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short take on faith
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Comment from
Jane Jane King
This is a thought provoking poem and I think that you are on to something good there, but I am not sure what you mean. When you refer to eternal dances, do you mean judgment day when you meet with God? If so, you might want to consider don't miss the chance for that eternal dance (referring to life after death)
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Comment Written 11-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
I mean the opportunity to dance in eternity. Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from
Julie Lau
Well done; I like your sentiments very much indeed. Seeking out joy is what we should all do - oh man, wouldn't the world be a better place then!
If you're happy with chance and dances, then leave it, but an 's' could go either way to make a more technically perfect rhyme.
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Comment Written 10-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
I will check out your idea, Julie. Thanks for reviewing.
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