A Lasting Peace Without the Tears
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "[The longest] Poem for World Peace"Simply my feelings towards a lasting one.
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Comment from Pili Pubul
Peace starts with each one of us, I say!
When everyone of us can realize this...
There will be world peace one day!
What you say is so true ! But is it possible to achieve?, if we look throughout history, unfortunately is not too encouraging. I still think that your message is very important. If just you can achieve inner peace, it is a great achievement indeed !
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2007
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Peace starts with each one of us, I say!
When everyone of us can realize this...
There will be world peace one day!
What you say is so true ! But is it possible to achieve?, if we look throughout history, unfortunately is not too encouraging. I still think that your message is very important. If just you can achieve inner peace, it is a great achievement indeed !
Comment Written 15-Aug-2007
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2007
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I feel it could be possible but it would require wisdom understanding and tolerance to some extent. Also benevolence. Thank you very much for your review and comploments.
Comment from sngldad4gd
This is a great poem for peace and is this the one you put on the banner? I put two actually, one was from a dear friend in Australia who I promised I would post it there for her and mine I posted on the map part by Kitchener, Canada. I went there last year and it was quite a learning experience, glad to see you had a great time there, it is a once in a lifetime or should be tried at least once experience for sure. Did Tony Orlando run the show again and bring that harpist from Italy? That was the best rendition of "Nights In White Satin" I ever heard, wow on a harp. Your poem was a great one and wow, your authors notes, sound so much like what I went through and your right, you have to find your own peace for sure. Ray :>)
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2007
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This is a great poem for peace and is this the one you put on the banner? I put two actually, one was from a dear friend in Australia who I promised I would post it there for her and mine I posted on the map part by Kitchener, Canada. I went there last year and it was quite a learning experience, glad to see you had a great time there, it is a once in a lifetime or should be tried at least once experience for sure. Did Tony Orlando run the show again and bring that harpist from Italy? That was the best rendition of "Nights In White Satin" I ever heard, wow on a harp. Your poem was a great one and wow, your authors notes, sound so much like what I went through and your right, you have to find your own peace for sure. Ray :>)
Comment Written 15-Aug-2007
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2007
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Yes, this is the one that I put on the banner. The convention was is a once in a life time expirience, but if I can afford it, I shall be there again. I was shocked at the attendence and the fact that it was truely a world event. I had heard about Tony Orlando, but he wasn't there, the enterainment was Louie Anderson the comedian who had me cramped with laughter and Rubben Studdard from American Idol fame.
Daughters and step-daughters can make life interesting at times. We had talked before about this. Thank you so much for your review and compliments.
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yeah Ruben was there last year as well, he's quite the entertainer for sure. Have a great night, me off
Comment from VICTIMEYES
a very fine statement,
There will be world peace one day!
there would be but there wont be, but the idea will only live on in our hopes and dreams.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2007
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a very fine statement,
There will be world peace one day!
there would be but there wont be, but the idea will only live on in our hopes and dreams.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2007
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2007
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Well, with our beliefs there certainly should be. I like to think of hopes and dreams as a good start, that is why we are here; to remind others of this. Thank you very much for your review and sentiments.
Comment from Jonathan Hawk
This was a really good read for me because the sentiments are in the proper place with your great message that reads without a problem.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2007
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This was a really good read for me because the sentiments are in the proper place with your great message that reads without a problem.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2007
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2007
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Thank you very much for your review and compliments.
Comment from Moira's Amethyst
Very creative with a lot of insight.
There wasn't a thing to critique nor
point out in the spag department.
Your word choices fit well with the mood of it all
and I applaud your efforts.
Best wishes~Kaff ~|: > )
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2007
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Very creative with a lot of insight.
There wasn't a thing to critique nor
point out in the spag department.
Your word choices fit well with the mood of it all
and I applaud your efforts.
Best wishes~Kaff ~|: > )
Comment Written 15-Aug-2007
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2007
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Kaff Kaff, I feel that I did my best with this one. There was SPAG, just that someone beat you out on finding it and I was quick. Thank you very much for your review.
Comment from cecil
Good poem.
The differing structures within the one poem threw me a bit, but the read was still fluid.
The realization the evil exists and sometimes we must fight to overcome it is a nice thought. Shedding our own weaknesses and putting peace first would be a good start to making this world a better place.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2007
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Good poem.
The differing structures within the one poem threw me a bit, but the read was still fluid.
The realization the evil exists and sometimes we must fight to overcome it is a nice thought. Shedding our own weaknesses and putting peace first would be a good start to making this world a better place.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2007
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2007
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Thank you very much for your compliments and review. As far as structure, I do my best but try not to sacrifice the meaning. A trick that I picked up is to keep the structure the same within the stanza so that it still has good flow.
Comment from Indigo
Hello Mike xxx
i'll give you 5 stars just because you took the time to write something about world peace :). Funny though - the title had me ready for a long read - but your poem was short - and for me, in that was a message... that we spend so little time thinking about world peace, that the longest poem for world peace is 11 lines. It makes a statement just by being that lenght. After reading the author's note, you do however understand where it all originated.
Well done xx
Indi xx
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2007
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Hello Mike xxx
i'll give you 5 stars just because you took the time to write something about world peace :). Funny though - the title had me ready for a long read - but your poem was short - and for me, in that was a message... that we spend so little time thinking about world peace, that the longest poem for world peace is 11 lines. It makes a statement just by being that lenght. After reading the author's note, you do however understand where it all originated.
Well done xx
Indi xx
Comment Written 15-Aug-2007
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2007
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Thank you very much for your compliments and review. I really didn't mean to fool people, but that worked out fine. The sadness is, could acheiving peace could possibly be this short? Can the golden rule apply to nations as well?
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Hy Mike,
Please dont see this as fooling anyone - I really thought that was very clever. If you can make people question life - then you've written a great poem. I wrote a poem called addiction - the title fooled many reader... it's what I wanted - because you dont get what you expect - its called art :).
Comment from Susan E. Pennycuff
Sadly that day will not come until this world is no more
we can shout solutions, cry for peace and open doors
but the truth will always be the same, war is inevitable
life on earth will never change, we'll always live in trouble
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2007
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Sadly that day will not come until this world is no more
we can shout solutions, cry for peace and open doors
but the truth will always be the same, war is inevitable
life on earth will never change, we'll always live in trouble
Comment Written 15-Aug-2007
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2007
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I fear that you are right. With the present situation, I feel that it is a question of degree and sacrifice. Sometimes the desire for peace can over ride our sense of duty and put the inevitable off only to have to deal with it later at a much higher cost. WWII compared with the lower intensity ones. It takes a lot of wisdom to pick and choose. Thank you very much for your review.
Comment from Trena One Who Cares
Hi Mikie this is a beautiful poem for world peace I think you did a great job conveying your feelings. Good rhythm and flow throughout this well written piece. Your foot note was very interesting read,maybe you need to write the story? Trena
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2007
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Hi Mikie this is a beautiful poem for world peace I think you did a great job conveying your feelings. Good rhythm and flow throughout this well written piece. Your foot note was very interesting read,maybe you need to write the story? Trena
Comment Written 15-Aug-2007
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2007
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Eventually, I may write that up as a story, because the greater part would be the step-daughter and not giving up for her future. I just put in enough information to convey my thoughts. Thank you very much for your compliments and review.
Comment from mayflowerbg
A powerful second stanza, my favorite.
Some SPAG:
They'll be world peace one day!>>>There'll be...>>>Or>>> There will be...
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2007
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A powerful second stanza, my favorite.
Some SPAG:
They'll be world peace one day!>>>There'll be...>>>Or>>> There will be...
Comment Written 15-Aug-2007
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2007
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Your right about the SPAG and I have corrected it. Thank you for bringing it up and allowing me to do the fix. The second stanza was the sticking point and required much thought, there are so many reasons and excuses people use for not being peaceful, but I thought that most boiled down to those qualities. With my own little war going on, I realized that it really wasn't my wish to pursue agression, but it ended up a neccessity and at least solved the problem. I decided not to put in my next choice because it really wouldn't be in keeping with the point of the poem. Also, thank you for your compliments and review.
