Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

Yes, how exactly did she solve it, Jim?:)) He's banged to rights as long as Alan or the detective can get to him quickly. You've conveyed a real gut- wrenching scene as they watch the tapes, compounded by his infuriating jingle. I'd want to strangle the 'shithead.' Love the name-calling which is a nice way to relieve tension all round. A good background here of why people offend and the lies they perpetrate to cover their shame. This is a very well considered and engaging chapter with a strong message at the heart that family love and support can overcome obstacles such as this. And a little police intervention. Well done, Jim. Debbie

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2024

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024

Thanks so much, Debbie. You can use your imagination on that first question!

I wasn't sure about that name-calling, as it may seem out of character and offensive to some; however, I think you caught the spirit with which it was intended. It showed that Alan was comfortable enough with his family to be able to express what was going through his mind, unfiltered, and that they would understand and know he doesn't often swear. Ginnie realized that and played right along, then it only seemed right to have Tommy add his two cents. It served as a stress-reliever in a tense atmosphere when they could all laugh about it. (This is similar to how my family might have behaved when I was growing up!)

Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill

Excellent

I posted : "What is that smell" today. What will Warren have to say in his defense I wonder? The Patent lawyer can post it Immediately. I doubt someone that uses a dullard like Warren for the thief will have the wit to patent quickly if ever. Karen

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2024

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024

I learned quite a bit about the patenting process in my research for this story. We shall see if the process is as straightforward as one might think. Nice assumption about Warren, but there are other ways to make money from what he did.

I'll check out your posting soon.

reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 17-Apr-2024

Thanks for the read and kindness. Marilyn Hamilton is in the hospital. She fell. Spread the word.

Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill

Excellent

I posted : "What is that smell" today. What will Warren have to say in his defense I wonder? The Patent lawyer can post it Immediately. I doubt someone that uses a dullard like Warren for the thief will have the wit to patent quickly if ever. Karen

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2024

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

Another good chapter, Jim. Things don't look as dark as they might have done. It looks as if Alan has covered his bases, and with Ginnie at his side to offer - encouragement (hmm...hmmm), he should come through this stronger than ever.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2024

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024

Thanks, Tony. There will be a few unseen challenges coming up which may prove to be even more difficult than what he faced in Part 1.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

So they've got Warren sone cold, he certainly has made a mess of his life, I can tell you, I only just held my life together, I didn't actually commit any crime, but we could have been better, but that's 40 years ago now, great story, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2024

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024

Thanks, Roy. We can only hope Warren eventually chooses to go the way you did, but he hasn't reached bottom yet and will figure large in the rest of the story.

reply by royowen on 17-Apr-2024

Yep, I do too, although he?s not real, but it?s a lesson for us

Comment from Barry Penfold

Excellent

Nice put together. Seems as though you have Warren on toast. Although I am expecting there will be some twist. Interesting read and dialogue realistic making this a story to come back to and enjoy its development. Thanks for sharing.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.

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 Comment Written 17-Apr-2024

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024

Yes, a fair number of twists and turns before the end. Glad you're enjoying it, Barry. Thanks for your kind review.

Comment from Wayne Fowler

Excellent

Maybe it's just me, but the graphic cursing in front of young Tommie was a bit much. He just learned a strong life lesson.
Error-free writing, per usual. Good work.

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 Comment Written 17-Apr-2024

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024

I just put that in recently, and I'm not sure yet if I'll keep it. This is something my family might have done (with the accompanying warning by Mom).

The idea was that Alan is enraged now and feels comfortable enough with his family to express it in the terms he was thinking. He probably would have made a joke about it by saying, "Pardon my French," but Ginnie beat him to the punch by adding to it. Then he figured it was Tommy's turn to pile on. Crude? Certainly. But it served to break the tension.