Comment from Patty Mazzurco

Excellent

I love the Tanka because you can say more than you can in a traditional haiku. Great job on the sylable count and formatting, flow and imagery. Very nice work.

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2006

Comment from mariejames

Excellent

Wow, pretty clever. How in the world did you come up with this? it must have taken some deep thought. Good job. Thanks for sharing

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2006

Comment from Kingsland

Excellent

now this piece of poetry I found to have all of what the other one didn't have
this was a very well written piece of poetry
with all the bells and whistles included... John

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2006

Comment from Alchera

Excellent

It seems a biblical message of Eliah or Daniel! Many false profets are spreading out with their false messages, which are burying the good ones and are floating higher and higher becoming like dangerous weeds with the passing of time and yet the Sun reigns everything in silent motionless from its position.
Eternal celestial lights of Betlem splendidly shine over Mother Earth.
Soon The false lying tales will fade away.

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2006

Comment from cutie

Excellent

well your poem is fine and its theme also good.

but i disagree with this point:"True wisdom timeless, fake is temporary!" you are true but it's not completely true or not enough..

Because the root of the problem is not that when fake is ended and true comes.The problem is if it is true or not.

Because when false beats the truth no matter for a while or for a century,it will give its poison and true falls into "manual laborer" who giving all efforts for recovering the false's damages position.

It's not the situation "must be" it's the condition "mustn't be"

Just because true isn't servant of false.In fact there's nothing as False. False is meaning of TRUELESSNESS.

Briefly we shouldn't wait for when false fades away.We should work on for not to lose TRUE even a second.

Just my humble opinion.

Thanks for your great poem!

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2006

Comment from hollydee

Excellent

I liked this much better than the haiku. I like the line Timeless true wisdom glows earth. I just liked the flow of that line so very much. Thanks for all your cues in the author's notes.

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2006

Comment from mayflowerbg

Excellent

Hi, Alcreator Writer!

Dark salutes false light
Shades truth, soars humdrum hourly
Sun shines silent still
Timeless true wisdom glows earth
Fake fables fade, fall, faint fast

Many dark people inhabit this land, shading truth, tom-tomming hourly their false light. I wish the sun wasn't so silent, I wish it shone more brightly to glow the earth. Yes,'Fake fables fade, fall, faint fast ", but not in a life time!

Mayflower

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2006

Comment from Holle

Excellent

I really do like your material...it reminds me of Robert Graves and how the bards kept hidden messages within the words as to not get charged as heratics. Very nice stuff you have here and could go with it...people have short attention spands these days! ;-)
Still format could make it draw the eye more...see the 3, 2, 1 pattern? Still no breaking of the rules so a 5 it is!~smiles

Dark salutes false light
Shades truth
Soars humdrum hourly
Sun
Shines
Silent
Still
Timeless true wisdom
Ever glows earth
Fake
Fables
Fade
Fall
Faint and fast

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2006

Comment from Georgina Lenty

Excellent

I wish I can do as you do - put such strong messsages so beautifully in such a small package! Falsehoods are dark, truth is the light - nice job!

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2006

Comment from cheyennewy

Excellent

This is an amazing tanka. This terse form of poetry is a challenge to write...few words that say so much. Profound and evocative, I found myself reading this several times just to get the feel of the words....well done...cheyenne

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2006