Shadow Dance
rhyming quatrains in 8/6/8/6167 total reviews
Comment from costellsgirl33
I love it! Such a light and happy poem! And I think during a week like this, a happy poem is much needed!
I like how you called the shadow a "he", I guess it would make sense, since Sawyer is a boy.
I don't think I have thought of my own shadow as being a girl......very nice
Thank you for making me smile
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
  |
I love it! Such a light and happy poem! And I think during a week like this, a happy poem is much needed!
I like how you called the shadow a "he", I guess it would make sense, since Sawyer is a boy.
I don't think I have thought of my own shadow as being a girl......very nice
Thank you for making me smile
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
-
costellsgirl, thanks so much :-) Brooke
-
You are very welcome, Brooke!
CG :)
Comment from granny goes viral
Me and my Shadow...had to have inspired this. Remember that song? Shadows are so much fun when you're a little kid.
Later, I guess they become scary. I think Nixon's all day 5 o'clock shadow cost him.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
|
Me and my Shadow...had to have inspired this. Remember that song? Shadows are so much fun when you're a little kid.
Later, I guess they become scary. I think Nixon's all day 5 o'clock shadow cost him.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
-
granny, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
-
Hello dear poet. I suppose the coming fall might tickle your talent?
Comment from RodG
Again you have captured a child's world beautifully, Brooke. That mystifying realm of shadows.
I especially like how you describe the Speaker's happiness contrasted with his sadness in stanzas 4 & 5.
Nice personification of the Sun throughout.
Rod
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
|
Again you have captured a child's world beautifully, Brooke. That mystifying realm of shadows.
I especially like how you describe the Speaker's happiness contrasted with his sadness in stanzas 4 & 5.
Nice personification of the Sun throughout.
Rod
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
-
Rod, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi Brooke,
I always like and appreciate your work, but I really like this, and I am out of sixers. Darn it!
Such an easy flow, simplistic in the black/white, and with Sawyer's shadow to compliment. Excellent!
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax ('-')
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
|
Hi Brooke,
I always like and appreciate your work, but I really like this, and I am out of sixers. Darn it!
Such an easy flow, simplistic in the black/white, and with Sawyer's shadow to compliment. Excellent!
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax ('-')
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
-
Jax, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Pili Pubul
All your poems deserve six stars, this one is no exception ,
is just precious, I use to love my shadow as a child, a great fun companion.
I love how you express how it disappear " between dusk and dawn". Great , great images. Great picture of Sawyer Miranda doing his dance !!! Pili
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
|
All your poems deserve six stars, this one is no exception ,
is just precious, I use to love my shadow as a child, a great fun companion.
I love how you express how it disappear " between dusk and dawn". Great , great images. Great picture of Sawyer Miranda doing his dance !!! Pili
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
-
Pili, thank you so much :-) Brooke
-
You so welcome... Pili.
Comment from flamingstar
Spectacularly whimsical rhyme as usual. Second quatrain is my favorite - I wish more people would practice that attitude and be happy to go with the flow.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
 |
Spectacularly whimsical rhyme as usual. Second quatrain is my favorite - I wish more people would practice that attitude and be happy to go with the flow.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
-
flamingstar, thank you so much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Ben Colder
One of your best. I have no six but it would be your if so. Sawyer, my friend. Grandmother has shown her colors. Excellent Brooke. Many blessings
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
|
One of your best. I have no six but it would be your if so. Sawyer, my friend. Grandmother has shown her colors. Excellent Brooke. Many blessings
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
-
Thanks so much, Ben :-) Brooke
Comment from CHIGYSISKI
IT IS INTERESTING HOW ONE CAN WRITE A BEAUTIFUL POEM ABOUT SOMETHING LIKE A SHADOW THAT EVERYONE TAKES FOR GRANTED.THE WORDS:
and do not want their noses pressed
against a window pane.
IS SO VIVID AND NICE.
GREAT JOB! WELL DONE!
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
|
IT IS INTERESTING HOW ONE CAN WRITE A BEAUTIFUL POEM ABOUT SOMETHING LIKE A SHADOW THAT EVERYONE TAKES FOR GRANTED.THE WORDS:
and do not want their noses pressed
against a window pane.
IS SO VIVID AND NICE.
GREAT JOB! WELL DONE!
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
-
Thank you so much, Chigysiski :-) Brooke
Comment from acerisestory
There it is! I was looking for a poem from you today, Brooke, and there it is. Such a fun poem written about one's shadow -- from Sawyer's point of view, of course.
You've made wonderful use of alliteration, and personification, and your poem has a great rhythm. Of course, your rhyming is right on. I like the enjambment between the sixth and seventh stanzas.
Another cute picture of Sawyer. Thanks for sharing, Brooke. Alana
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
|
There it is! I was looking for a poem from you today, Brooke, and there it is. Such a fun poem written about one's shadow -- from Sawyer's point of view, of course.
You've made wonderful use of alliteration, and personification, and your poem has a great rhythm. Of course, your rhyming is right on. I like the enjambment between the sixth and seventh stanzas.
Another cute picture of Sawyer. Thanks for sharing, Brooke. Alana
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
-
Alana, thank you so much :-) Brooke
-
You are welcome. Alana
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I will never forget the day my grandson Jimmy spotted his shadow. He freaked because it scared him when he couldn't get rid of it. I think we have a picture somewhere. LOL This is a darling picture of Sawyer, as usual, and the poem is well done with your usual expertise. I love the 8/6/8/6 meter.
Enjoyed! Nancy
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
|
I will never forget the day my grandson Jimmy spotted his shadow. He freaked because it scared him when he couldn't get rid of it. I think we have a picture somewhere. LOL This is a darling picture of Sawyer, as usual, and the poem is well done with your usual expertise. I love the 8/6/8/6 meter.
Enjoyed! Nancy
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
-
Nancy, thanks so much. When Sawyer noticed the shadow, Miranda says he was just tickled pink and started to dance with it :-)
It's so funny how different kids react to the same thing. Brooke
-
So did Jim after we showed him we all had one but that first reaction floored me!
