Rain is Falling
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Comment from nancy_e_davis
Oh too bad, maybe you can get a picture later. What a darling poem to help the children with numbers and teaching them to love the lovely yellow flowers and dandelions at the same time! Good work Brooke. I enjoyed this very much. Nancy
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Oh too bad, maybe you can get a picture later. What a darling poem to help the children with numbers and teaching them to love the lovely yellow flowers and dandelions at the same time! Good work Brooke. I enjoyed this very much. Nancy
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Yep, I'll tell Miranda to snap his picture in the rain if they should ever see rain again. LOL Thanks so much, Nancy :-) Brooke
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I love it. It's another first grade poem. It flows and It's just fun. This poem is a perfect children's poem. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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I love it. It's another first grade poem. It flows and It's just fun. This poem is a perfect children's poem. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Thank you so very much, Barbara - I'm so glad the school year is starting and you will be sharing my poems. I very much appreciate your doing that and your generous sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from Donya Quijote
I just have to ask you this, but do you notice the effect that the word plop has on the rhythm and cadence of the poem? It really is a nice effect, great sound quality and sensory appeal. The counting of the drops and the worms also adds to this effect. Strong visuals make this poem stand out. That child-like voicing you have is also present. It's almost as if a child is narrating the poem. I like the change in rhythm and cadence, it's like moving from one tempo to another in music, fast to slow, heavy to light. It's the effect of the word plop which doesn't appear in the latter half. (If I got the terminology wrong, I know you know what I mean. Maybe you could tell me what I mean. I would like that...)
I like the added debate between grandpa and grandma. I'm on her side.
Wonderfully upbeat. There is indeed much beauty and wonder to been seen during and after the rain. Beautifully done. Made me smile and remember the rain when I was young.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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I just have to ask you this, but do you notice the effect that the word plop has on the rhythm and cadence of the poem? It really is a nice effect, great sound quality and sensory appeal. The counting of the drops and the worms also adds to this effect. Strong visuals make this poem stand out. That child-like voicing you have is also present. It's almost as if a child is narrating the poem. I like the change in rhythm and cadence, it's like moving from one tempo to another in music, fast to slow, heavy to light. It's the effect of the word plop which doesn't appear in the latter half. (If I got the terminology wrong, I know you know what I mean. Maybe you could tell me what I mean. I would like that...)
I like the added debate between grandpa and grandma. I'm on her side.
Wonderfully upbeat. There is indeed much beauty and wonder to been seen during and after the rain. Beautifully done. Made me smile and remember the rain when I was young.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Donya, thank you so much, my generous and attentive friend :-) Yes, I agree about "plop." I do not know a term for it though.
The grandparent thing didn't occur to me until I reached that stanza - I'm glad it worked out :-) Brooke
Comment from madhatter1977
This is a fantastic entry for the children smile contest! I love the set up and onomatopoeia of "Plop"! The wriggling worms is great alliteration and it feels like the author is the child hearing tales from gran and grandad. I really loved it and good luck, Pete :)
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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This is a fantastic entry for the children smile contest! I love the set up and onomatopoeia of "Plop"! The wriggling worms is great alliteration and it feels like the author is the child hearing tales from gran and grandad. I really loved it and good luck, Pete :)
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Pete, thank you so much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from DR DIP
that little book of adewpearlers is getting thicker by the day Brookster! lol
you know I would really appreciate this if I hadn't just reviewed the lasts offerings of love in the desert by deepwater ..what an amazing wordsmith he is as well
enyoyed it but struggle with 'plop' to describe rain
it sounds like it's raining shit!
do you know what I mean?
xxdip
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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that little book of adewpearlers is getting thicker by the day Brookster! lol
you know I would really appreciate this if I hadn't just reviewed the lasts offerings of love in the desert by deepwater ..what an amazing wordsmith he is as well
enyoyed it but struggle with 'plop' to describe rain
it sounds like it's raining shit!
do you know what I mean?
xxdip
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much, dip, for your thoughtful feedback :-) Brooke
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always a pleasure
xxdip
Comment from Tonulak
Dear Brooke,,
This is a lovely entry into the "When Children Smile" contest. Subtle mirth and humor is deftly woven with subtle messages of life. I really liked this one--Ted
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Dear Brooke,,
This is a lovely entry into the "When Children Smile" contest. Subtle mirth and humor is deftly woven with subtle messages of life. I really liked this one--Ted
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Ted, thank you so very much for your generous and supportive review :-) Brooke
Comment from ravenblack
Coming off a two day nightly deluge, so your plops and drops really snapped. The beginning, counting brought back fond memories of " rain rain go away/ come again another day". And I still say those tiny suns are from wizards.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Coming off a two day nightly deluge, so your plops and drops really snapped. The beginning, counting brought back fond memories of " rain rain go away/ come again another day". And I still say those tiny suns are from wizards.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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thanks so much, ravenblack - glad you made a connection :-) Brooke
Comment from ArtGal
Brooke, this will be great for children to learn their numbers. I can tell you that after about 5-6 straight days of rain, we have more dandelions than I've seen in a long time, and the worms are abundant for sure. I liked the thinking of Grandma and Grandpa, but you just may be right about the wizards making the lawn! The writer seems to know best, lol. This is adorable, Brooke, and really enjoyed. . .Sharon
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Brooke, this will be great for children to learn their numbers. I can tell you that after about 5-6 straight days of rain, we have more dandelions than I've seen in a long time, and the worms are abundant for sure. I liked the thinking of Grandma and Grandpa, but you just may be right about the wizards making the lawn! The writer seems to know best, lol. This is adorable, Brooke, and really enjoyed. . .Sharon
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Sharon, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
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Always very welcome, Brooke!
Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed your counting poem and VMargarite's drawing as a stand-in until it rains again in Southern California. The "gold" and your rhymed couplets are magical! Hugs- Joan
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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I enjoyed your counting poem and VMargarite's drawing as a stand-in until it rains again in Southern California. The "gold" and your rhymed couplets are magical! Hugs- Joan
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Joan, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
We have rain a plenty here, Brooke! I love this children's poem, it not only flows brilliantly you are teaching children about the ways of the worm. They always come up when the rain plops down! LOL. This is a lovely one for the contest, I do wish you all the luck in the world. :) Sandra. xsx
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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We have rain a plenty here, Brooke! I love this children's poem, it not only flows brilliantly you are teaching children about the ways of the worm. They always come up when the rain plops down! LOL. This is a lovely one for the contest, I do wish you all the luck in the world. :) Sandra. xsx
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Sandra, thank you so much :-) Brooke
