Joy and Pain
a poem about the importance of love16 total reviews
Comment from Gloria ....
This is poem rich in imagery and emotion. Your use of strong verbs and nouns develop an atmosphere of the arcing that occurs to create the spark of life.
Very well done here.
Gloria
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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This is poem rich in imagery and emotion. Your use of strong verbs and nouns develop an atmosphere of the arcing that occurs to create the spark of life.
Very well done here.
Gloria
Comment Written 29-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Thanks, Gloria. Your comments mean a lot to me.
Joan
Comment from irishauthorme
An intense work and it did seem to be reminiscent of something I had read or heard before.
I got the picture of someone still feeling the pain of lost love, and the manner in which the pain opens our eyes to everything around us and affecting us.
Your last verse is great and true. Without the opposites, we would not be able to feel joy, and laughter would be meaningless.
Good work,
irish
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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An intense work and it did seem to be reminiscent of something I had read or heard before.
I got the picture of someone still feeling the pain of lost love, and the manner in which the pain opens our eyes to everything around us and affecting us.
Your last verse is great and true. Without the opposites, we would not be able to feel joy, and laughter would be meaningless.
Good work,
irish
Comment Written 29-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Thanks for reading and reviewing. It was inspired by the song " I am a Rock" by Simon and Garfunkel.
Joan
Comment from royowen
Beautifully written Joan, you're absolutely correct joy without pain and one has got nothing to compare it with. Sorrow unending and I think we get a good idea of Hom good joy is, if and when we experience it. Beautifully written. Joan, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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Beautifully written Joan, you're absolutely correct joy without pain and one has got nothing to compare it with. Sorrow unending and I think we get a good idea of Hom good joy is, if and when we experience it. Beautifully written. Joan, blessings Roy
Comment Written 29-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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Thanks for taking the time to read and comment on my poem, Roy.
I am glad you liked it.
Joan
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Well done
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Welcome Joan
Comment from Telperion
"No pain, no gain" the saying goes.
Ok, I understand - no rhyme, no style - so it's a free form.
But you can keep a similarity for "rocks crumble/island erodes" in almost all verses by using the exact same ending for all first 3 verses.
I re-read it a few times but it's very confusing, no clear path of thoughts: joy, loneliness, love, crying, memories, etc. All mingle and it's very hard to understand if one thing brings you joy, makes you cry, or both.
Maybe this was the desired effect, but I don't think so.
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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2009
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"No pain, no gain" the saying goes.
Ok, I understand - no rhyme, no style - so it's a free form.
But you can keep a similarity for "rocks crumble/island erodes" in almost all verses by using the exact same ending for all first 3 verses.
I re-read it a few times but it's very confusing, no clear path of thoughts: joy, loneliness, love, crying, memories, etc. All mingle and it's very hard to understand if one thing brings you joy, makes you cry, or both.
Maybe this was the desired effect, but I don't think so.
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Comment Written 05-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2009
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Thanks for the honest review. I am sorry you didn't understand is. The rocks crumbling/islands eroding are a metaphor for walls you put around your heart to keep you from loving again after a painful breakup. It also states the questions you have about starting a new relationship that may end the same. Also the rocks/island is the opposite of the I am a Rock, I am an island repitition in the song I am a Rock. As the last verse verse is to be the opposite of A rock feels to pain and an island never cries.
Thanks again
dragonpoet
Comment from koyoga
Interesting motivation! Your point is well made that we need pain to experience joy. This is very thought provoking and well done. Thank you for sharing you work.
Lesa (koyoga)
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2009
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Interesting motivation! Your point is well made that we need pain to experience joy. This is very thought provoking and well done. Thank you for sharing you work.
Lesa (koyoga)
Comment Written 05-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2009
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THank you. I am glad you liked it enough to give it 5 stars.
Happy Holidays.
Joan
Comment from Sloughi
That was just fantastic!! I touched my heart and soul as I am sure it will many folk 'who have been there' as I have. Thank you so much for the pleasure in reading this
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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2009
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That was just fantastic!! I touched my heart and soul as I am sure it will many folk 'who have been there' as I have. Thank you so much for the pleasure in reading this
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Comment Written 05-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2009
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Thank you for the high praise.
Joan
