Mama Tries to Pin the Blame
two wildly wildly modified triolets125 total reviews
Comment from livelylinda
Brooke: this is hilarious! The picture is so perfect because it looks like he is actually reciting the words to the poem. Another wonderful writing. Linda
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Brooke: this is hilarious! The picture is so perfect because it looks like he is actually reciting the words to the poem. Another wonderful writing. Linda
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Linda, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Malerie
Too cute, I really enjoyed reading this piece. The picture really brings life to your work. I really like the last stanza:
"T'was Mama who gelled up my hair,
then snapped me naked in the bath.
Without a stitch of clothes to wear,
I shuddered when she gelled my hair,
poor me with every part stripped bare
(and folks think mine's a primrose path).
T'was Mama who gelled up my hair,
so all the the whole wide world could laugh".
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Too cute, I really enjoyed reading this piece. The picture really brings life to your work. I really like the last stanza:
"T'was Mama who gelled up my hair,
then snapped me naked in the bath.
Without a stitch of clothes to wear,
I shuddered when she gelled my hair,
poor me with every part stripped bare
(and folks think mine's a primrose path).
T'was Mama who gelled up my hair,
so all the the whole wide world could laugh".
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Malerie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Sawyers so cute!!!! I loved it. LOL, I also noticed all the toys he has in the bathtub with him. How perfect! By the way your poem is perfect too. I get so wrapped up with that little guy, I forget the purpose is to review your poems.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Sawyers so cute!!!! I loved it. LOL, I also noticed all the toys he has in the bathtub with him. How perfect! By the way your poem is perfect too. I get so wrapped up with that little guy, I forget the purpose is to review your poems.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Barbara, thanks so much. Bath time is his favorite part of the day because of all the things Miranda does to entertain him in the tub :-) It's like the bathroom is a second playroom. LOL Brooke
Comment from TOMORAL
Hahahaha! This gave me a big laugh this morning. I can't get enough of your Sawyer. He is just the cutest thing. I guess you must have a thousand photos of him. He'll be able to see his whole life one day. This is excellent, and I'm still smiling...thanks.
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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Hahahaha! This gave me a big laugh this morning. I can't get enough of your Sawyer. He is just the cutest thing. I guess you must have a thousand photos of him. He'll be able to see his whole life one day. This is excellent, and I'm still smiling...thanks.
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Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Tomoral, thank you so much. Yes, I have a thousand, which is still only the tip of the iceberg of what Miranda has stored on her computer. LOL
Comment from Robin Gilmor
Grandma has set the record straight once and for all! But one can not help but chuckle at bared bodied Sawyer with the soaped up do. Great combination of the two triolets that makes you joyous lines roll off the tongue. An enjoyable
verse. Smiles, Robin :)
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Grandma has set the record straight once and for all! But one can not help but chuckle at bared bodied Sawyer with the soaped up do. Great combination of the two triolets that makes you joyous lines roll off the tongue. An enjoyable
verse. Smiles, Robin :)
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Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much, Robin - it is a crime what that girl does to her son. LOL :-) Brooke
