A Compilation of Short stories
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40 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
You were definitely chosen and n my add to feel very special. Good to connect with your birth family as well. Your story was well written and I wish you good luck for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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You were definitely chosen and n my add to feel very special. Good to connect with your birth family as well. Your story was well written and I wish you good luck for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 23-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much, Wendy. How glad that you liked it. Ulla:)))
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Wow. Talk about the ultimate Christmas gift! I bet that's always how your adoptive parents regarded you. I love that you kept the boots throughout the entirety of your life (and Bammy too?)
And then you even got to know your bio parents! And your sibling.
You're right; at two, this specialness couldn't have registered, but now it must fill you with great joy.
Lovely contest entry. Good luck with it in the polls.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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Wow. Talk about the ultimate Christmas gift! I bet that's always how your adoptive parents regarded you. I love that you kept the boots throughout the entirety of your life (and Bammy too?)
And then you even got to know your bio parents! And your sibling.
You're right; at two, this specialness couldn't have registered, but now it must fill you with great joy.
Lovely contest entry. Good luck with it in the polls.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much, Rachelle. Those boots meant everything to me. That's why I will never forget that moment in my life. Thanks again. Ulla xxx
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I completely understand.
Comment from John Ciarmello
I loved this, Ulla! It must have been exciting to find your birth parents and the rest of your biological family. Your adoptive parents did well by you and raised you in the correct fashion. Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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I loved this, Ulla! It must have been exciting to find your birth parents and the rest of your biological family. Your adoptive parents did well by you and raised you in the correct fashion. Best, JohnC
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much, John. Yes, my adoptive family gave me all the love and support needed to build up my confidence. I was lucky. I know that. It was and is still amazing that I found my real family. Ulla:)))
Comment from Regina Elliott
Hello Ulla, I'm glad your
reunion with your mother
and father was a good one.
With some people, it doesn't
go well. You have been
blessed. This is a strong
entry for the contest, my
best wishes.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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Hello Ulla, I'm glad your
reunion with your mother
and father was a good one.
With some people, it doesn't
go well. You have been
blessed. This is a strong
entry for the contest, my
best wishes.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much, Regina. Yes, I have been lucky. So very lucky, and I appreciate the fact. Ulla:)))
Comment from judith layne jerdé
A beautiful story of hope and being chosen by perfect parents who took care of you and loved you and when they were done with their journey you were left stong and sure of who you were and went on to find your first family. This was an amazing story of hope and love and special endings Good luck.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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A beautiful story of hope and being chosen by perfect parents who took care of you and loved you and when they were done with their journey you were left stong and sure of who you were and went on to find your first family. This was an amazing story of hope and love and special endings Good luck.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Oh, thank you so much, Judith. That was a wonderful review.I so appreciate it. Thank you!! Ulla xx
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a fine story Ulla and I learned more about you here and the family you discovered once you grew up, how fascinating. Your story is endearing and magical, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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This is a fine story Ulla and I learned more about you here and the family you discovered once you grew up, how fascinating. Your story is endearing and magical, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Hi Dolly, thank you so much. I just thought it would fit the topic of the contest. Those boots meant so much to me. Ullaxx
Comment from estory
I think it's great that you bring this story to life, the story of kid in an orphanage that gets rescued by their compassion into a family. Told from a child's eyes, we see how important these little gestures of getting a teddy bear and a pair of boots can be to those who never got gifts before, and hopefully they can inspire others to adopt kids like this. You had a great warm, fuzzy voice for this that hooks us into this story and we can identify with it. Also , I heard your brother had a heart attack and I want you to know I am praying for your family and hope he has a good recovery. estory
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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I think it's great that you bring this story to life, the story of kid in an orphanage that gets rescued by their compassion into a family. Told from a child's eyes, we see how important these little gestures of getting a teddy bear and a pair of boots can be to those who never got gifts before, and hopefully they can inspire others to adopt kids like this. You had a great warm, fuzzy voice for this that hooks us into this story and we can identify with it. Also , I heard your brother had a heart attack and I want you to know I am praying for your family and hope he has a good recovery. estory
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much, estory. I'm so glad that it drew you in. Well, it's
always been the reality and part of my life. I believe it gave me a lot of strength, as well. It also taught me humility and gratitude, never to take anything for granted. I just had to enter this inbthe contest.
Thank you also for thinking about my brother. I so appreciate
that. He only turned 52 on Saturday. It makes it so much worse. Thanks again. Ulla:)))
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Comment from Wayne Fowler
Well done.
...where a teddy would normally have been; had I known... - I believe lacking a complete sentence after the semicolon, a comma would be better.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Well done.
...where a teddy would normally have been; had I known... - I believe lacking a complete sentence after the semicolon, a comma would be better.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much, Wayne. I have changed it to a comma. All best, Ulla:)))
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Ulla, I think you have a very compelling story here. I've read a few of these entries, and being chosen for adoption tops them all - it's life-changing! You tell the story as something that "apparently" happened to you; since it did indeed happen, I would change the wording to reflect that. I know you're trying to tell it from a 2-year-old's POV, but I think it would work better if you shared it as your current self.
Since it is for contest, I would go through and make sure there are no errors. I note a few here, but there were more. Minor things like a missing word, too many commas, a missed period . . . If you use advanced editor, it will highlight a lot of this.
Just a suggestion so your story shines for the judges.
So happy to hear that you were connected to your birth family. A happy ending to your story. Best of luck with the contest.
Second sentence: Some would say I hit THE jackpot.
You use "think" twice in the 3rd sentence. My suggestion: Come to think of it, they might have been right.
The first sentence of the third paragraph: eliminate the word "done" at the end.
There's some unnecessary wording, Ulla, like, "They, the boots, never . . ." You could say only, "The boots never left my sight."
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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Ulla, I think you have a very compelling story here. I've read a few of these entries, and being chosen for adoption tops them all - it's life-changing! You tell the story as something that "apparently" happened to you; since it did indeed happen, I would change the wording to reflect that. I know you're trying to tell it from a 2-year-old's POV, but I think it would work better if you shared it as your current self.
Since it is for contest, I would go through and make sure there are no errors. I note a few here, but there were more. Minor things like a missing word, too many commas, a missed period . . . If you use advanced editor, it will highlight a lot of this.
Just a suggestion so your story shines for the judges.
So happy to hear that you were connected to your birth family. A happy ending to your story. Best of luck with the contest.
Second sentence: Some would say I hit THE jackpot.
You use "think" twice in the 3rd sentence. My suggestion: Come to think of it, they might have been right.
The first sentence of the third paragraph: eliminate the word "done" at the end.
There's some unnecessary wording, Ulla, like, "They, the boots, never . . ." You could say only, "The boots never left my sight."
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Thank you Pam, and for the four stars. I have removed some of the offending commas and made other edits as well. I still like the way I told my story and will stick with it. Ulla:)))
Comment from Pantygynt
I thought this a fascinating story, mainly, I suppose, because I grew up in a conventional family so the strangeness of it was bound to be of interest. Th one thing I felt was missing her, was how you came by your name. Ulla as I understand it is Danish so I presume the orphanage was in Denmark. It was simply but well told too,
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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I thought this a fascinating story, mainly, I suppose, because I grew up in a conventional family so the strangeness of it was bound to be of interest. Th one thing I felt was missing her, was how you came by your name. Ulla as I understand it is Danish so I presume the orphanage was in Denmark. It was simply but well told too,
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Thank you so very much, Jim, for a great review and wonderful stars. I have added in my notes that this took place in Denmark, and that my adoptive parents gave me the name Ulla.
Thank so much again, Ulla
