I Wandered the Desert
rhyming quatrains in 6/5/6/5140 total reviews
Comment from Gladness
Yes, I have often heard it said, "put some feet on your prayers" or words to that effect. The person in this poem seems to be going about things all wrong, poor thing.
Anita
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Yes, I have often heard it said, "put some feet on your prayers" or words to that effect. The person in this poem seems to be going about things all wrong, poor thing.
Anita
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Anita, thank you so much - I love that quote and your insightful understanding of my message, one a bunch of people failed to get :-) Brooke
Comment from Pegcook
"I Wandered The Desert" contains everything a reader desires in a poem; emotional content that moves up and down, a variety of mental images, valley/desert/garden/heavens, and a powerful point at the end for the reader to contemplate.
And the author maintains her high standard of consistent meter and rhyme.
Love It!
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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"I Wandered The Desert" contains everything a reader desires in a poem; emotional content that moves up and down, a variety of mental images, valley/desert/garden/heavens, and a powerful point at the end for the reader to contemplate.
And the author maintains her high standard of consistent meter and rhyme.
Love It!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Peg, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from emrpoems
Nothing is impossible if we put our trust in God and if there was a situation that warranted a sea in the desert God would put one. Nothing is impossible if you put your trust in Him.
All impossible situations you write about. Did God solve any for you? Sometimes He answers in ways we do not expect or understand
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Nothing is impossible if we put our trust in God and if there was a situation that warranted a sea in the desert God would put one. Nothing is impossible if you put your trust in Him.
All impossible situations you write about. Did God solve any for you? Sometimes He answers in ways we do not expect or understand
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Thank you for your review, emrpoems. My point in this poem is not that God falls short. It is that people fall short. There are some folks who think all prayer and faith involve is asking - I want something or need something, so I will pray for it. Well, if you want a garden, you really should plant some seeds, not just sit on your tush and ask God to give you the flowers without any work on your part. :-) Brooke
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I agree. God always says if you do this I will do that. He expects us to do our part. however having done all you can, He says we must stand and see Him work out our problem
Comment from Glasstruth
Our expectations exceed what's sometimes unachievable. Maybe aiming a little lower with goals might make one more happy. As long as you can claim success then the next step is easier. My favorite is the last verse. The message is clear. Well done! Les
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Our expectations exceed what's sometimes unachievable. Maybe aiming a little lower with goals might make one more happy. As long as you can claim success then the next step is easier. My favorite is the last verse. The message is clear. Well done! Les
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
Comment from Angel Debbie
Nice Faith contest write. With the picture showing much turmoil yes I would say you would need a prayer to get through it safely. Thank you for sharing this wonderful faith riden write.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Nice Faith contest write. With the picture showing much turmoil yes I would say you would need a prayer to get through it safely. Thank you for sharing this wonderful faith riden write.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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thank you for your thoughtful review, AngelDebbie :-) Brooke
Comment from humpwhistle
I'm especially intrigued by this poem, Brooke, because
at cursory glance I could see the same lesson thrice repeated. But that is not the case--although they are related, hence the apt answer for all at the end.
ill-logical expectation, ill-advised decision,over-expection.
Your poem makes me think about the various way there are to ponder 'blind faith'.
Has Sawyer been out making Bigfoot tracks again?
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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I'm especially intrigued by this poem, Brooke, because
at cursory glance I could see the same lesson thrice repeated. But that is not the case--although they are related, hence the apt answer for all at the end.
ill-logical expectation, ill-advised decision,over-expection.
Your poem makes me think about the various way there are to ponder 'blind faith'.
Has Sawyer been out making Bigfoot tracks again?
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much, Lee, for your insightful and generous response to this poem. As for Bigfoot, try to keep that on the down low - we don't want to spoil his fun :-) Brooke
Comment from tbacha58
I wailed to the Heavens
for what wasn't there --
perhaps what I needed
was more than a prayer.
Happy Easter to you and your beautify family. Love his picture. Whoa for this amazing contest poem. Your depth to feel and write poetry will flow as quick as the river flow. You are born just to write and take care of your family. Amazing the strength of feelings that pop up while you write. Love Terry xoxo
Sorry I have been absent visiting my boys in LA. xoxo
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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I wailed to the Heavens
for what wasn't there --
perhaps what I needed
was more than a prayer.
Happy Easter to you and your beautify family. Love his picture. Whoa for this amazing contest poem. Your depth to feel and write poetry will flow as quick as the river flow. You are born just to write and take care of your family. Amazing the strength of feelings that pop up while you write. Love Terry xoxo
Sorry I have been absent visiting my boys in LA. xoxo
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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If I had the chance to visit my family, I would dump Fan story in one second flat. LOL Thanks so very much, Terry :-) Brooke
Comment from RYME4U
What an excellent point you make with this poem. Perfect rhyme and rhythm.Simple but very moving words. I so enjoyed reading this.!!!
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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What an excellent point you make with this poem. Perfect rhyme and rhythm.Simple but very moving words. I so enjoyed reading this.!!!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much, RYME4U :-) Brooke
Comment from l.raven
Hi Brooke, OMG, when I get done laughing at the picture....where doe Miranda come up with this stuff???...I would poor Sawyer...but I think he is enjoying it...LOL...
now back the your poem...LOL
there are a lot of saying that could go with this one...God helps those who help themselves....
we are stronger than we think....follow through what we start....prayer come only do so much...the rest is up to you...very well written Brooke...Luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Hi Brooke, OMG, when I get done laughing at the picture....where doe Miranda come up with this stuff???...I would poor Sawyer...but I think he is enjoying it...LOL...
now back the your poem...LOL
there are a lot of saying that could go with this one...God helps those who help themselves....
we are stronger than we think....follow through what we start....prayer come only do so much...the rest is up to you...very well written Brooke...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much for your insightful reading of this poem, Linda. I fear not everyone got the point nearly so well. As for Sawyer, that is the joy of having a toddler - you can get him to do all sorts of things without his being wise enough to object. LOL :-) Brooke
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LOL...your so welcome Brooke...xxoo
Comment from rama devi
Good didactic poem, showing not telling, the strong and important message delivered deftly in the closing line. Excellent crafting as usual, with fine flawless flow in meter and good rhymes. A musical feel read aloud.
Phonetically, I particularly enjoyed the alliteration in these lines:
but waves weren't rolling
to wash over me.
and
to search for the sky,
but there was no summit
And the two P's in the last stanza work nicely too.
A good 'teaching' poem.
Love, rd
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Good didactic poem, showing not telling, the strong and important message delivered deftly in the closing line. Excellent crafting as usual, with fine flawless flow in meter and good rhymes. A musical feel read aloud.
Phonetically, I particularly enjoyed the alliteration in these lines:
but waves weren't rolling
to wash over me.
and
to search for the sky,
but there was no summit
And the two P's in the last stanza work nicely too.
A good 'teaching' poem.
Love, rd
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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thanks so much, rama devi, for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
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