Comment from poetknowit

Excellent

This is a beautifully picturesque poem!

I bet they know, more than many humans, what the season is all about!

One question: On the first line of the 2nd stanza, did you mean to say "Eyes of the seahorses" (plural)?

 Comment Written 23-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 24-Dec-2009

Thanks so much for a wonderful review. "Eyes of the seahorse" is probably grammatically correct. Happy holidays. Elaine

Comment from patmedium

Good

I can see this as a story in a child's poetry book... why isn't it longer? Or perhaps some follow-ups? It's dissappointingly short! merry christmas

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 Comment Written 22-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2009

I like your idea of a childrens' book, yes, what a wonderful idea. Thanks! Elaine

Comment from Charlene0513

Excellent

To mermaids,
A lovely description of the sea and its aquatic aminals that own the sea. A gentle reminder to give admiration/respect to such beatuiful specimens.
Charlene

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2009

Thanks for reading and a lovely review. Elaine

Comment from Dom G Robles

Excellent

Mermaids, your poem is great. You have a keen imagination.
I like more of your second stanza in which you said: Eyes of the seahorse sparkle..." Further, your last stanza, "The seahorse gaze at the stars..." More luck to you

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2009

Thanks for reading and glad you enjoyed this seahorse Christmas.
Elaine

Comment from CT Brandon

Excellent

I think this is an excellent poem. This is a refreshing change of pace from the standard Christmas poems. "Swimming in and out of a coral castle" seemed to throw off the meter a little bit for me in its stanza, but that may just be me. Still a great poem.

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2009

Thanks for reading and suggesting the line maybe out of meter. My poems are works in progress and thanks for reviewing. Elaine

Comment from evela

Excellent

I can tell, with this poem, that you enjoy writing as well as wearing your other hats! It's like you're writing for your students... That's what I'm assuming anyway!
It was creatively and marvelously written! Keep it up!

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 19-Dec-2009

Thanks for reading about the seahorses, just a poem that has been in my head for awhile. Elaine

Comment from BJean

Excellent

I can see their beauty singing now to our creator. Sea horses fasinate me. This is a lovely poem about this wonderful creation. Good job. Love, Jean

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 19-Dec-2009

Yes, seahorses are fascinating and beautiful to watch. Thanks so much for reading and a lovely review. Elaine

Comment from wheelswrites

Excellent

This is a magic poem of sweet images. Can see everything clearly. Let these creatures of the sea sing of Christmas and our Creator soft and loud. Like you writing very much. Can't edit something with a bad review that is so well done.

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 19-Dec-2009

Thanks for such a lovely review and making my day. The seahorses are fascinating creatures and I love writing about them. Elaine

Comment from jlivory

Excellent

mermaids,

This is a very interesting piece of work. My favorite lines are,

"Eyes of the seahorse sparkle,
sharing meals of shrimp and brine,
all gathering together,
forming a long line."

Very good write!

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2009

Thanks! Elaine

Comment from Eternal Muse

Excellent

You brought some nice oceanic imagery into this Christmas holiday; as the one who loves the ocean, I rejoiced in this poem. Lots of good word choices; favorite lines:

Swimming in and out of a coral castle,
greeting octopus and stingray,
singing tunes of Christmas joy,
retreating to a warm bay.

I liked that the seashores are singing to the Creator. They do!

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 17-Dec-2009

This is an idea that has been in my mind for quite sometime. So glad you enjoyed this unusual Christmas poem. Elaine