Ten Worms Emerged
a counting poem for children141 total reviews
Comment from flamingstar
Oh, I wish I had another 6 for this beauty. Ingenious as always and a great subject since they are everywhere right now! Can't pick a favorite stanza but love the conclusion.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Oh, I wish I had another 6 for this beauty. Ingenious as always and a great subject since they are everywhere right now! Can't pick a favorite stanza but love the conclusion.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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flamingstar, thank you so very much :-) I had so much fun coming up with causes of death :-) Brooke
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...disturbing...(!)
Comment from persevere
This is a delightful counting poem. I think most children can relate to worms. In my opinion your rendition of ten things being reduced one by one is in the same league as Ten Little Injuns.
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This is a delightful counting poem. I think most children can relate to worms. In my opinion your rendition of ten things being reduced one by one is in the same league as Ten Little Injuns.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Persevere, thank you so much for your encouraging comments and generous rating :-) Brooke
Comment from c_lucas
Another counting poem well written with an interesting story to tell. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
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Another counting poem well written with an interesting story to tell. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Charlie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You're welcome, Brooke. Charlie
Comment from CR Delport
Oh my, the poor little worms. I like to fish but I refuse to use live bait. It is actually such a sad poem, but it is well written. Great stuff.
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Oh my, the poor little worms. I like to fish but I refuse to use live bait. It is actually such a sad poem, but it is well written. Great stuff.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much, CR - I prefer to think of it as gallows humor LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from RYME4U
Very wonderful. You could easily be a children;s author!All of your work is delightful to read. Smooth, even verses and perfect rhythm. Great job!
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Very wonderful. You could easily be a children;s author!All of your work is delightful to read. Smooth, even verses and perfect rhythm. Great job!
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much, RYME4U :-) Brooke
Comment from TAB_that's me
Oh such terrible demises these poor little worms met - floods, rain and oh, the dreaded footstep. Another very fun and well written counting poem.
Teresa
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Oh such terrible demises these poor little worms met - floods, rain and oh, the dreaded footstep. Another very fun and well written counting poem.
Teresa
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Teresa, thanks so much - glad you enjoyed the deaths of these poor little creatures - good to know I'm not the only mean person around. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from Acquired Taste
Charming poem for young ones - reaffirms basic numbers for the little ones and, as is always the case with your work, it is crying to be read aloud to a group of kids sitting at your feet. The rhyming in this one is terrific and I love the cadence. Terrific addition for the Book of Sawyer. Jean
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Charming poem for young ones - reaffirms basic numbers for the little ones and, as is always the case with your work, it is crying to be read aloud to a group of kids sitting at your feet. The rhyming in this one is terrific and I love the cadence. Terrific addition for the Book of Sawyer. Jean
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Jean, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Dean Kuch
Ha-ha, well, earthworms have two hearts but very tiny brains, so...
This was very cute, Brooke. It read a lot like many of the poems I read to my kids at bedtime when they were both about three, or four. At five, they'd already been exposed to the more horrific aspects of poetry and prose (and not by me either, believe it or not, LOL), and soon they had me reading the poems and stories of Edgar Alan Poe, Charles Dickens and Edgar Rice Burroughs instead.
Well done, poor little guys, heh-heh...
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Ha-ha, well, earthworms have two hearts but very tiny brains, so...
This was very cute, Brooke. It read a lot like many of the poems I read to my kids at bedtime when they were both about three, or four. At five, they'd already been exposed to the more horrific aspects of poetry and prose (and not by me either, believe it or not, LOL), and soon they had me reading the poems and stories of Edgar Alan Poe, Charles Dickens and Edgar Rice Burroughs instead.
Well done, poor little guys, heh-heh...
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much, Dean - my daughter in particular loved the dark stuff like Hillaire Belloc's cautionary tales and Isabel, who eats the bear instead of vice versa - and she adored Edward Gorey, like the one about the family members who disappear one by one while picnicking. Brooke
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It's funny how the apple never really falls far from the tree, isn't it? My daughter Chelsea has taken to writing horror fiction herself. She just received a 100% from her English teacher on our collaboration of The Tear. The teacher said she'll never look at portraits the same way again, heh-heh.
That's my girl! :}
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As a proud mother and grandmother, I am smiling at your fatherly pride - isn't it great when they do things that make your heart swell? :-)
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Yep. She's a great kid. :}
Comment from rjuselius
Haha ð??? this is an amusing piece of poetic art! Love the countdown. It's a witty take on 5 little pigs.
Thank you for sharing!
Rebekka x
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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Haha ð??? this is an amusing piece of poetic art! Love the countdown. It's a witty take on 5 little pigs.
Thank you for sharing!
Rebekka x
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Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much, Rebekka :-) Brooke
Comment from Drew Delaney
Very wonderful child's poem.
Every second line rhymes and the rhythm is good. I like the backward numbers being learned here. I wish kids could memorize these days like we did when we were younger. Those ones you never forget. Awesome writing, Brooke.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Very wonderful child's poem.
Every second line rhymes and the rhythm is good. I like the backward numbers being learned here. I wish kids could memorize these days like we did when we were younger. Those ones you never forget. Awesome writing, Brooke.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much, Drew - I appreciate your generous review and your thoughtful comments :-) Brooke
