A Step is not a Journey
quatrains in abcb rhyme160 total reviews
Comment from Keronica
A step is not a journey, eh? Unless you have one, perhaps two broken legs!!! LOL! Thanks for sharing your wonderful poem! (I just hope nobody who's crippled reads it)...
~Keronica LOL! :D
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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A step is not a journey, eh? Unless you have one, perhaps two broken legs!!! LOL! Thanks for sharing your wonderful poem! (I just hope nobody who's crippled reads it)...
~Keronica LOL! :D
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Keronica, thank you for your fascinating take on this poem :-) Brooke
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Anytime, sunshine! Have a good day! :)
Comment from trevorletang
A beautiful and philosophical poem. I love the concepts that you bring up. Your structure is perfect and then rhyme used flows beautiful. Well done on an inspirational piece
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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A beautiful and philosophical poem. I love the concepts that you bring up. Your structure is perfect and then rhyme used flows beautiful. Well done on an inspirational piece
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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trevorletang, thank you so very much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Sarah Butterfly
You build a very nice logic throughout this poem Brooke.
Solid rhyme used as always.
Very enjoyable and easy to read poem.
Kind regards
sarah
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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You build a very nice logic throughout this poem Brooke.
Solid rhyme used as always.
Very enjoyable and easy to read poem.
Kind regards
sarah
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Sarah, thank you so very much for your generous review :-) Brooke
Comment from ravenblack
A step is not a journey, and without a step, a baby step even, there would be no journey. We are all raindrops- some a drizzle, some a big fat freakin' downpour, and to prevent that sand, we must each be a drop no matter how novice or seasoned. Sorry. Just relating it to poets on the site for some reason.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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A step is not a journey, and without a step, a baby step even, there would be no journey. We are all raindrops- some a drizzle, some a big fat freakin' downpour, and to prevent that sand, we must each be a drop no matter how novice or seasoned. Sorry. Just relating it to poets on the site for some reason.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Thanks so much, ravenblack, for your thoughtful reading of this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Pegcook
Thought provoking and something on which to meditate. I like the "single raindrop that helped to build the sea. Also, "if there were no rain drops,the seas would turn to sand" Never did I think of that before. The rhymes and rhythm ring true to me.
Proof read inquiry: "No dream is EVERY realized" How would you feel about dropping the "Y" on "every?"
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Thought provoking and something on which to meditate. I like the "single raindrop that helped to build the sea. Also, "if there were no rain drops,the seas would turn to sand" Never did I think of that before. The rhymes and rhythm ring true to me.
Proof read inquiry: "No dream is EVERY realized" How would you feel about dropping the "Y" on "every?"
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Peg, thank you and thank you again for catching that typo!!!!! :-)
I HATE to make mistakes :-) Thank you also for the rest of the review :-) Brooke
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Brook, You are welcome, my friend. My sincere hope is that when fanstory readers catch a typo in my posts, they will tell me. I don't like to make mistakes either, but I am learning that my world goes on anyway... actually, it's kind of reassuring. Could it be that we are allotted a specific number of mistakes in our lifetime and when that number is reached, well, our life is ... well.. finished??? So, maybe as long as we are making them, our life will go on??? Why don't you write a poem about this theory? I really like to read your work! Peg
Comment from aanneee
You need, I think, to write a book "The Book of Sawyer" each page one of his fun adventures pictures and your words...what a delightful book that would be. Such a dear little man - Dinah
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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You need, I think, to write a book "The Book of Sawyer" each page one of his fun adventures pictures and your words...what a delightful book that would be. Such a dear little man - Dinah
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Dinah, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from InterestingRon
Hi Brooke,
A lovely poem - with quite a ponder.
Good point about the need for many footsteps. In the novel Robinson Crusoe our hero finds a single foot print in the sand. When they made the movie, the only way they could set that up was by dangling a man on a pole and letting him touch the ground once!
Ron x
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Hi Brooke,
A lovely poem - with quite a ponder.
Good point about the need for many footsteps. In the novel Robinson Crusoe our hero finds a single foot print in the sand. When they made the movie, the only way they could set that up was by dangling a man on a pole and letting him touch the ground once!
Ron x
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Ron, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from MM lives on :)
adewpearl you have some kind of a wonderful muse :) What a creative and playful poem this was. Loved your cute picture of your beautiful grand baby as well..Thanks for sharing always a pleasure
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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adewpearl you have some kind of a wonderful muse :) What a creative and playful poem this was. Loved your cute picture of your beautiful grand baby as well..Thanks for sharing always a pleasure
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Christopher, thank you so much :-) and yes, he is the best muse ever. Brooke
Comment from humpwhistle
This poem is an interesting journey in itself, Brooke.
From sand to sea back to sand.
I love 'aspired'--I even looked it up to make sure I knew what it meant. I did.
You never let me down.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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This poem is an interesting journey in itself, Brooke.
From sand to sea back to sand.
I love 'aspired'--I even looked it up to make sure I knew what it meant. I did.
You never let me down.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Thank you so very much, my friend :-) A six from you is as good as a million bucks. Well, that might be a bit of hyperbole, but the sentiment is real. LOL :-)
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Hyperbole? Ain't that a bong, Jethro?
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ROTFLMAO :-)
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
The teacher in you is coming out in this poem, Brooke, you have to take that first step if you want to get where you want to go. Sometimes it's a slippery slope, but still worth taking. I do hope you thank Sawyer for all these inspirational poems he is helping you with!! A lovely poem. :) Sandra.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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The teacher in you is coming out in this poem, Brooke, you have to take that first step if you want to get where you want to go. Sometimes it's a slippery slope, but still worth taking. I do hope you thank Sawyer for all these inspirational poems he is helping you with!! A lovely poem. :) Sandra.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Sandra, thank you so much, my friend :-) Sawyer is the best muse in the entire world :-) Brooke
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He certainly is. You have been blessed, Brooke. xx
