Powers so dark
Quatern -40 total reviews
Comment from SimianSavant
Nicely written and well rhymed. It is a neat idea to keep moving a line at a different spot in the poem. I am afraid very little of my writing on this site heeds the advice against snark.
let Christ's grace measure be your mark <= *Grace measure* feels a bit awkward as prose, mainly because grace is a noun and not used as an adjective, except with altered spellings like graceful.
'tis not the flame that lights the spark <= nice line
So guard your mouth don't be a snark <= there are two clauses here, and they need to be either separated or joined correctly. You could say something like: guard your mouth from words of snark. Or you could use a semicolon, or in the context of this poem you could just use a comma.
There are a bunch of broken characters in the author notes, just FYI.
Thanks for the read!
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Nicely written and well rhymed. It is a neat idea to keep moving a line at a different spot in the poem. I am afraid very little of my writing on this site heeds the advice against snark.
let Christ's grace measure be your mark <= *Grace measure* feels a bit awkward as prose, mainly because grace is a noun and not used as an adjective, except with altered spellings like graceful.
'tis not the flame that lights the spark <= nice line
So guard your mouth don't be a snark <= there are two clauses here, and they need to be either separated or joined correctly. You could say something like: guard your mouth from words of snark. Or you could use a semicolon, or in the context of this poem you could just use a comma.
There are a bunch of broken characters in the author notes, just FYI.
Thanks for the read!
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Thanks for your generous comments and insightful review, blessings Roy
Comment from Anne Johnston
thank you, Roy, for this great poem. Our enemies are not our fellow men but spirits of darkness. Thankfully, we know that God's power is greater than any forces that can come against us. I like the verse:
"We are God's envoys on this Earth,
and by His wisdom let faith birth.
We fight against the powers of dark,
Let Christ's grace measure be your mark."
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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thank you, Roy, for this great poem. Our enemies are not our fellow men but spirits of darkness. Thankfully, we know that God's power is greater than any forces that can come against us. I like the verse:
"We are God's envoys on this Earth,
and by His wisdom let faith birth.
We fight against the powers of dark,
Let Christ's grace measure be your mark."
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Thanks Anne, for your beautiful comments and treview, blessings Roy
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You are welcome, Roy
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
Another awesome write. Very well written. It has a nice flow and rhyme scheme. Great photo to compliment your words as well. Speak not against the powers that be,
and let your tongue be malice free. So guard your mouth don't be a snark we fight against the powers of dark.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Another awesome write. Very well written. It has a nice flow and rhyme scheme. Great photo to compliment your words as well. Speak not against the powers that be,
and let your tongue be malice free. So guard your mouth don't be a snark we fight against the powers of dark.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Thanks Joanne, for your lovely comments and thoughtful review, blessings Roy
Comment from Sherry Asbury
Your picture is the way I feel when I try to make a difference in the world. My puny efforts get swept in a vortex and disappear. I try never, ever to snark against man nor circumstance, for I feel it jades my soul and we must speak with God in our minds. Another most excellent write, dear Prophet.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Your picture is the way I feel when I try to make a difference in the world. My puny efforts get swept in a vortex and disappear. I try never, ever to snark against man nor circumstance, for I feel it jades my soul and we must speak with God in our minds. Another most excellent write, dear Prophet.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Thanks Sherry, for your lovely comments and thoughtful review, blessings Roy
Comment from June Sargent
I agree that the fight we have should not be with each other - the powers that are attempting to control us are not made of flesh and blood, as clearly brought out at Ephesians 6:12-17. That is the source of all our problems. And we need to fight the fine fight for our faith. That is the only way to resist these dark forces to attain peace within ourselves and with each other.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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I agree that the fight we have should not be with each other - the powers that are attempting to control us are not made of flesh and blood, as clearly brought out at Ephesians 6:12-17. That is the source of all our problems. And we need to fight the fine fight for our faith. That is the only way to resist these dark forces to attain peace within ourselves and with each other.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Thanks June, for your lovely comments and thoughtful review, blessings Roy
Comment from Wendy G
Well expressed. In fact, not only should we not rage against the powers that be, we should be praying for them, knowing that they are God's appointments and will be used by Him to fulfil His greater purposes.
Wendy
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Well expressed. In fact, not only should we not rage against the powers that be, we should be praying for them, knowing that they are God's appointments and will be used by Him to fulfil His greater purposes.
Wendy
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Thanks again Wendy, for your excellent comments and review, blessings Roy
Comment from Ben Colder
Choosing light words is like entering a dark room and turning on the light. Where does the darkness go? Remember, "Never a man spoke like this." My blessings to you.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Choosing light words is like entering a dark room and turning on the light. Where does the darkness go? Remember, "Never a man spoke like this." My blessings to you.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Thanks, for your excellent comments and review, blessings Roy
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Compelling and powerful--stunning flow and rhyme make for a superb piece. Brilliant imagery!
let faith berth--do you mean "birth"? (as in be born or give birth?)
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Compelling and powerful--stunning flow and rhyme make for a superb piece. Brilliant imagery!
let faith berth--do you mean "birth"? (as in be born or give birth?)
Comment Written 01-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Thanks Liz for these excellent comments and great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Saria/Shreyamsi
This is a well thought out and we'll written poem. The first two lines are so true, we fight against the darkness brought by life not the people who bring it. I found the last para quite enlightening.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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This is a well thought out and we'll written poem. The first two lines are so true, we fight against the darkness brought by life not the people who bring it. I found the last para quite enlightening.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Thanks Liz for these excellent comments and great review, blessings Roy
Comment from aryr
The picture was great, Roy. I really enjoyed your words because they actually made sense of the darkness and the evil that surrounds the darkness. Only our belief in Christ and His Father-God truly protects us. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessings.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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The picture was great, Roy. I really enjoyed your words because they actually made sense of the darkness and the evil that surrounds the darkness. Only our belief in Christ and His Father-God truly protects us. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessings.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Thanks Alie, for these excellent comments and great review, blessings Roy
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You are most welcome, Roy, blessings.
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I appreciate you
