My Life with You
In Your name28 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt letter to God . We all have make mistakes in our lives but God understands and us always willing to give us another chance, unfortunately there are many who don't bother to turn to God when they run into trouble.
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A very well-written heartfelt letter to God . We all have make mistakes in our lives but God understands and us always willing to give us another chance, unfortunately there are many who don't bother to turn to God when they run into trouble.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2020
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job expressing your thoughts/feelings for this contest entry. I enjoyed reading it. You true life's examples set a great tone of how He protect and loves you (all of us really). I enjoyed how you presented each incident. Although sad, the one about your Dad passing was well-expressed too. Your letter is from your heart.
Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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You did a great job expressing your thoughts/feelings for this contest entry. I enjoyed reading it. You true life's examples set a great tone of how He protect and loves you (all of us really). I enjoyed how you presented each incident. Although sad, the one about your Dad passing was well-expressed too. Your letter is from your heart.
Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for your support with this piece:)
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
My word, you really did test your faith in God, and each time He came through for you. So many accindents that many would have died from. And your dear father, you had those special three years with him before God brought him home. I am praying my parents will be at the gate to welcome me home one day. I really enjoyed your letter to God, I'm sure He was reading it, too. Good luck in the contest, and have a wonderful 2021. Sandra xx
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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My word, you really did test your faith in God, and each time He came through for you. So many accindents that many would have died from. And your dear father, you had those special three years with him before God brought him home. I am praying my parents will be at the gate to welcome me home one day. I really enjoyed your letter to God, I'm sure He was reading it, too. Good luck in the contest, and have a wonderful 2021. Sandra xx
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Hi Sandra, thank you so much for this uplifting review. I wish you a wonderful 2021 full of joy and happiness.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is an intruiging list of interactions between God and the writer. At times it even seems as though she is testing God's will to intervene and save her from harm. Interesting.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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This is an intruiging list of interactions between God and the writer. At times it even seems as though she is testing God's will to intervene and save her from harm. Interesting.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thank you:)
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Your letter reminds me of the Psalm 139. You fleshed it out and made it personal. I did something like this on a retreat. Yours is much more comprehensive. This is lovely.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Your letter reminds me of the Psalm 139. You fleshed it out and made it personal. I did something like this on a retreat. Yours is much more comprehensive. This is lovely.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thank you:)
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written and very interesting Dear God prayer you have penned thanking Him and reminding Him of all He has done for you as you went through your life thus far. This was very sweet and from the heart. Thanks for sharing! Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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This is a very well written and very interesting Dear God prayer you have penned thanking Him and reminding Him of all He has done for you as you went through your life thus far. This was very sweet and from the heart. Thanks for sharing! Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 26-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much, Teri, this is such a wonderful review:)
Comment from zanya
The tone here is conciliatory and despite the many ups and downs that life has brought the letter writer is happy to journey on and feels privileged to have been chosen to walk the path of earthly life.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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The tone here is conciliatory and despite the many ups and downs that life has brought the letter writer is happy to journey on and feels privileged to have been chosen to walk the path of earthly life.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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Thank you for your lovely review:)
Comment from lyenochka
Wonderful prayer! I think the best kind of praying time is when we do stop to remember the miracles that God did in our lives. Loved this and hope you do well in the contest!!
He love you (loves)
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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Wonderful prayer! I think the best kind of praying time is when we do stop to remember the miracles that God did in our lives. Loved this and hope you do well in the contest!!
He love you (loves)
Comment Written 26-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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Thank you and have a lovely day
Comment from Leann DS
I like the initial question in your letter God about why you are still here on this earth, followed by the many different situations you have faced that could have taken your physical life. One suggestion I have that may help your peace to be more cohesive is to start and finish each harmful situation in the same way. for example, I love how you use the question "do you remember when... "Before stating your experiences. If you kept that at the beginning of each event, it would bring more cohesiveness to your letter and make it more powerful to the reader. You could also come up with an ending to use at the end of each experience. then, you could tie all those events together by stating the reason you believe you are here on this earth or by reiterating that you still don't know why but you know there's got to be a reason. Just something to think about.
Also, here are some grammatical/typographical error's to review:
You know me since day one.(you knew me since day one... Or... You have known me since day one)
why you choose me for this big Adventure (why you chose me for this big adventure... Or... Why you have chosen me for this big adventure)
I thought you will finally take me (I thought you would finally take me)
But you send me back, (but you sent me back)
He love you and prays (he loves you and prays)
guide my faith and hope and until (remove the word "and" that comes before the word "until")
Overall, I think your submission has a great foundation to be a very touching piece of writing that many people can relate to. Keep writing and hugs to you.
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reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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I like the initial question in your letter God about why you are still here on this earth, followed by the many different situations you have faced that could have taken your physical life. One suggestion I have that may help your peace to be more cohesive is to start and finish each harmful situation in the same way. for example, I love how you use the question "do you remember when... "Before stating your experiences. If you kept that at the beginning of each event, it would bring more cohesiveness to your letter and make it more powerful to the reader. You could also come up with an ending to use at the end of each experience. then, you could tie all those events together by stating the reason you believe you are here on this earth or by reiterating that you still don't know why but you know there's got to be a reason. Just something to think about.
Also, here are some grammatical/typographical error's to review:
You know me since day one.(you knew me since day one... Or... You have known me since day one)
why you choose me for this big Adventure (why you chose me for this big adventure... Or... Why you have chosen me for this big adventure)
I thought you will finally take me (I thought you would finally take me)
But you send me back, (but you sent me back)
He love you and prays (he loves you and prays)
guide my faith and hope and until (remove the word "and" that comes before the word "until")
Overall, I think your submission has a great foundation to be a very touching piece of writing that many people can relate to. Keep writing and hugs to you.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much Leann you warmed my heart with your review and the precious help to correct my grammar
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Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
What a beautiful letter to God you have written! I believe that He has already read it, and He loves it. You know, He has already provided Your forgiveness and redemption through the sacrifice and blood of Jesus Christ, on the Cross. Heaven is yours, by faith in Him, by His free grace. And by that same free grace, the Holy Spirit will give you strength to overcome your areas of weakness -- maybe not all at once, but just keep calling on the Name of Jesus and trusting in His mighty strength. He is listening. It's all in the Bible.
I found some small grammatical errors, and made some suggestions for improvement, below:
I suggest that you capitalize "You" and "Your," for every reference to God, but it isn't absolutely necessary (except that I would make sure to do it in the title).
Title: My Life with You
Description: In Your Name
Or that time, when I decided to be Dora the explorer...
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Or that time, when I decided to be Dora the Explorer...
tumbling down the mountain like a Pro;
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tumbling down the mountain like a pro;
For a minute, I thought you will finally take me back...
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For a minute, I thought you would finally take me back...
But you send me back,
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But you sent me back,
.. to save a soul and make it believe in YOU.
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...to save a soul and make him believe in YOU.
...but I am not sad because you ended his suffering and you gave me three wonderful years.
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...but I am not sad because you gave us three wonderful years together, and then you ended his suffering.
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God has really saved your life, time and again, and showed His great love for you in many ways. It is so good to come back to Him and thank Him, and I believe that's also what you're doing, in this precious letter.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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What a beautiful letter to God you have written! I believe that He has already read it, and He loves it. You know, He has already provided Your forgiveness and redemption through the sacrifice and blood of Jesus Christ, on the Cross. Heaven is yours, by faith in Him, by His free grace. And by that same free grace, the Holy Spirit will give you strength to overcome your areas of weakness -- maybe not all at once, but just keep calling on the Name of Jesus and trusting in His mighty strength. He is listening. It's all in the Bible.
I found some small grammatical errors, and made some suggestions for improvement, below:
I suggest that you capitalize "You" and "Your," for every reference to God, but it isn't absolutely necessary (except that I would make sure to do it in the title).
Title: My Life with You
Description: In Your Name
Or that time, when I decided to be Dora the explorer...
-->
Or that time, when I decided to be Dora the Explorer...
tumbling down the mountain like a Pro;
-->
tumbling down the mountain like a pro;
For a minute, I thought you will finally take me back...
-->
For a minute, I thought you would finally take me back...
But you send me back,
-->
But you sent me back,
.. to save a soul and make it believe in YOU.
-->
...to save a soul and make him believe in YOU.
...but I am not sad because you ended his suffering and you gave me three wonderful years.
-->
...but I am not sad because you gave us three wonderful years together, and then you ended his suffering.
***
God has really saved your life, time and again, and showed His great love for you in many ways. It is so good to come back to Him and thank Him, and I believe that's also what you're doing, in this precious letter.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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Hi Mary, thank you so much for your review from your heart and for helping me correcting my grammatical errors.
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You're very welcome, Iza. You don't always write in a serious tone, but it was very touching. May God continue to bless you in many ways, as you continue to realize and experience His goodness. Love, Mary Kay xoxo
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You are right my writing it's usually sarcastic, but when comes to our Lord, I am grateful that He is watching over me, my family and friends.
