I Issued an Invitation
poem in mixed meter and abcb rhyme122 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
One thing we can always count on is the sun rising. Although I saw an article today that if we don't start taking care of the ozone we will be in huge trouble. I loved your poem.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014
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One thing we can always count on is the sun rising. Although I saw an article today that if we don't start taking care of the ozone we will be in huge trouble. I loved your poem.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014
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Barbara, thank you, my friend - we have too many folks in denial about our bearing any responsibility for such things. Brooke
Comment from granny goes viral
And if I may be so bold
Because I am getting old
In my blankets I now enfold
All the clocks I have to set back
Then I may hit the sack
Or lie sleepless on my back
Waiting for a snack attack.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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And if I may be so bold
Because I am getting old
In my blankets I now enfold
All the clocks I have to set back
Then I may hit the sack
Or lie sleepless on my back
Waiting for a snack attack.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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granny, thank you so much for your poetic response to my poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Tatarka2
I so much admire your attempting this daunting form, and completing it so well! The poem is perfect, as always. I think this isn't a 6 for me because it didn't reach out and grab me the way some of your more recent poems have. But that's just my humble opinion.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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I so much admire your attempting this daunting form, and completing it so well! The poem is perfect, as always. I think this isn't a 6 for me because it didn't reach out and grab me the way some of your more recent poems have. But that's just my humble opinion.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Aussie
Ooh...I did like this one. Loads of lovely conversation between the sun and you. I guess your days are getting shorter and the sun is sort after. Well written and a shining example to all sunbathers!
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014
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Ooh...I did like this one. Loads of lovely conversation between the sun and you. I guess your days are getting shorter and the sun is sort after. Well written and a shining example to all sunbathers!
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much, Kay - it is only 5:30 and already pitch black - the time changed last night. I hate it. I appreciate your lovely golden stars :-) Brooke
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I hate summer - so we can shake hands on something! Our temps have gone way over and it isn't even summer. Toby doesn't like it either. :-(
Comment from gypsymoth
Excellent, as is your usual. I like the striking colors of the sun against night, along with the artwork.If I had written it, I would have changed one word,"bold". Because nightime is moving in and you're speaking to the sun, I would have used,
"cold" :)
Gypsymoth
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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Excellent, as is your usual. I like the striking colors of the sun against night, along with the artwork.If I had written it, I would have changed one word,"bold". Because nightime is moving in and you're speaking to the sun, I would have used,
"cold" :)
Gypsymoth
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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gypsymoth, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from misscookie
This is beautiful artwork
the sun it is fill with splendor
I love how your words flow.
They captured my attention from the start, thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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This is beautiful artwork
the sun it is fill with splendor
I love how your words flow.
They captured my attention from the start, thank you for sharing
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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Miss Cookie, thank you, my friend :-) Brooke
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You're very welcome. Until next time.
Cookie
Comment from Glasstruth
The personification of the sun is very unique. First time I ever heard of the Sun being polite. The Sun has been worshiped for thousands of years, and I can see why. Without it, like rain, the two give life to everything. Like how you refer to it as a 'dazzling guest' Awesome! Les
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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The personification of the sun is very unique. First time I ever heard of the Sun being polite. The Sun has been worshiped for thousands of years, and I can see why. Without it, like rain, the two give life to everything. Like how you refer to it as a 'dazzling guest' Awesome! Les
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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Les, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from K. Gahler
Love it - word choice, humor, flow. I often find rhyming constrains poets too much and results in awkwardness, but that is definitely not the case here, it works very well. Great poem.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014
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Love it - word choice, humor, flow. I often find rhyming constrains poets too much and results in awkwardness, but that is definitely not the case here, it works very well. Great poem.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014
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K. Gahler, thanks so much :-) I appreciate your generous six stars and thoughtful comments. Brooke
Comment from ElegantButler
What a marvelous personification you have made of the sun. She is indeed a goid friend who chases away the rain and the dark.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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What a marvelous personification you have made of the sun. She is indeed a goid friend who chases away the rain and the dark.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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Elegant Butler, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from royowen
One small error Brooke, 3rd stanza, 3rd line, "she's" should be "she'd" I think. Beautiful short poem that is almost perfect in rhythmic rhymes the rhymes are immaculate, the theme is inventive and very cute, It flows very smoothly with your usual attention to detail, nice abcb rhyming, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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One small error Brooke, 3rd stanza, 3rd line, "she's" should be "she'd" I think. Beautiful short poem that is almost perfect in rhythmic rhymes the rhymes are immaculate, the theme is inventive and very cute, It flows very smoothly with your usual attention to detail, nice abcb rhyming, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much, Roy - that typo was edited earlier :-) Brooke
