Life with Joy
The meaning of life16 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, Life With Joy, brings the reader a sense of abandon 2hich comes when the strictures of pandemic protection are castoff and trust in God takes over.
This story, Life With Joy, brings the reader a sense of abandon 2hich comes when the strictures of pandemic protection are castoff and trust in God takes over.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2021
Comment from MAMONIA
This is very beautiful and a perfect choice of the kind of life to choose.
It is well written and has many favorites of mine...guardian angels and God.
Go on and continue the rest of your life with Hope, Faith, and Love.
Best of luck in the contest.
Marie
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
This is very beautiful and a perfect choice of the kind of life to choose.
It is well written and has many favorites of mine...guardian angels and God.
Go on and continue the rest of your life with Hope, Faith, and Love.
Best of luck in the contest.
Marie
Comment Written 31-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for your lovely review:)
Comment from jenintorre
A very interesting story. I really enjoyed reading it. The lake sounds idyllic. I really admire your faith. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
A very interesting story. I really enjoyed reading it. The lake sounds idyllic. I really admire your faith. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much Ms. Jen:)
Comment from Flyaway1
I liked the story, about your choice of how to spend your life free. It has a good flow and good descriptive elements. So a 5 for the story and meeting the requirements.
Ugh, here comes the hard part. You got to edit some parts. I have had very detailed edits of my work and my writing has improved.
Stanza1:
Compared with others(;) or (-) I have ( not had)
Stanza 3
Last summer (,) Covid
I (was) lucky
I want(ed)
Stanza 4
anymore. So, I
Stanza 5
kingdom(-) an amazing
Stanza 6
First sentence remove ( type)
Stanza 7
lucky. I am not very tall....
Stanza 8
Last year, I realized this Covid is a test ....
Take out (I realized that)
I didn't need a fancy resort, a stroll in the numerous ravines or meadows.
I realized my city could bring me back the joy of living.
Stanza 9
I re-learned
me-the crazy
Stanza 11
No comma after good and the ugly.
I choose you and I ( no comma)
Choice- no matter
Stanza 12
I liked the story, about your choice of how to spend your life free. It has a good flow and good descriptive elements. So a 5 for the story and meeting the requirements.
Ugh, here comes the hard part. You got to edit some parts. I have had very detailed edits of my work and my writing has improved.
Stanza1:
Compared with others(;) or (-) I have ( not had)
Stanza 3
Last summer (,) Covid
I (was) lucky
I want(ed)
Stanza 4
anymore. So, I
Stanza 5
kingdom(-) an amazing
Stanza 6
First sentence remove ( type)
Stanza 7
lucky. I am not very tall....
Stanza 8
Last year, I realized this Covid is a test ....
Take out (I realized that)
I didn't need a fancy resort, a stroll in the numerous ravines or meadows.
I realized my city could bring me back the joy of living.
Stanza 9
I re-learned
me-the crazy
Stanza 11
No comma after good and the ugly.
I choose you and I ( no comma)
Choice- no matter
Stanza 12
Comment Written 31-Mar-2021
Comment from Precious Owuamalam
Hi there, many thanks for sharing this apt and concise piece. Your life's choice is indeed wonderful. Wishing you the very best in the contest. Here: "Last summer Covid or not, I tasted life at the fullest. I got so lucky to be free and choose how I want to spent my holiday." A comma should come after "summer" "choose" should be "chose", "spent" should be "spend", and "want" should be "wanted".
Blessings and good health!
Hi there, many thanks for sharing this apt and concise piece. Your life's choice is indeed wonderful. Wishing you the very best in the contest. Here: "Last summer Covid or not, I tasted life at the fullest. I got so lucky to be free and choose how I want to spent my holiday." A comma should come after "summer" "choose" should be "chose", "spent" should be "spend", and "want" should be "wanted".
Blessings and good health!
Comment Written 30-Mar-2021
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
I'm holding my place to protect you from one who might not notice this isn't ready and demerit you. I take it on faith this will merit five stars. This is a blind entry, so I don't know who you are and you're not supposed to tell me. After the contest, let me know so I can give this a proper review.
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I'm holding my place to protect you from one who might not notice this isn't ready and demerit you. I take it on faith this will merit five stars. This is a blind entry, so I don't know who you are and you're not supposed to tell me. After the contest, let me know so I can give this a proper review.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2021