Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
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Comment from Ann Market
This answers the challenge perfectly! You described the scene itself before and after, but then you also described the difference in yourself/the narrator from ten years ago to the present. This is a lovely poem!
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020
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This answers the challenge perfectly! You described the scene itself before and after, but then you also described the difference in yourself/the narrator from ten years ago to the present. This is a lovely poem!
Comment Written 19-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020
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Ann, I am so grateful for the time you took to read and comment on this free verse challenge. Thank you!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hallowed ground
Resting place
by JLR
Hello, my friend,
Beautiful entry for the Before and After" event in "The Fabulous Free Versers Club". I love free verse and yours is no exception. Well crafted with well chosen words and imagery.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020
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Hallowed ground
Resting place
by JLR
Hello, my friend,
Beautiful entry for the Before and After" event in "The Fabulous Free Versers Club". I love free verse and yours is no exception. Well crafted with well chosen words and imagery.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020
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Gypsy Blue Rose, Yes I love the free verser club each week irt provides special and unique challenges to go deep.
Comment from Wendy G
A beautiful before and after poem and the photo is the perfect accompaniment. The sentiments are beautiful, memorable, wistful and nostalgic. Very well written.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020
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A beautiful before and after poem and the photo is the perfect accompaniment. The sentiments are beautiful, memorable, wistful and nostalgic. Very well written.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020
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Wendy, I am so grateful for the time you took to read and comment on this free verse challenge. Thank you!
Comment from sammielwf
Resting place, hallowed ground, memories that were once so vivid are now muffled by the years gone by.
Graves visited and then not....then visited again....
Become tainted by the years....by time ...
But still you remember...slower now...but you remember
Once a soldier always a soldier....
Once a buddy- always a buddy........the physical environment changes- but not the bonds of brotherhood..
Well written.
Sammielwf
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020
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Resting place, hallowed ground, memories that were once so vivid are now muffled by the years gone by.
Graves visited and then not....then visited again....
Become tainted by the years....by time ...
But still you remember...slower now...but you remember
Once a soldier always a soldier....
Once a buddy- always a buddy........the physical environment changes- but not the bonds of brotherhood..
Well written.
Sammielwf
Comment Written 18-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020
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Sammielwf; I am so grateful for the time you took to read and comment on this free verse challenge. Thank you!
Comment from kmoss
This is amazing. I have not been able to define the amount of grief that I have felt since my mother passed, but this poem is close to how I feel. I love the last verse the most:My memory teases thoughts more slowly
these days, retelling scenes from the last time
I stood on these hallowed grounds.
Then, as now, I am still awaiting
my time to once again be
beside you for evermore.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020
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This is amazing. I have not been able to define the amount of grief that I have felt since my mother passed, but this poem is close to how I feel. I love the last verse the most:My memory teases thoughts more slowly
these days, retelling scenes from the last time
I stood on these hallowed grounds.
Then, as now, I am still awaiting
my time to once again be
beside you for evermore.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020
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kmoss, I send condolences to you for your loss, I am so grateful for the time you took to read and comment on this free verse challenge. Thank you!
Comment from lyenochka
Hi, JLR! Glad to see you posting again.
Great theme for your free verse to meet the challenge. Most people don't frequent a cemetery so there are noticeable changes in ten years. I liked the changes in the tree. The "wreath" was my first clue to the place.
I especially liked:
"as warm air teases the flower petals
woven onto the near wreath."
I wondered why you chose "near" and not "nearby."
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020
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Hi, JLR! Glad to see you posting again.
Great theme for your free verse to meet the challenge. Most people don't frequent a cemetery so there are noticeable changes in ten years. I liked the changes in the tree. The "wreath" was my first clue to the place.
I especially liked:
"as warm air teases the flower petals
woven onto the near wreath."
I wondered why you chose "near" and not "nearby."
Comment Written 18-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020
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The wreath image was mental, therefore near as it once stood nearby.
I am so grateful for the time you took to read and comment on this free verse challenge. Thank you!
Comment from crzypnter
You have crafted a haunting poem filled with sadness as the losses multiply as the years pass by. but yet hope for the future. I think many will relate, thank you for sharing. Blessings
August
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You have crafted a haunting poem filled with sadness as the losses multiply as the years pass by. but yet hope for the future. I think many will relate, thank you for sharing. Blessings
August
Comment Written 18-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020
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August, thank you very much!
Comment from dragonpoet
Good use of line breaks in this free verse poem.
This sounds like visting the grave of a spouse and hoping to be together soon. It seems ten years makes a big difference in body and memory.
Keep writing and stay healthly.
Joan
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020
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Good use of line breaks in this free verse poem.
This sounds like visting the grave of a spouse and hoping to be together soon. It seems ten years makes a big difference in body and memory.
Keep writing and stay healthly.
Joan
Comment Written 18-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020
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Joan, as always, I am so grateful for the time you took to read and comment on this free verse challenge. Thank you!
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No problem, JLR.
Joan
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear JLR, what a memorable subject you have chosen for this particular Free Verser's event.
And what you have written is haunting and memorable too!
All of the images, visual, auditory and even tactile make this poem truly excellent.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020
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Dear JLR, what a memorable subject you have chosen for this particular Free Verser's event.
And what you have written is haunting and memorable too!
All of the images, visual, auditory and even tactile make this poem truly excellent.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020
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Hi dear friend, trust me it is so good to once again sit behind my desk and work....thanks as always!
Comment from Janet Foor
A thought provoking and beautiful poem. When I lived near where I grew up it was an annual ritual to go to the cemeteries where family were buried and remember. Now, I live far from there but your beautiful poem brought back those memories.
Well done
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020
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A thought provoking and beautiful poem. When I lived near where I grew up it was an annual ritual to go to the cemeteries where family were buried and remember. Now, I live far from there but your beautiful poem brought back those memories.
Well done
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 18-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020
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Janet, dear friend, thank you! I am so grateful for the time you took to read and comment on this free verse challenge.
