No More, No More
Leaving abuse behind17 total reviews
Comment from Sharon Nolen
This was an excellent story. It seemed like a free verse poem. I think free verse poems are a lot like short short stories. Often many of the stanzas, in my opinion, don't really relate. But in your poem, it all related and told a story of an escape from someone who obviously gave a woman and her children cause to want to flee. I liked the way you used:
"They were all dashed
smashed
crashed
bashed in
like her face"
This was excellent work.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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This was an excellent story. It seemed like a free verse poem. I think free verse poems are a lot like short short stories. Often many of the stanzas, in my opinion, don't really relate. But in your poem, it all related and told a story of an escape from someone who obviously gave a woman and her children cause to want to flee. I liked the way you used:
"They were all dashed
smashed
crashed
bashed in
like her face"
This was excellent work.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Thank you for your appreciative review. I'm glad to know how it came across.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a well written poem. Very sad the abuse women have suffered. And still suffer. I can relate sometimes it's hard to get out it takes a long time to walk away. Even when you know it's wrong.well done.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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This is a well written poem. Very sad the abuse women have suffered. And still suffer. I can relate sometimes it's hard to get out it takes a long time to walk away. Even when you know it's wrong.well done.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Thank you for your involved review. Too many uninformed believers, say, "Why doesn't she just leave? They have no idea all that is involved for a woman to get to that point.
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Your welcome! It?s not as simple is just leave. I understand fully. It took me 22 years to get out of an abusive marriage.
Comment from Omar sb
As you know, domestic abuse is a disgusting, truly horrific occurrence that needs to be brought to light. There's power in the prolific literary works of poetry.
I highly commend you for utilizing its vantage point to address the importance of escaping abuse as soon as possible.
Your use of adjectives "saving, stowing, securing" to describe the preparation of leaving it all behind was spot on!
Thank you kindly for sharing this very relevant subject.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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As you know, domestic abuse is a disgusting, truly horrific occurrence that needs to be brought to light. There's power in the prolific literary works of poetry.
I highly commend you for utilizing its vantage point to address the importance of escaping abuse as soon as possible.
Your use of adjectives "saving, stowing, securing" to describe the preparation of leaving it all behind was spot on!
Thank you kindly for sharing this very relevant subject.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Thank you for your excellent review. You review much like I do. It has substance.
Comment from Carol Clark2
Wow, this is a heavy poem on a difficult subject matter, well done. I know too many women who have suffered abuse, and I found myself pulling for this one to succeed in her escape. Bless you for the work you've done on behalf of suffering women.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Wow, this is a heavy poem on a difficult subject matter, well done. I know too many women who have suffered abuse, and I found myself pulling for this one to succeed in her escape. Bless you for the work you've done on behalf of suffering women.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Thank you for your lovely review. Thank you for your expression of appreciation for my work.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Susan Newell
This is well written and certainly coveys the desperation of battered women. The ending seems so hopeless, as though none of their dreams could ever come true. Yet I know some do escape, and find happiness and fulfill dreams.
Did you really intend a plural "her souls?"
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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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This is well written and certainly coveys the desperation of battered women. The ending seems so hopeless, as though none of their dreams could ever come true. Yet I know some do escape, and find happiness and fulfill dreams.
Did you really intend a plural "her souls?"
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Comment Written 02-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Thank you for your involved review. You are right, many have begun anew and live full happy lives. And, the best part, so have their children. The cycle was broken.
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You are welcome.
Comment from country ranch writer
I agree when one finds an escape route take it and never look go to freedom any way you enough is rough the you are apt to snap like in the burning bed.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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I agree when one finds an escape route take it and never look go to freedom any way you enough is rough the you are apt to snap like in the burning bed.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Thank you for your involved review. You are right, many have begun anew and live full happy lives. And, the best part, so have their children. The cycle was broken. A note on the burning bed. Everytime that movie was shown on tv, there was a report of a women being burned to death. It does not end.
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Comment from Anne Johnston
You have written a great poem to describe the storms that some women face and thankfully there are those who will do whatever they can to get out of the situation, even if it means going out in a snowstorm.
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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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You have written a great poem to describe the storms that some women face and thankfully there are those who will do whatever they can to get out of the situation, even if it means going out in a snowstorm.
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Comment Written 02-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Thank you for your involved review. You are right, many have begun anew and live full happy lives. And, the best part, so have their children. The cycle was broken.
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You are welcome.