Potato Chips
Acrostic32 total reviews
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This is good acrostic poem having fun, how you feel, potato chips, well said, well done, post god speed more, share post not 4 self-joy-pride but 4 God and readers worldwide Alcreator Litt Dear (DR)
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
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This is good acrostic poem having fun, how you feel, potato chips, well said, well done, post god speed more, share post not 4 self-joy-pride but 4 God and readers worldwide Alcreator Litt Dear (DR)
Comment Written 09-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
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Thank you for this kind review!
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Thank you for this kind review!
Comment from jake cosmos aller
Nicely done. I was going to try this contest out, but my poem did not rhyme, so I have to re-draft it and try again. Perhaps for another day. I liked the way this poem flowed and the snarky humor throughout.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
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Nicely done. I was going to try this contest out, but my poem did not rhyme, so I have to re-draft it and try again. Perhaps for another day. I liked the way this poem flowed and the snarky humor throughout.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
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Glad you liked it! Yes, try again! Small poems are not my forte, but I try.Thanks for reading!
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Glad you liked it! Yes, try again! Small poems are not my forte, but I try.Thanks for reading!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written acrostic poem you have penned about self-improvement. I can totally relate to this. If I stay away from too many chips I am good, but otherwise not so much! Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
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This is a very well written acrostic poem you have penned about self-improvement. I can totally relate to this. If I stay away from too many chips I am good, but otherwise not so much! Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
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Thank you for this review:)
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Thank you for this review:)
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a cute poem. The font is large and is colored and that makes the text prominent. The visual fits well.
You need to change past to pass. The word "must" instead of to in this verse would make the verse clearer. Do you mean in the last verse that less caloric chips are now available? If so, then this sentence would read clearer if diet was placed where less is on the 3rd line 2nd verse that would make it work. All suggestions.
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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
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This is a cute poem. The font is large and is colored and that makes the text prominent. The visual fits well.
You need to change past to pass. The word "must" instead of to in this verse would make the verse clearer. Do you mean in the last verse that less caloric chips are now available? If so, then this sentence would read clearer if diet was placed where less is on the 3rd line 2nd verse that would make it work. All suggestions.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the suggestions, Sandra. I will look at it after the voting. I'm not sure I can change it now.
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Thank you for the suggestions, Sandra. I will look at it after the voting. I'm not sure I can change it now.
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I wouldn't worry about it until afterwards. You are welcome and good luck in the contest.
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Ok thanks!
Comment from Whitewave
Anyone for chips? Hot, fried and salty - who can resist? Just one more!
You have made a clever acrostic with an irresistible flavor.
I am sure the manufacturers plan for us to fail with one tiny taste and to become addicted with as little as a second. They win. We lose.
It's all in the pot!
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Anyone for chips? Hot, fried and salty - who can resist? Just one more!
You have made a clever acrostic with an irresistible flavor.
I am sure the manufacturers plan for us to fail with one tiny taste and to become addicted with as little as a second. They win. We lose.
It's all in the pot!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Now I am hungry...Thank you for this fun and descriptive review!
Comment from Bill Schott
This acrostic poem, Potato Chips, has an interesting rhyme scheme and reminds us that those tasty chips come loaded with the stuff screams are made of.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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This acrostic poem, Potato Chips, has an interesting rhyme scheme and reminds us that those tasty chips come loaded with the stuff screams are made of.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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They sure do. Thank you for your review!
Comment from lyenochka
And potato chips taste so good! I do think there's something about GMO potatoes and chips made from them that can cause weight gain. Enjoyed your fun poem. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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And potato chips taste so good! I do think there's something about GMO potatoes and chips made from them that can cause weight gain. Enjoyed your fun poem. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Thank you.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the An Acrostic Poem About Self-Improvement writing prompt contest.
You followed the rules well and made it rhyme too...that's amazing.
I love the presentation. You have a good chance of winning. Good luck!
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Excellent entry for the An Acrostic Poem About Self-Improvement writing prompt contest.
You followed the rules well and made it rhyme too...that's amazing.
I love the presentation. You have a good chance of winning. Good luck!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from leather
I love this poem-it is funny, light-hearted, and very accurate. I have been in a life-long battle between my lips and hips. It just doesn't seem fair that I have to work so hard at depriving myself of yummy things.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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I love this poem-it is funny, light-hearted, and very accurate. I have been in a life-long battle between my lips and hips. It just doesn't seem fair that I have to work so hard at depriving myself of yummy things.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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Agreed. Thank you for the review and stars!
Comment from Jammer11
Love the humor. Yes, because you can't just eat one, you have to force yourself to be done. :) Thanks for sharing this fun and relatable piece. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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Love the humor. Yes, because you can't just eat one, you have to force yourself to be done. :) Thanks for sharing this fun and relatable piece. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your rhyming review!
