White the World
a poem in rhyming couplets139 total reviews
Comment from Carole Rosa
Brooke, I love this type of poem. It rhymes and dances along the path of charm and reality. We had snow flakes yesterday, just like the poetic words you describe. I bet this poem is a good example for the class that are teaching. Smiles. Carole
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014
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Brooke, I love this type of poem. It rhymes and dances along the path of charm and reality. We had snow flakes yesterday, just like the poetic words you describe. I bet this poem is a good example for the class that are teaching. Smiles. Carole
Comment Written 14-Nov-2014
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Carole, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from kiwisteveh
A pretty picture of a snowy winter (hich e're still getting in some parts of the South Island even though we're nearly into summer!), but I think what makes this little gem is the cleverness of the word-weaving, including the parallels between the three verses.
Steve
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A pretty picture of a snowy winter (hich e're still getting in some parts of the South Island even though we're nearly into summer!), but I think what makes this little gem is the cleverness of the word-weaving, including the parallels between the three verses.
Steve
Comment Written 14-Nov-2014
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Still, thank you, my friend :-) I had to scrape snow from my car the first time today, far too early in the season for my taste :-) I'm just reminding myself the stuff is pretty. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from Sarah Butterfly
You capture the senses well in this poem: the way we see the world in winter, the soft sound snow makes, what the cold wind feels like. I like how you see snow as the Pearls nature wears. Beautifully done!
Kind regards
Sarah
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You capture the senses well in this poem: the way we see the world in winter, the soft sound snow makes, what the cold wind feels like. I like how you see snow as the Pearls nature wears. Beautifully done!
Kind regards
Sarah
Comment Written 14-Nov-2014
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Sarah, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Delahay
All the lovely white is much too cold for me. It can be beautiful but I can't care much for winter. Your poem about the beauty of snow is enjoyable still.
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All the lovely white is much too cold for me. It can be beautiful but I can't care much for winter. Your poem about the beauty of snow is enjoyable still.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2014
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WardHays, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from RodG
A delightful picture of winter's coming, Brooke.
effective use of "white" as a verb and "pearling" as a gerund.
Lots of soft sounds and alliteration in stanza 1 to set the mood.
Good metaphor of making us see the snow as strands of pearls.
very good use of the refrain: where the Winter's waved her wand.
Such a pleasant picture of winter! Rod
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A delightful picture of winter's coming, Brooke.
effective use of "white" as a verb and "pearling" as a gerund.
Lots of soft sounds and alliteration in stanza 1 to set the mood.
Good metaphor of making us see the snow as strands of pearls.
very good use of the refrain: where the Winter's waved her wand.
Such a pleasant picture of winter! Rod
Comment Written 14-Nov-2014
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Rod, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Bina1
Your poem makes snow sound delightful! Sadly it has come too early indicating a long, cold winter! Thank you for sharing!
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Your poem makes snow sound delightful! Sadly it has come too early indicating a long, cold winter! Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 14-Nov-2014
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Bina, in actuality I hate winter and the fact I had to clear snow from my car this morning - I'm just trying to remind myself that the stuff is pretty LOL Brooke :-)
Comment from granny goes viral
Lovely verse to the first snow. The world is so clean and clear, covered in sparkles of snow diamonds. The first day.
Gets kind of old after that. Except for the kids. The news has been threatening around here for days. Haven't seen a flake yet. Good one Brooke.
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Lovely verse to the first snow. The world is so clean and clear, covered in sparkles of snow diamonds. The first day.
Gets kind of old after that. Except for the kids. The news has been threatening around here for days. Haven't seen a flake yet. Good one Brooke.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2014
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Granny, thank you so much :-) I had to scrape snow off my car this morning before I could see to drive. Brooke
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The news keeps threatening. I have seen nothing. I guess there is no news now that Ebola is a wash out.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Brooke - a delightful winter poem in good aabb rhyme. I particularly like the line 'soft the sound as snow is swirling' - not just good alliteration but, I find, when snow is falling there is a quiet stillness about the place. Lovely verse. Warm regards Dorothy x
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Hi Brooke - a delightful winter poem in good aabb rhyme. I particularly like the line 'soft the sound as snow is swirling' - not just good alliteration but, I find, when snow is falling there is a quiet stillness about the place. Lovely verse. Warm regards Dorothy x
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Comment Written 14-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much, Dorothy :-) Brooke
Comment from kiwijenny
Gorgeous imagery....I applaud your word choices for rhyming...pearling and swirling.....wand.....donned....unusual pairing but so apt and beautiful
Well done
God bless
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Gorgeous imagery....I applaud your word choices for rhyming...pearling and swirling.....wand.....donned....unusual pairing but so apt and beautiful
Well done
God bless
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Comment Written 14-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much, Jenny :-) Brooke
