Heart Crafted Poems -2021
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Mirror Mirror"Musings of an old man -2021
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Comment from Pam (respa)
-That is quite a piece
of artwork, Jim.
-A good poem to go with it.
-Effective imagery, rhyme,
and repeating lines.
-A good contrast between
seeing the young image
and the older one.
-I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
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-That is quite a piece
of artwork, Jim.
-A good poem to go with it.
-Effective imagery, rhyme,
and repeating lines.
-A good contrast between
seeing the young image
and the older one.
-I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
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Thank you Pam!
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You are welcome, Jim.
Comment from 4theloveoftrees
I love this wonderful poem, a sentiment on aging, perhaps; that feeling we sometimes get when we look in the mirror and wonder when we aged this much (I do it occasionally myself), wondering where did that young person go, especially when you feel young inside. Thanks for sharing this!
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
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I love this wonderful poem, a sentiment on aging, perhaps; that feeling we sometimes get when we look in the mirror and wonder when we aged this much (I do it occasionally myself), wondering where did that young person go, especially when you feel young inside. Thanks for sharing this!
Comment Written 06-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
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Thank you for the review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Ha ha ha, I have never heard of an Octelle before and you brought the horror of the mirror here as it reveals us over time and tells us the truth that we do not want to see, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
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Ha ha ha, I have never heard of an Octelle before and you brought the horror of the mirror here as it reveals us over time and tells us the truth that we do not want to see, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
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Smiling back....glad you have now seen the Octelle, quite a bit of fun to write.
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
Mirrors don't lie. As it is said life is like a mirror. You get best results when you smile. One has to look beyond the mirror to see one's true self. Thank you for sharing a thought-provoking poem!
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
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Mirrors don't lie. As it is said life is like a mirror. You get best results when you smile. One has to look beyond the mirror to see one's true self. Thank you for sharing a thought-provoking poem!
Comment Written 06-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
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Thank you a person should, from time to time really take a deep look at there egoic self in the mirror and then look that ego in the eye and say, "now understand it is okay that you hand around but...my Higher Self has the final word!"
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Octelle poem about what we see in the mirror is not always what we like to see and we are often disappointed to see the young and vibrant image disappeared and we can only find our parent's image there.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
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A very well-written Octelle poem about what we see in the mirror is not always what we like to see and we are often disappointed to see the young and vibrant image disappeared and we can only find our parent's image there.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
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Sandra, that look into the mirror with thwart even the most vainglorious ego HA!
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I've come to the conclusion that what I see in the mirror is nothing like what the photographs show, maybe that was the trouble here, (LOL) in this hall mirror. Great use of the Octelle form JLR, enjoyed it.
cheers
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
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I've come to the conclusion that what I see in the mirror is nothing like what the photographs show, maybe that was the trouble here, (LOL) in this hall mirror. Great use of the Octelle form JLR, enjoyed it.
cheers
Comment Written 06-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
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Pearl, thank you ! Painful for me for certain, Ha!
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Mirror Mirror' , is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. Penned with craft and skill. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. To me this is a case of wishful thinking :)) I very much look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
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'Mirror Mirror' , is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. Penned with craft and skill. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. To me this is a case of wishful thinking :)) I very much look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
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Duchess, thank you so much!
Comment from Gloria ....
I must admit this gave me a smile. The reaction could be open for interpretation as the roar might be a good thing or a bad thing. lol
I like this poetic form, and you have written well to its specifications. No more mirrors!
Gloria
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
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I must admit this gave me a smile. The reaction could be open for interpretation as the roar might be a good thing or a bad thing. lol
I like this poetic form, and you have written well to its specifications. No more mirrors!
Gloria
Comment Written 05-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
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Gloria, thank you! I am pleased it brought some humor into your day. Sometimes we do not like always what we see in reflection in a mirror, but we just have to realize even prunes have wrinkles.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your club challenge poem. Your picture plus words pair perfectly. Good job with the scomplex style.
May I suggest
I peered into the hall mirror
As I'm hoping to see clearer.
There was no light where it hung
the image I saw was young.
This [That's ] not right, I looked once more
looking ancient made me roar!
I peered into the hall mirror
As I'm hoping to see clearer.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2021
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You did a great job with your club challenge poem. Your picture plus words pair perfectly. Good job with the scomplex style.
May I suggest
I peered into the hall mirror
As I'm hoping to see clearer.
There was no light where it hung
the image I saw was young.
This [That's ] not right, I looked once more
looking ancient made me roar!
I peered into the hall mirror
As I'm hoping to see clearer.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 05-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2021
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Geez, Jan, of course, for,your insight
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear JLR, This is a worthy entry for your potlatch poetry event. This Octelle has a number of requirements:
personification, symbolism, a very strict syllable count, and rhyme scheme. As far as I can see you have done an outstanding, job incorporating all four of them.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2021
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Dear JLR, This is a worthy entry for your potlatch poetry event. This Octelle has a number of requirements:
personification, symbolism, a very strict syllable count, and rhyme scheme. As far as I can see you have done an outstanding, job incorporating all four of them.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2021
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My dear friend, thank you for this wonderful validation! Have a great weekend.
