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Dishonesty VS Love. Which will win?

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Comment from bc1yax
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another enjoyable - the big paddle out this time - string the pot - now is the time for marriage -- or not -- ??
- story was smooth to read - no spag -
-- most enjoyable -

-- bc1yax

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2009

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    Thank you for your review and continued support.
Comment from Nicnac
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I don't trust Leya either. I think Steven is probably stepping into a heap of trouble.

This woman is too eager to marry. I'm not sure of her reasoning and I think Steven should listen to his instincts - plus, I want him. At least he isn't going to taint himself by sleeping with her. ;)

A great post. I have no suggestions. Everything flows smoothly and kept my interest in this short chapter.

Nic

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2009

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    Thank you for your review and appreciate your continued support.
Comment from mjfande
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I love the writing. Everything flows very nicely. Excellent job at hinting that something more may happen with Leya and Steven further along, but not saying wether it will be bad or good. It was very enjoyable to read.

Good luck in your writing.

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2009

reply by the author on 21-Sep-2009
    Thank you for your review. I appreciate your kind words. Both good and bad happens so you are very wise.
Comment from utopian_dream_x
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This is a good chapter. You have included some really great character body language in your descriptions. Your dialogue also dominates your writing, making this chapter a fast read. Good job!

utopian_dream_x

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2009

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    Thank you for your review. I appreciate your kind words.
Comment from oledihard
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This is my first time reading and reviewing your work. I'd just like to tell you that I was immediately drawn into the story even though I have no idea what's going on in previous chapters. That tells you right there that you can write. I have the urge to go back now and catch-up on what I've missed. I'm glad I stopped by. Thanks for perking my interest. Looking forward to more.

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2009

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    Thank you for your review. I hope you continue to drop by.
Comment from jadapenn
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Hi, girlfriend, this was a jolly good fast paced chapter. Poor Steven is now in the thick of things and I wonder how long he will last before he succumbs to the lady's charms.
Very sweet story. luv jada

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2009

reply by the author on 21-Sep-2009
    We'll have to wait and see. Love hearing from you, thank you for dropping by.
Comment from scarletv11
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I liked this chapter a lot and its the only one I've read from your book. I will go back and read the other ones as soon as I can. Keep on writing.

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2009

reply by the author on 21-Sep-2009
    Thank you for your review. I hope you continue reading.
Comment from fictionwriter
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Another interesting chapter. I don't know if I'd do something like that just to keep the girl safe. It's only asking for trouble. Well done.

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2009

reply by the author on 20-Sep-2009
    You are so right. Thank you for your review and continued support.
Comment from Freeflyer
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Why is it that I agree with Steven? I can't seem to trust Leya. Has she an agenda beyond what she is telling? Ah, well, I will just have to read on.
Great writing.
Freeflyer

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2009

reply by the author on 20-Sep-2009
    I'll never tell, if I do you won't read. Thank you for your review. I appreciate your continued support.
Comment from wierdgrace
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Your writing in this story works so well the structure, the chapters, the dialogue, and I love the characters, and the way they keep me glued to every word you write, I think I know what is going to happen next and you surprise me. Great story.

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2009

reply by the author on 20-Sep-2009
    Thank you for your review and kind words. I appreciate your continued support.