Quaterns: Observations on Life
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "The Swan"Assorted Reflections
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Comment from laurelp
Your poetry always amazes me. The grace and beauty without the over sweet syrupy words always finds a most appreciated audience from me.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Your poetry always amazes me. The grace and beauty without the over sweet syrupy words always finds a most appreciated audience from me.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Laurel, Thank you for that comment about not being syrupy sweet - if I ever cross that line, please shoot me! LOL Thank you also for your wonderfully generous review - I am most appreciative :-) Brooke
Comment from colinlinder
"In spellbound captivation's hold,
I watched beguiled without a word"
You have such a way with words! Very well done. Did you write the poem about the picture, or find the picture to fit the poem I wonder?
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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"In spellbound captivation's hold,
I watched beguiled without a word"
You have such a way with words! Very well done. Did you write the poem about the picture, or find the picture to fit the poem I wonder?
Comment Written 02-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Thank you, Colin. I wrote the poem first. This illustration was the only one at fan art that had swans and lily pads in the same picture. I love her art but really wanted a picture with just one single swan. Brooke :-)
Comment from rmdelta
Brooke,
again, you have mastered this writing with your overpowering way of writing. This was a really nice story and one anybody can easily understand. Great work, my friend.
Reggie
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Brooke,
again, you have mastered this writing with your overpowering way of writing. This was a really nice story and one anybody can easily understand. Great work, my friend.
Reggie
Comment Written 02-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Thank you, Reggie. I'm so glad you enjoyed this :-) I hope you're feeling well today. Brooke
Comment from N.C.Dent
At the risk of telling you what you already know, I point out a special talent you possess. Your ability to adjust your "voice" to the mood, ambiance and circumstance of your chosen setting gives power to words that are elegant in their own right. Whether instinctive or by design, you consistently write at a level far above what most of us struggle to achieve only occasionally. This is exquisite. Appreciatively, Nick.
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At the risk of telling you what you already know, I point out a special talent you possess. Your ability to adjust your "voice" to the mood, ambiance and circumstance of your chosen setting gives power to words that are elegant in their own right. Whether instinctive or by design, you consistently write at a level far above what most of us struggle to achieve only occasionally. This is exquisite. Appreciatively, Nick.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Nick, good morning - I hope you know that comments like these just totally brighten my day - it poured all night here and now it is all dismal outside, and your words just have sunshine spilling all over the place. Thank you, dear friend. Brooke :-)
Comment from c_lucas
The sight of swan swimming is very pleasing. One could easily achieve the state of serenity. This is very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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The sight of swan swimming is very pleasing. One could easily achieve the state of serenity. This is very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Thanks so much, Charlie, for your lovely comments, and good morning! Brooke :-)
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You're welcome, Brooke. Charlie
Comment from Soulester
Hi, Brooke! I love how your first line quietly makes the circuit of this poem. The image of the lily pad path (say that really fast five times!) is gorgeous. "Creature curvilinear" also caught my fancy. This was a joy to open this morning. Mary
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Hi, Brooke! I love how your first line quietly makes the circuit of this poem. The image of the lily pad path (say that really fast five times!) is gorgeous. "Creature curvilinear" also caught my fancy. This was a joy to open this morning. Mary
Comment Written 02-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Mary, thank you. Glad you like the word choices, and I'm here to tell you I'm pretty darned good at saying tongue twisters. LOL Brooke :-)
Comment from debskatz
Hi brooke,
how beautiful! i can just picture that gorgeous swan gliding over the water's surface & being completely captivated by it. Good job!
it's wild how so exquisite they are on the water & what mean devils they are out of it! i had one attack me one time for no good reason. thank goodness he was behind a fence (in disneyworld), but he still tried to take a big bite out of my shoe!
anyway, thank you for sharing this beautiful poem with us!
smiles,
deb
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Hi brooke,
how beautiful! i can just picture that gorgeous swan gliding over the water's surface & being completely captivated by it. Good job!
it's wild how so exquisite they are on the water & what mean devils they are out of it! i had one attack me one time for no good reason. thank goodness he was behind a fence (in disneyworld), but he still tried to take a big bite out of my shoe!
anyway, thank you for sharing this beautiful poem with us!
smiles,
deb
Comment Written 02-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Deb, I am going to collect a list of all the people on site who've had nasty run ins with swans so you can all get in touch and form a support group! LOL Thanks so much, Brooke :-)
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ahhhh, so i'm not the only one!! LOL
Comment from Nescher Pyscher
I liked it!
You ever pissed a swan off, though? MEAN doggone birds. They'll bite your feet off!
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Good poem, Brooke!
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I liked it!
You ever pissed a swan off, though? MEAN doggone birds. They'll bite your feet off!
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Good poem, Brooke!
Comment Written 02-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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You are among several people to tell me that they can get all hissy and bitey. LOL You are supposed to suspend disbelief and just think of them as my serenely regal fairy tale bird!!! :-) Thanks so much, dear friend. Brooke :-)
Comment from Peter@Poole
I had forgotten the quatern's form, and have not written one, even after seeing some sublime creations from your pen, Brooke. I thought what a strange commencing line, which certainly aroused my curiosity, and then the subsequent stanzas, with the first line becoming second, and so on, made the poet's thinking clear. As usual, ryme, metre, alliteration and other poetic devices draw the reader in. Well done. Peter
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I had forgotten the quatern's form, and have not written one, even after seeing some sublime creations from your pen, Brooke. I thought what a strange commencing line, which certainly aroused my curiosity, and then the subsequent stanzas, with the first line becoming second, and so on, made the poet's thinking clear. As usual, ryme, metre, alliteration and other poetic devices draw the reader in. Well done. Peter
Comment Written 02-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Peter, thank you. I love this form's repeating and floating line. You should try one some day since you do so well with the triolet's repeating lines :-) Brooke
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I will try, and that soon. Of the poets I've met so far on FS, you are the only one who inspires me. This is not flattery; it wouldn't avail me anything if it were.
Comment from Domino
Dramati repeated line in this 'repeatythingy', Brooke.
I nearly choked on 'curvilinear' to start, but after retrieving my tongue from my throat, I fitted in into the perfect flow. ;-).
Excellent alliteration, rhyme and poetically dreamy content.
Best wishes, Ray xx
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Dramati repeated line in this 'repeatythingy', Brooke.
I nearly choked on 'curvilinear' to start, but after retrieving my tongue from my throat, I fitted in into the perfect flow. ;-).
Excellent alliteration, rhyme and poetically dreamy content.
Best wishes, Ray xx
Comment Written 02-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Curvilinear is such a beautiful word - I'm so glad you didn't choke on it in the end. :-) Thanks so much, Ray :-) Brooke
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Sound loke a Roman Caesar with a lispe. haha! xx
