Melancholy Moon
In search of a past self.19 total reviews
Comment from June Sargent
This is lovely and poignant to think even the moon has a melancholic side. We need to ponder and reflect now and then to see how we can turn things around to see the brighter side of ourselves and of life.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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This is lovely and poignant to think even the moon has a melancholic side. We need to ponder and reflect now and then to see how we can turn things around to see the brighter side of ourselves and of life.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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So true. Thank you for your lovely review. Appreciate you and your time. Have a blessed weekend.
Glenda
Comment from Begin Again
I pictured a fantasy of happiness as we started floating on a moonbeam and traveling through the universe, exploring and seeing the beauty it has to offer. But then sadness moved in and stole the happiness away.
Carol
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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I pictured a fantasy of happiness as we started floating on a moonbeam and traveling through the universe, exploring and seeing the beauty it has to offer. But then sadness moved in and stole the happiness away.
Carol
Comment Written 23-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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I hope you sensed a bit of hope at the end. It is meant to be hopeful. Someone looking at their inner self and telling that inner being they don't have to hide or be ashamed. A soft and gentle pep talk to that piece of yourself that has been hurt, carries shame, or hides a way for fear of not being accepted. Or, to the person that we once were, but whom life has changed and made distant. A reminder to not let life turn you into a distant memory of yourself. It does have sadness...but, there is always hope :).
I really appreciate you time and your review Carol. Have a wonderful weekend.
God bless,
Glenda
Comment from QC Poet
A very nice energy shown along with great associations with the soul into the havens above us intertwined it's a beautiful tribute to you lost friendship with the hopes of someday being reunited. Thank you for Sharing your poetic tribute writing
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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A very nice energy shown along with great associations with the soul into the havens above us intertwined it's a beautiful tribute to you lost friendship with the hopes of someday being reunited. Thank you for Sharing your poetic tribute writing
Comment Written 23-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much for the kind review. I appreciate your thoughtful evaluation and the time you spend writing them. Blessings my friend. Have a wonderful weekend
Comment from teafor2
Glenda: What a wonderful fantasy about you traveling to visit and share
conversation with the moon...The picture you've selected, the rhymes you've crafted, and verbiage you've created, combines to provide reader(s)
an enjoyable read. I personally would recommend this for any and all reading audiences. Thanks for sharing. teafor2
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Glenda: What a wonderful fantasy about you traveling to visit and share
conversation with the moon...The picture you've selected, the rhymes you've crafted, and verbiage you've created, combines to provide reader(s)
an enjoyable read. I personally would recommend this for any and all reading audiences. Thanks for sharing. teafor2
Comment Written 23-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much. I appreciate your review and kind words.
Blessings,
Glenda
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You are welcome. teafor2
Comment from jim vecchio
Beautiful, elegant language with striking presentation. Though God has created a magnificent universe, I believe the answers to loneliness and past bruises are found on earth, but with our minds in the heavenlies, in a relationship with The Lord. I'd love to hear you sing, though!
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Beautiful, elegant language with striking presentation. Though God has created a magnificent universe, I believe the answers to loneliness and past bruises are found on earth, but with our minds in the heavenlies, in a relationship with The Lord. I'd love to hear you sing, though!
Comment Written 23-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Ha, you might not say that if you ever had to hear me. :-)
My daughter's however, sing beautifully.
I do agree, a relationship with God is the way through life's difficulties.
Thank you for your review and kind words.
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I can't sing, and were I in a situation where I had to, I'd be so embarrassed, although I've done it a few times doing church services. My daughter is totally unashamed, and loves singing and recording Godly songs. I posted a short poem about her a couple of days ago.
Comment from Ginda Simpson
Your words create lovely imagery and provide deep feeling about self-reflection. To float upon a moonbeam is a great metaphor for those times of uncertainty when confidence in self in challenged.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Your words create lovely imagery and provide deep feeling about self-reflection. To float upon a moonbeam is a great metaphor for those times of uncertainty when confidence in self in challenged.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much Ginda. I so appreciate the 6 stars and your thoughtful evaluation and review of this poem.
Blessings
Glenda
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed your light hearted post Glender, we keep our faith and hope close to our heart and we never know what life will throw at us, there is joy and there is sorrow and we ride those moonbeams and hope for the best, a magical post, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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I enjoyed your light hearted post Glender, we keep our faith and hope close to our heart and we never know what life will throw at us, there is joy and there is sorrow and we ride those moonbeams and hope for the best, a magical post, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much
Blessings!
Comment from Elise H
This poem started as a light escape into a dream and ended up as a rumination (at least to me) on abuse and escaping in a whole different way. The turn in the fifth stanza to bruises and scars brought this poem to a higher level for me. I think that the entire organization of this poem is clever with that turning point.
I don't have much constructive criticism to give except to say that I loved this one a lot here and the turn really worked for me. Thanks for sharing.
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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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This poem started as a light escape into a dream and ended up as a rumination (at least to me) on abuse and escaping in a whole different way. The turn in the fifth stanza to bruises and scars brought this poem to a higher level for me. I think that the entire organization of this poem is clever with that turning point.
I don't have much constructive criticism to give except to say that I loved this one a lot here and the turn really worked for me. Thanks for sharing.
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Comment Written 23-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much. I appreciate this touched you the way it was intended.
Blessings,
Glenda
Comment from Julie Helms
This is such a creative concept that you have imagined. I personally would have never been able to come up with such an original metaphor. You took the idea of looking in the mirror, and added it to climbing the moonbeam, and you told it in beautiful poetic terms! I'm really impressed.
I have one suggestion for possible consideration:
"Her pain I'd hope to cease"
Rewording for the sake of seeing it as a straightforward sentence:
I'd hope to cease her pain.
Something about this is not quite right. In general usage, we don't cease other people's pain (or anything else). We may cause *them* to cease it. "The court ordered us to cease and desist", so the court didn't cease our actions, it ordered us to cease them. It's just a nuance. But it stood out to me. Maybe:
Her pain I'd hoped to ease
Anyway, just a thought.
I loved your poem!
Julie :-)
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reply by the author on 22-Feb-2024
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This is such a creative concept that you have imagined. I personally would have never been able to come up with such an original metaphor. You took the idea of looking in the mirror, and added it to climbing the moonbeam, and you told it in beautiful poetic terms! I'm really impressed.
I have one suggestion for possible consideration:
"Her pain I'd hope to cease"
Rewording for the sake of seeing it as a straightforward sentence:
I'd hope to cease her pain.
Something about this is not quite right. In general usage, we don't cease other people's pain (or anything else). We may cause *them* to cease it. "The court ordered us to cease and desist", so the court didn't cease our actions, it ordered us to cease them. It's just a nuance. But it stood out to me. Maybe:
Her pain I'd hoped to ease
Anyway, just a thought.
I loved your poem!
Julie :-)
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Comment Written 22-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much. I like ease, great suggestions. You're the best!
