Passion
Ukiah- Potlatch Club post32 total reviews
Comment from Mia Twysted
A short piece to remind people of the faith that some share. It is important to come together reguardle3ss of your faith. Face the world together and not alone.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2024
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A short piece to remind people of the faith that some share. It is important to come together reguardle3ss of your faith. Face the world together and not alone.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2024
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Thanks for the kind review and insightful comments.
Joan
Comment from karenina
I get a kick every time I see this, to think ukiah is haiku spelled backward. (I'm silly, I know)--
Your offering is a "passionate" prelude to Lent. The image is overwhelmingly powerful.
Thanks for sharing this unique form!
Karenina
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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I get a kick every time I see this, to think ukiah is haiku spelled backward. (I'm silly, I know)--
Your offering is a "passionate" prelude to Lent. The image is overwhelmingly powerful.
Thanks for sharing this unique form!
Karenina
Comment Written 27-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Thanks for the review, Karenina, I think the name is funny too.
Glad you like it.
Joan
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It's adorable!
Or "elbaroda"
(giggle)
Comment from Janet Foor
An incredible piece of art you chose for this poem. Sadly, you are right, many people only remember for six weeks the agony, death and rebirth of our Savior.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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An incredible piece of art you chose for this poem. Sadly, you are right, many people only remember for six weeks the agony, death and rebirth of our Savior.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 27-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Thanks for the review and all the stars, Janet.
Joan
Comment from QC Poet
This is a great UKIAH that has beautiful artwork and conforming to the intent of its theme though not stated every one should recognize Jesus Christ and his suffering on the cross the only clue I wanted to investigate was the six weeks reference the days of Lent total an equivalent amount of the amount of days referenced if I'm incorrect Please let me know in your review response Blessings on you and yours
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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This is a great UKIAH that has beautiful artwork and conforming to the intent of its theme though not stated every one should recognize Jesus Christ and his suffering on the cross the only clue I wanted to investigate was the six weeks reference the days of Lent total an equivalent amount of the amount of days referenced if I'm incorrect Please let me know in your review response Blessings on you and yours
Comment Written 27-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Hi QC,
Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem.
Joan
Comment from Gunner Lil
Wonderful picture.
A lot is said with so few words.
Forty days of lent and no meat on Fridays.
The lovely smell of white lilies on the alter Easter Sunday.
Thank you!
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Wonderful picture.
A lot is said with so few words.
Forty days of lent and no meat on Fridays.
The lovely smell of white lilies on the alter Easter Sunday.
Thank you!
Comment Written 27-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Thanks, Lil, for both the review and the nice beautiful image of lilies and their scent.
Joan
Comment from mermaids
Excellent use of words that captures the Easter season. I like the line "agony, death, rebirth". It describes fully what Jesus went through and his resurrection. This poetic form fits perfectly for your theme.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Excellent use of words that captures the Easter season. I like the line "agony, death, rebirth". It describes fully what Jesus went through and his resurrection. This poetic form fits perfectly for your theme.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Hi Elaine.
I appreciate the nice comments and high rating.
Joan
Comment from SimianSavant
The concise text matches well with the detailed texture of the image. "Every" is used here as three syllables in your 7-5-7 although folks often speak it as two.
My only very minor suggestion is to add a comma after "year", since the word "some" really belongs on the next line and is only on the first line by necessarily for the syllable count.
Regards,
Harambe (for President)
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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The concise text matches well with the detailed texture of the image. "Every" is used here as three syllables in your 7-5-7 although folks often speak it as two.
My only very minor suggestion is to add a comma after "year", since the word "some" really belongs on the next line and is only on the first line by necessarily for the syllable count.
Regards,
Harambe (for President)
Comment Written 27-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Hi Harambe,
Thanks for the review and the editing. I will look into it.
Joan
Comment from shelley kaye
ooh an easter ukiah...
nicely stated without being pushy
and still deeply meaningful with much emotion
however - there's no rhyme...
should be three lines of 757 with a monorhyme
otherwise it's not a true 'reverse haiku-ukiah'
that said, still a nice one!!
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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ooh an easter ukiah...
nicely stated without being pushy
and still deeply meaningful with much emotion
however - there's no rhyme...
should be three lines of 757 with a monorhyme
otherwise it's not a true 'reverse haiku-ukiah'
that said, still a nice one!!
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Hi Shelley,
Thanks for the positive comments. Sorry I missed the rhyme rule.
Joan
Comment from Barry Penfold
Wow, the image is totally awesome. The words are totally appropriate. Hope this goes well in your club competition. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Wow, the image is totally awesome. The words are totally appropriate. Hope this goes well in your club competition. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Thanks a lot for the kind comments, Barry.
Joan
Comment from Raul1
I have enjoyed reading your interesting and impressive poem. It is clear and concise. The sentences flow with clarity. Excellent work! No mistakes found. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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I have enjoyed reading your interesting and impressive poem. It is clear and concise. The sentences flow with clarity. Excellent work! No mistakes found. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Thanks for the thorough review, Raul.
Joan