Artificial Intelligence
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Computer Love"A critique of technology
20 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I think you are right that people love their devices and love looking at the screen as it can produce so many images we can tune into and we never feel alone when we have a computer. I think it is harming human relationships. Your poem is poignant and honest, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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I think you are right that people love their devices and love looking at the screen as it can produce so many images we can tune into and we never feel alone when we have a computer. I think it is harming human relationships. Your poem is poignant and honest, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 25-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and for your support for the premise behind the poem. We need to stay focused on real life. Real people estory
Comment from royowen
I amazes me how seductive they are, one will see people gazing at their cell phones more than the people around, which should be many times more fascinating than their screens, I know I tend to take my iPad everywhere. Beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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I amazes me how seductive they are, one will see people gazing at their cell phones more than the people around, which should be many times more fascinating than their screens, I know I tend to take my iPad everywhere. Beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 25-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and your perspective on the piece. Computers are the antichrist, my friend. estory
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Certainly
Comment from LisaMay
Although you are devoted to your computer, even passionate about your relationship with it, I noted the dead-pan emotionless delivery.
Watch that joystick! Things could become messy.
The world is definitely becoming 'sick' if computers are our replacement lovers. (Sick in the sense of ill, not the newer slang usage of 'sick' meaning 'outstandingly or amazingly good or impressive'.)
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Although you are devoted to your computer, even passionate about your relationship with it, I noted the dead-pan emotionless delivery.
Watch that joystick! Things could become messy.
The world is definitely becoming 'sick' if computers are our replacement lovers. (Sick in the sense of ill, not the newer slang usage of 'sick' meaning 'outstandingly or amazingly good or impressive'.)
Comment Written 25-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and I am glad you could appreciate the sarcastic humor here. It's a bit dark, but it works. estory
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You do dark sarcasm very well.
Comment from Gert sherwood
satyrical narrative in rhymed quatrains
Computer Love
estory Now your clever thoughts why you love your computer are clever,
There are so many clever sentences let me see what one is the best.
This one ---
I don't think I will ever leave my computer.
We are completely compatible.
I take it along with me everywhere.
We have become (inseperable.) (spelling
I don't think I will ever leave my computer.
Gert
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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satyrical narrative in rhymed quatrains
Computer Love
estory Now your clever thoughts why you love your computer are clever,
There are so many clever sentences let me see what one is the best.
This one ---
I don't think I will ever leave my computer.
We are completely compatible.
I take it along with me everywhere.
We have become (inseperable.) (spelling
I don't think I will ever leave my computer.
Gert
Comment Written 25-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and I am glad you could appreciate all those clever little lines. Very flattering. estory
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You are most welcome estory
Gert
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Your satire is excellent. I can read it over and over and catch something new every time.
The rhymed quatrains are a great way to make the 'voice' sound mechanical and non-feeling.
And yes, I too am afraid of what will come if we don't use our time efficiently and step away from the computer and go outside for a while.
The author's notes bring it home that the future with all these gadgets will bring a sad conclusion that we are not prepared for.
Thank you for the veiled warning of what we are doing to ourselves.
Jesse
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Your satire is excellent. I can read it over and over and catch something new every time.
The rhymed quatrains are a great way to make the 'voice' sound mechanical and non-feeling.
And yes, I too am afraid of what will come if we don't use our time efficiently and step away from the computer and go outside for a while.
The author's notes bring it home that the future with all these gadgets will bring a sad conclusion that we are not prepared for.
Thank you for the veiled warning of what we are doing to ourselves.
Jesse
Comment Written 25-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and you got exactly what I was trying to get across here. Maybe more than most. This is a cautionary tale estory
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You and I are usually on the same page!
We understand each other!
Jesse
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The objective correlative of your work reminisces the extremely useful and inseparable nature of the protagonist and his computer.
The work highlights the grip exerted on him by the computer and how he could be deemed hopeless without it.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of rhymes, alliterations, metaphors, onomatopoeias and imagery.
Excellent work. Bravo.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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The objective correlative of your work reminisces the extremely useful and inseparable nature of the protagonist and his computer.
The work highlights the grip exerted on him by the computer and how he could be deemed hopeless without it.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of rhymes, alliterations, metaphors, onomatopoeias and imagery.
Excellent work. Bravo.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much for all the flattering remarks on the construction of this piece and I am glad you thought it worked so well. estory
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Remain Blessed.
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Remain Blessed.
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Remain Blessed.
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Remain Blessed.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I honestly understand and feel we are creating a society that has no clue how to get along with each other. When my third son was in college, his freshman year he had a roommate who ended up dropping out because he couldn't get away from his computer to go to classes. He was that hooked. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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I honestly understand and feel we are creating a society that has no clue how to get along with each other. When my third son was in college, his freshman year he had a roommate who ended up dropping out because he couldn't get away from his computer to go to classes. He was that hooked. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Thanks for the excellent review and I think it is true that for some of these young people, they are already there, in the grip of this machine man relationship. estory
Comment from Anne Johnston
Thank you for sharing this satire poem. It is sad that technology plays such a big part in our lives. You see people on their smart phones continually, rather than taking time to just sit down and visit with family and friends.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Thank you for sharing this satire poem. It is sad that technology plays such a big part in our lives. You see people on their smart phones continually, rather than taking time to just sit down and visit with family and friends.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and for your support for the premise in this piece. estory
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You are welcome
Comment from Theodore McDowell
This satirical piece strikes home at what has become real life--the obsession with and love affair with our computers and how this draws us away from human relationships. Well-crafted, with a mechanical meter as your point out. Well done.
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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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This satirical piece strikes home at what has become real life--the obsession with and love affair with our computers and how this draws us away from human relationships. Well-crafted, with a mechanical meter as your point out. Well done.
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Comment Written 25-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and your support of the piece. estory
Comment from BethShelby
Your poem is great satire. Unfortunately too many of us seem to have and unhealthy relationship with the computer. It monopolizes so much time that could be spent elsewhere and can't be good for our eyes or our bodies. People who write find it so much easier than writing by hand. It is perfect of paying bills and bookkeeping, and when one is tracing their roots on Ancestry or doing research it is invaluable. It is a superb learning tool. I admit, I'm on it too much of the time.
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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Your poem is great satire. Unfortunately too many of us seem to have and unhealthy relationship with the computer. It monopolizes so much time that could be spent elsewhere and can't be good for our eyes or our bodies. People who write find it so much easier than writing by hand. It is perfect of paying bills and bookkeeping, and when one is tracing their roots on Ancestry or doing research it is invaluable. It is a superb learning tool. I admit, I'm on it too much of the time.
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Comment Written 25-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022
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Thanks for the five star review and I am glad the poem got so many people thinking aobut this. estory
