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Comment from royowen
I don't think we realise we are in a captive situation till very late in the piece, and it's true if we lack confidence or vulnerable we'll build a wall around ourselves, a fortress that only us entry, and protects us from the volleys of weapons set against us, and yet they can't physically harm, but our hears can be bruised, beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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I don't think we realise we are in a captive situation till very late in the piece, and it's true if we lack confidence or vulnerable we'll build a wall around ourselves, a fortress that only us entry, and protects us from the volleys of weapons set against us, and yet they can't physically harm, but our hears can be bruised, beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 02-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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Roy, you always seem to understand. And perhaps I have not given you enough credit for that. I apologize. And I still love that you read me.
Thanks,
Doug
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Thank you Doug
Comment from godlucifer
your poem was relatively spoken. it meant and the meaning was truly explained. our boundary is our own wall of prison. your poem was a true write from your heart. thanks for the read.
truly
godlucifer
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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your poem was relatively spoken. it meant and the meaning was truly explained. our boundary is our own wall of prison. your poem was a true write from your heart. thanks for the read.
truly
godlucifer
Comment Written 02-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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Thank you, sincerely.
I appreciate it,
Doug
Comment from estory
I like the tick tock swinging rhythm here, the short lines swinging back and forth as you contemplate the boundaries of life. I also liked that kite image at the end, I think it's the perfect image to articulate this sense of trying to break free, but not quite getting there. There's always somebody holding onto the string down there. It reminds me of the poem by Seamus Heaney Gravities. estory
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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I like the tick tock swinging rhythm here, the short lines swinging back and forth as you contemplate the boundaries of life. I also liked that kite image at the end, I think it's the perfect image to articulate this sense of trying to break free, but not quite getting there. There's always somebody holding onto the string down there. It reminds me of the poem by Seamus Heaney Gravities. estory
Comment Written 02-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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Thank you.
This Testing" was never supposed to be posred.
Doug
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are extremely
thought provoking. They were descriptive and creative. I pondered on these words and am still thinking about them. The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is awesome and goes well with this poem. Great Poem!
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2024
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The author's words are extremely
thought provoking. They were descriptive and creative. I pondered on these words and am still thinking about them. The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is awesome and goes well with this poem. Great Poem!
Comment Written 01-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is an interesting poem. I actually like the last stanza best, because of the implied metaphor. I kind of think it could be developed in another earlier stanza as well. The kite, of course, has limits due to being tethered to a string or nylon line, but it is still able to fly, swoop, dip, twirl, etc. Some of the language, although comprehensible, seems slightly awkward. This line here:
Ourselves invent
what we can't say.
I would maybe suggest putting a space between Our and selves so that it is more proper grammar.
Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2024
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This is an interesting poem. I actually like the last stanza best, because of the implied metaphor. I kind of think it could be developed in another earlier stanza as well. The kite, of course, has limits due to being tethered to a string or nylon line, but it is still able to fly, swoop, dip, twirl, etc. Some of the language, although comprehensible, seems slightly awkward. This line here:
Ourselves invent
what we can't say.
I would maybe suggest putting a space between Our and selves so that it is more proper grammar.
Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 01-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2024
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Thank you.
I reworked the last stanza.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation, Doug.
-Your note is appreciated and I'm not
sure everyone would learn that but
I think some would.
-You wrote a good poem about it.
-Effective images and occasional rhyme.
-A good opening verse followed by a good question.
-I like the verse about inventing what we cannot say.
-You do a good job analyzing love that has
caused so much pain and then focus on the
kite and you.
-You recognize there are boundaries for each;
the kite can only go so far. It seems to be the
same for this relationship, especially since
it seems have gone wrong, and maybe
you are looking for answers.
-Well done.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2024
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-Nice artwork and presentation, Doug.
-Your note is appreciated and I'm not
sure everyone would learn that but
I think some would.
-You wrote a good poem about it.
-Effective images and occasional rhyme.
-A good opening verse followed by a good question.
-I like the verse about inventing what we cannot say.
-You do a good job analyzing love that has
caused so much pain and then focus on the
kite and you.
-You recognize there are boundaries for each;
the kite can only go so far. It seems to be the
same for this relationship, especially since
it seems have gone wrong, and maybe
you are looking for answers.
-Well done.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2024
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Thank you, dear.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We hate boundaries, but they are always necessary in life in order to protect ourselves and others, there would be anarchy without them, a fine post, Love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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We hate boundaries, but they are always necessary in life in order to protect ourselves and others, there would be anarchy without them, a fine post, Love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 01-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thank you, dear. I realize the necessity, but disagree with the imperviousness of such.
One must bow to such borders, and the disregard for ones own sanity.
Thank you,
Doug
Comment from jim vecchio
I guess that's one of the reasons for Our Lord. To free us from our prisons of guilt and remorse. There are boundaries we shouldn't overstep, due to decency but there are no bounds to the imagination of man, within the power of our feeble brains.
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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I guess that's one of the reasons for Our Lord. To free us from our prisons of guilt and remorse. There are boundaries we shouldn't overstep, due to decency but there are no bounds to the imagination of man, within the power of our feeble brains.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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Ha! Great reply. This "Book of Testing" was created without my knowledge. Why? I needed someone to help me with my manuscript
being put into word, as requested by my publisher.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
We sure do create our own problems. I have a friend and I am usually saying to this person, "You're your own worst enemy." Their response, "You're probably right." But they continue with the same behavior. I don't understand it. I did understand and enjoy reading your poem.
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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We sure do create our own problems. I have a friend and I am usually saying to this person, "You're your own worst enemy." Their response, "You're probably right." But they continue with the same behavior. I don't understand it. I did understand and enjoy reading your poem.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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Thank you, Barbara.
Comment from SimianSavant
A very relevant and useful write as we contemplate a time of the year when we make new beginnings.
I realize this is freestyle and at the ending you're trying to fit two words to a line. To avoid the awkwardness of a missing article before a common noun, what if it were:
I recognize
its plight
the kite
and... me.
(so that you can avoid saying:
"the plight/of [A/THE] kite"
if you didn't want the third word)
Hope this is helpful! Thanks for sharing this timely piece. It will be on my mind today.
SS
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2024
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A very relevant and useful write as we contemplate a time of the year when we make new beginnings.
I realize this is freestyle and at the ending you're trying to fit two words to a line. To avoid the awkwardness of a missing article before a common noun, what if it were:
I recognize
its plight
the kite
and... me.
(so that you can avoid saying:
"the plight/of [A/THE] kite"
if you didn't want the third word)
Hope this is helpful! Thanks for sharing this timely piece. It will be on my mind today.
SS
Comment Written 01-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2024
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This is a very good idea. I struggled a bit with the last stanza. I think I might take ur suggestion.
One must never get to the point of not recognizing helpful critique. Thank you.
