Blind Trust
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Comment from Readywriter52
I think it great that Cathy survived the fall with only a broken leg and other minor injuries. It was thrilling when she woke up and she could see. This is a great ending. My only question is what happened to Norman? Did he die in the fall or did Kip rip his throat out? Both would be wonderful endings for a man like him. Does Ruby propose to her?
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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I think it great that Cathy survived the fall with only a broken leg and other minor injuries. It was thrilling when she woke up and she could see. This is a great ending. My only question is what happened to Norman? Did he die in the fall or did Kip rip his throat out? Both would be wonderful endings for a man like him. Does Ruby propose to her?
Comment Written 25-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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Hey Ready,
Well, Norman died. I guess I'll have to do a bit of editing on the ending to make sure that's clear.
Thank you so much for your support, it meant so much!
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment from c_lucas
An excellent finish and I was totally unprepared for the ending. This is very well written with very good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good job.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2010
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An excellent finish and I was totally unprepared for the ending. This is very well written with very good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good job.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2010
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Hey Charlie,
I've been waiting for your input on this one and I'm thrilled you liked it.
Charlie, what a wonderful time it's been, getting your input, your ideas and seeing your enjoyment of this story. You make my heart sing.
Thank you,
Gayle
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You're welcome, Gayle. Charlie
Comment from NeuralSplyce
Another well written chapter. Much better executed than the last one.
Were you intending for Cathy to be in a coma and then changed it to being blind? When she wakes up she is extremely disoriented and everyone acts like she's been comatose. If not, then they are way too emotional about her waking up and she hasn't even announced her vision has returned. Also, why jump the story forward one week unless she has been comatose. Why not mention she's blind the day after the accident?
Nothing for so long and now this? - this sentence seems like the narrator is injecting themselves into the story. The previous sentence shows their feelings.
Streams of doggie delight flowed as Kip talked - very long sentence
A huge dog, a Doberman, yet, lay across the bed - do we really need to know or care about the nurse's thoughts? If not, this paragraph can be cut
now that somehow, wow,(.) Kip,(.) ouch,(.) oh, my poor leg." - I'd say most these should be indidual sentences otherwise they come off as a single spoken sentence
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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2010
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Another well written chapter. Much better executed than the last one.
Were you intending for Cathy to be in a coma and then changed it to being blind? When she wakes up she is extremely disoriented and everyone acts like she's been comatose. If not, then they are way too emotional about her waking up and she hasn't even announced her vision has returned. Also, why jump the story forward one week unless she has been comatose. Why not mention she's blind the day after the accident?
Nothing for so long and now this? - this sentence seems like the narrator is injecting themselves into the story. The previous sentence shows their feelings.
Streams of doggie delight flowed as Kip talked - very long sentence
A huge dog, a Doberman, yet, lay across the bed - do we really need to know or care about the nurse's thoughts? If not, this paragraph can be cut
now that somehow, wow,(.) Kip,(.) ouch,(.) oh, my poor leg." - I'd say most these should be indidual sentences otherwise they come off as a single spoken sentence
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Comment Written 25-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2010
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Hey Mike,
Yeah, she's been in a coma for a little over a week but she's always been blind throughout the story. I think your questions come from just picking up the story.
It isn't so much that we care about the nurse's thoughts when she sees the dog on the bed, it's her reaction that's comical.
When Cathy is speaking, she injecting her feelings about the dog lying on her damaged leg.
Hey, Mike, thanks a bunch.
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment from Sasha
What a superb ending! I was not expecting this and am in tears from the joy I feel. You have done a marvelous job with this whole book. I enjoyed it immensely and thank you so much for sharing it with all of us. This is definitely one of the best I have read on FS. Absolutely marvelous writing, terrific story, and perfect ending. What more can I possibly say!
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2010
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What a superb ending! I was not expecting this and am in tears from the joy I feel. You have done a marvelous job with this whole book. I enjoyed it immensely and thank you so much for sharing it with all of us. This is definitely one of the best I have read on FS. Absolutely marvelous writing, terrific story, and perfect ending. What more can I possibly say!
Comment Written 25-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2010
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Well, Sasha, I'm in tears at your review. Thank you so much, not only for the kind words of encouragement, but for the support as I struggled through this.
Love you bunches,
Gayle
Comment from shelley kaye
a week?!?? well how were they found? by rudy? and where's nathan? WAAAAAIT!!!!!!!!!!! you sooo can't end the book here! one more chapter! WHERE IS NATHAN?!?? he was a good guy!
okay okay surprised the ehck outta me there lol - kinda 'saw' her getting her eyesight back when she woke up
anyway didn't notice any spaggies or typos
but please ya gotta do one more chapter telling about nathan! :)
thanx for sharing!
shelley :)
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2010
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a week?!?? well how were they found? by rudy? and where's nathan? WAAAAAIT!!!!!!!!!!! you sooo can't end the book here! one more chapter! WHERE IS NATHAN?!?? he was a good guy!
okay okay surprised the ehck outta me there lol - kinda 'saw' her getting her eyesight back when she woke up
anyway didn't notice any spaggies or typos
but please ya gotta do one more chapter telling about nathan! :)
thanx for sharing!
shelley :)
Comment Written 25-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2010
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Weeel, my little Cali Gurl, Nathan dies with Norman when they fall off the deck. That was part of the reason why I didn't want the characters to take over the story but they did and this is their thingy! I wanted to give more to Norman/Nathan, et al, but they said no. Pushy, aren't they?
I still have to edit and you, my darling little friend, will not only have your poem entered, you'll be the dedication object!
Love you, sweet thing, all these years, you've been so wonderful. Knowing this is the last book I publish makes this especially bitter sweet for me.
Hugs and love,
Gayle
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nooo! not the last! write more!!!!
Comment from minopavlic
What can I say other than that the author within her brilliant creativity, has made an influencial and impactful statement within this wonderful poem,that radiates inspiration to those of faith
May God continue to embrace you in the folds of His robe
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2010
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What can I say other than that the author within her brilliant creativity, has made an influencial and impactful statement within this wonderful poem,that radiates inspiration to those of faith
May God continue to embrace you in the folds of His robe
Comment Written 25-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2010
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Thank you so much for enjoying this chapter. Hope to hear from you again,
Gayle
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Count on it Gayle.
Comment from Korton
Somehow I knew when I started this chapter with Cathy in a coma what the outcome would be. Wonderful ending, although I am unable to put on the six that it richly deserves. As a post script, could you at least tell us what happende to Norman. Very well done.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2010
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Somehow I knew when I started this chapter with Cathy in a coma what the outcome would be. Wonderful ending, although I am unable to put on the six that it richly deserves. As a post script, could you at least tell us what happende to Norman. Very well done.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2010
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You little rascal, you always know! I can't fool you for a moment. Ah, you're wonderful and I can't thank you enough. I think I'll have to put in a post script, for sure. Everyone wants to know what happened o o Norman!
What a great birthday, huh? Thanks for the hugs and best wishes,
Gayle
Comment from jrsimms29
I didn't read the previous chapters so I can't comment on story flow etc. but this chapter is an engaging read. Things are a bit ambiguous when Cathy wakes up--I like how suddenly it happens, but I think a couple extra sentences of clarification could help.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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I didn't read the previous chapters so I can't comment on story flow etc. but this chapter is an engaging read. Things are a bit ambiguous when Cathy wakes up--I like how suddenly it happens, but I think a couple extra sentences of clarification could help.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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Ah, I know what you mean. It's really difficult to read a last chapter. Cathy's been blind for more than a decade, due to a fall.
Thank you so much for stopping by and for the fine comments,
Gayle
Comment from Valkarie
A very good piece of writing which flows so well, is concise and is very visual in content. I think your piece is a powerful write indeed, with an artistic flow thrown into it and is also intriguing. It kept me glued to the screen until the very last word. Your characterization is very good and come alive so well in this story.
Valkarie...
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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A very good piece of writing which flows so well, is concise and is very visual in content. I think your piece is a powerful write indeed, with an artistic flow thrown into it and is also intriguing. It kept me glued to the screen until the very last word. Your characterization is very good and come alive so well in this story.
Valkarie...
Comment Written 25-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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I just love your name! Thanks so much for the wonderful review. I think you gave me another great review for the third or fourth chapter.
Thank you for the kind words,
Gayle
Comment from InHisownwrite
I love your imagery, and the way you say things..I wanted to keep reading till i found out what was happenning to Cathy.. How she got there, what was the illness, etc...
also love ("I don't know how or why, but I can see again."
What's the next chapter about? Makes you want to turn the page to find out... Bryan
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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I love your imagery, and the way you say things..I wanted to keep reading till i found out what was happenning to Cathy.. How she got there, what was the illness, etc...
also love ("I don't know how or why, but I can see again."
What's the next chapter about? Makes you want to turn the page to find out... Bryan
Comment Written 25-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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Ah, Bryan, that was the last chapter. Cathy fell down a flight of steps and that accident caused her blindness. She's been blind for over a decade, then has a miracle.
If you want, you can go to the beginning and read. You don't need to review, just enjoy.
Again, thank you for the wonderful comments.
Gayle
