Comment from Wendy G

Exceptional

Excellent writing. A very dramatic twist to the story, and totally unexpected. Your descriptions are vivid. I give a six when writing compels me to read on, even when I know I don't want to, and I get goose-bumps after reading ... Well done.
Wendy
Congratulations too on the win in the Special Song contest. As soon as I read yours, I was pretty sure it would win, and it was a worthy winner. Great work there too.

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2022

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reply by the author on 02-Nov-2022

Well, thank you twice, Wendy. I appreciate the incredible rating and review on the chapter and the congrats on the contest. There were some entries that really got to me. I had written and rewritten Vic's story many times over the years yet never posted it. Saw this contest and knew it was time. Thank you again. Gretchen

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Exceptional

WOW! This is intense! You did a great job with this. I thought you were going to reveal a cadavre in the duck taped washer at first. There is still that possibility. It could be a serial killers dumping ground. The swarming flies were a good touch, and then the description of the body and the flies... well it was really interesting and you had my attention all the way. WELL DONE! Nancy:)

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2022

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reply by the author on 02-Nov-2022

I tried to minimize the gore or gross details without turning the scene into a Disney movie. I hate gore. Thank you so much for the gift of the member cent bump and the excellent rating. I appreciate your comments, as always. Gretchen

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

OMG(osh), What a horrible sight for anyone to have
to see, Gretchen. You did a great job with this chapter.
Everything seemed to be routine--if diving in a stinky
pond-- could be considered that. I thought there might
have been a body in the duck-taped washer. Eew. Well, it
seemed Aaron and Waylon weren't complete dimwits, right?
Now, you've given readers another tangent with the death
of Ed Preston. I believe the couch had been there a long time,
so someone must've been spying on the trio as they searched
for the cars. Maybe they wanted to frame them.
Thanks for sharing, Jan

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2022

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022

I like how you think! I was thinking the same thing. Lol. Thank you for this awesome review. Gretchen

Comment from prettybluebirds

Excellent

This is nicely executed, and I enjoyed reading it. Your descriptions are vivid and make the story interesting and easy to follow. The descriptions of the bugs made this chapter. Nice work.

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 Comment Written 01-Nov-2022

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022

Thank you. I appreciate your comments. Gretchen

Comment from Sankey

Exceptional

Wow! This was verrrry dramatic! You did good. I hope others are enjoying your story as much as I am. Is Waylon still suspended from school? Keep it coming. No spags.

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2022

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022

Thank you so much for this incredible review. Gretchen

Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)

Excellent

One cadavre found, and presumably two more to come. They always say in writing there is the rule of three. But maybe it's excessive here? The equivalent of purple prose in crime + mystery? Kate xx
kept landing > everything else is in present tense.

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 Comment Written 01-Nov-2022

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022

Thank you for this fine review. I corrected the tense slip. Thought it had a shark/pit bull feel to it when they both found bodies.
Gretchen