Day Closes Up Her Shop
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Comment from artemis53
great piece, brooke. Obviously you are a day creature while I am one of those 'night ones.' this is beautiful and precise as always.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
great piece, brooke. Obviously you are a day creature while I am one of those 'night ones.' this is beautiful and precise as always.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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artemis, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from dbmccarter
I like the image of the closing of the shop for the sunset and the assurance that the sun will return. The art is out of this world.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
I like the image of the closing of the shop for the sunset and the assurance that the sun will return. The art is out of this world.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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dbmccarter, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Jen Gentry
A very wise woman once told me, forget the day each night the things that you regret for the Lord offers up and new chance with every dawn of the new day. Your poem offers up the hope of a new dawn each new day
Blessings
Jenny
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
A very wise woman once told me, forget the day each night the things that you regret for the Lord offers up and new chance with every dawn of the new day. Your poem offers up the hope of a new dawn each new day
Blessings
Jenny
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Jenny, thank you so much for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Glasstruth
Love the title of this. So original! The metaphors seem simple, but not so. It's cleverly so natural as in,
"Day closes up her shop each night
to take her inventory,
but Sun won't waste upon some shelf" and in
"Day closes up her shop each night
but opens up each morning," Your poem shines. Les
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
Love the title of this. So original! The metaphors seem simple, but not so. It's cleverly so natural as in,
"Day closes up her shop each night
to take her inventory,
but Sun won't waste upon some shelf" and in
"Day closes up her shop each night
but opens up each morning," Your poem shines. Les
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Les, thank you so very much for your thoughtful reading of this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from TOPE1
The poetess talks about day, sun , morning and night. She explains that day always come to end every night and sun will shine to show preservation and storage. Life is a continuous journey, the day will start with morning. This poem has 12 lines and 3 stanzas (written in quatrain) . Some lines are 7 syllables while others are 8 syllables. Her poem is dominated by personification and it has a rhyme. A good poem but take note of this sentence: "but Sun won't waste upon some shelf". I guess the word shelf ought to be shelves.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
The poetess talks about day, sun , morning and night. She explains that day always come to end every night and sun will shine to show preservation and storage. Life is a continuous journey, the day will start with morning. This poem has 12 lines and 3 stanzas (written in quatrain) . Some lines are 7 syllables while others are 8 syllables. Her poem is dominated by personification and it has a rhyme. A good poem but take note of this sentence: "but Sun won't waste upon some shelf". I guess the word shelf ought to be shelves.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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TOPE, thank you so much for your positive review - why would the sun be on multiple shelves? Brooke
Comment from june bug
Wow! I enjoyed this poem so much. What a great comparison of a shop, to day and night. Your photo was absolutely spectacular! All the best to you.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
Wow! I enjoyed this poem so much. What a great comparison of a shop, to day and night. Your photo was absolutely spectacular! All the best to you.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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june bug, thanks so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
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You are welcome. Hope you have a great Easter. Best regards.
Comment from haikufan
I like the picture you chose for it goes so well with your poem. Your poem is a very happy one and includes God as He is the one who created the Sun. I like the title you chose also for your poem.
Very nicely done.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
I like the picture you chose for it goes so well with your poem. Your poem is a very happy one and includes God as He is the one who created the Sun. I like the title you chose also for your poem.
Very nicely done.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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haikufan, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from elgone
I like the imagery of the sun being put away on a shelf until it time for day again, just as if a shop keeper was turning out the light before closing up for the night.
E
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
I like the imagery of the sun being put away on a shelf until it time for day again, just as if a shop keeper was turning out the light before closing up for the night.
E
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Elgone, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from debskatz
Hey brooke,
A nice tribute to the sun. It certainly can produce some gorgeous sunsets, I wouldn't know about sunrises! lol
You managed a near rhyme! Glad to see not much has changed since I've been gone. lol
A beautiful poem, as always. Thanks for sharing it with us!
smiles,
deb
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
Hey brooke,
A nice tribute to the sun. It certainly can produce some gorgeous sunsets, I wouldn't know about sunrises! lol
You managed a near rhyme! Glad to see not much has changed since I've been gone. lol
A beautiful poem, as always. Thanks for sharing it with us!
smiles,
deb
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Deb, thanks so very much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Joan E.
What an intriguing personification and striking picture! I also particularly liked your use of genders and the vivid "crimson ink" metaphor. -Joan
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
What an intriguing personification and striking picture! I also particularly liked your use of genders and the vivid "crimson ink" metaphor. -Joan
Comment Written 04-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2012
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Joan, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke