Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "storm warning"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from rmdelta
deepwater,
very strong writing, my friend. Excellent descriptives throughout provide the reader with great imagery, while the smoothness of the flow is terrific. Great work.
Reggie
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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deepwater,
very strong writing, my friend. Excellent descriptives throughout provide the reader with great imagery, while the smoothness of the flow is terrific. Great work.
Reggie
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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thank you Reggie
Comment from closetpoetjester
Wow, this was a lovely piece about a man caught in a bad storm, who lost his boat and then lost his life?? I am a little unsure of the end. For a minute I thought you had been rescued by sailors but on reading a second time I see you are at rest in this place so I am assuming the worst. Either way this was a compelling and quite confronting read. I knew once the boat went down things weren't going so well for you.
Cheers for a well penned and thoughtfully constructed piece full of danger on the high seas.
My fave bit was "but no place to run as times on her side"
A lovely write and thanks for sharing your talent.
Closetpoetjester xo
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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Wow, this was a lovely piece about a man caught in a bad storm, who lost his boat and then lost his life?? I am a little unsure of the end. For a minute I thought you had been rescued by sailors but on reading a second time I see you are at rest in this place so I am assuming the worst. Either way this was a compelling and quite confronting read. I knew once the boat went down things weren't going so well for you.
Cheers for a well penned and thoughtfully constructed piece full of danger on the high seas.
My fave bit was "but no place to run as times on her side"
A lovely write and thanks for sharing your talent.
Closetpoetjester xo
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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thank you for reading Closetpoet
Comment from RuberRuth
Wow, this poem made me feel sick in the stomach. This is a compliment because I hate deep water, cannot swim and a close relative works on the water. Your poem has confirmed in my mind that being on a ship/boat is the last place I wanna be! Well done, thoroughly enjoyed the roller coaster ride of emotions from the comfort of my armchair on solid ground!
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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Wow, this poem made me feel sick in the stomach. This is a compliment because I hate deep water, cannot swim and a close relative works on the water. Your poem has confirmed in my mind that being on a ship/boat is the last place I wanna be! Well done, thoroughly enjoyed the roller coaster ride of emotions from the comfort of my armchair on solid ground!
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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thanks for reading Ruth
Comment from FredCollingwood
I'm not afraid of much, but I have a deep respect, even fear of the power of the ocean. Another great poem, GW. It's a pleasure to read.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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I'm not afraid of much, but I have a deep respect, even fear of the power of the ocean. Another great poem, GW. It's a pleasure to read.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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thank you Fred for reading have to make a little change for spelling ...smiling
Comment from mchapman
the imagery is awesome the story line is fantastic. I lived every part with you i cluding the tears and the rescue. this is why i gave it the rating I did. Keep writing and I will keep reading.....mary
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the imagery is awesome the story line is fantastic. I lived every part with you i cluding the tears and the rescue. this is why i gave it the rating I did. Keep writing and I will keep reading.....mary
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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thank you for your most welcome comments Mary, Gary
Comment from Bellringer
Excellent work. Your descriptive lines held me rapt in attention. What an ending; it's reminiscent of the movie "Titanic" where the characters are joined in an eternal celebration under the sea. Congratulations.
reply by the author on 23-May-2010
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Excellent work. Your descriptive lines held me rapt in attention. What an ending; it's reminiscent of the movie "Titanic" where the characters are joined in an eternal celebration under the sea. Congratulations.
Comment Written 23-May-2010
reply by the author on 23-May-2010
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thank you Bell
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I enjoyed this - your words setting
the scene of the storm and the rigging
on the ship/boat - and the lashing of
the sea - great stuff.
Radios
Radio's
slowly slip's
slowly slips
love ones
loved ones
carry's me - or is this the American way?
carries me
An enjoyable read, Gary - Margaret.
reply by the author on 23-May-2010
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I enjoyed this - your words setting
the scene of the storm and the rigging
on the ship/boat - and the lashing of
the sea - great stuff.
Radios
Radio's
slowly slip's
slowly slips
love ones
loved ones
carry's me - or is this the American way?
carries me
An enjoyable read, Gary - Margaret.
Comment Written 23-May-2010
reply by the author on 23-May-2010
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thank you for the cmments margaret told you my spellin was ... smiling Gary
Comment from Joan E.
You capture the tension and fear well--your poem seems autobiographical. I especially liked your rhymes and metaphors "mountain," "monster" and "grave."
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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You capture the tension and fear well--your poem seems autobiographical. I especially liked your rhymes and metaphors "mountain," "monster" and "grave."
Comment Written 22-May-2010
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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thank you Joan
Comment from rudywalsh
Well done GW, another fine write. Where does all your poetry ideas come from? not whilst your perched on your tracter I hope LOL. The image and poem do each other justice.
You seem to be doing really well at this poetry lark, keep up the great work and have a fine day, Rudy.
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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Well done GW, another fine write. Where does all your poetry ideas come from? not whilst your perched on your tracter I hope LOL. The image and poem do each other justice.
You seem to be doing really well at this poetry lark, keep up the great work and have a fine day, Rudy.
Comment Written 22-May-2010
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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thank you Rudy
Comment from seewhatimwritingnow
Another great writing deepwater- as always with lots of thought given and deep meaning! Thanks again for sharing with us. Betty
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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Another great writing deepwater- as always with lots of thought given and deep meaning! Thanks again for sharing with us. Betty
Comment Written 21-May-2010
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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thank you Betty
