss this book when you are done with it. great job
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010
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this is another very well written chapter from you. i am getting a kick out of reading your story. i am going to miss this book when you are done with it. great job
Comment Written 25-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010
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My next post is about another Task Force man, but you will still see or hear about how these characters are doing. Matt and Dani are from my first manuscript. The next hero is Joe. Thank you for your kind review.
