Comment from Deniz22

Excellent

Gloom and Sawyer don't seem to go together...a mood oxymoron! This is worth the price of admission..."Floating rainbows, promise dashed by assassins' swords so fearsome."

Well done, Queen of fanstory! :) sixes are gone, alas

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2014

Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

Unusual meter format, but it works for me, and the fun theme suits it, Brooke.

Great whimsical thoughts for kids and adults alike.

Always a pleasure, my friend.

Cheers, Ray xx

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014

Thanks so much, Ray :-) Brooke

Comment from Ben Colder

Excellent

Good morning Sawyer. I see you are sending bubbles in the air. He will soon learn about the weeds when his wife has him cutting the lawn. Well done Brooke. Blessings to the family.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014

Ben, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from CR Delport

Excellent

I love bubbles. So does my dogs. They can chase bubbles all over the yard :) Love the pic of the Cute Little One. The poem is very well written. Good luck.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2014

Comment from Sasha

Excellent

DAdum DAdum DAdum sounds like the theme tune to Jaws to me. But ignore me, I'm tone deaf...I even read the rules and found myself even more confused with the 8th syllable. All that aside, I just love the image of the lonely stems left to grieve, so desperately in need of cheering up. Marvelous imagery with this one and a sweet story to go along with it. I like this one very much, being such a big fan of dandelions, and think this is a terrific entry for this contest. I sincerely wish you all the best.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014

Thanks so much, Valerie :-) I always know I'll leave one of your reviews with a smile :-) Brooke

Comment from Neonewman

Excellent

Excellent read and great use of the ABAB rhythm, I enjoyed the entirety of your work and offer five stars. Good luck in the contest and God Bless!

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2014

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Brooke...

Cute Sawyer moment.

Yep, time to start packin' up the dandelions for another year.

You know, if those darn things didn't grow rampant on their own, people would want them - buy them to have them.
Not me so much! LOL

Great poem. The best of luck in the contest

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*.*)

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014

Jax, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is an excellent write, brooke, great imagery of the happiness that comes from blowing bubbles. dandelions die, but bubbles are filled with continuous magic joy. I enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest. love the picture.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014

Thanks so much, my friend, for your contest encouragement and your thoughtful comments :-) Brooke

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

Yikes! That is going to mess my ionic meter up if I read too many of these. I know I do it accidentally once in a while, but I don't realize it until Rose points it out. The story line is fun and you did an excellent job with the meter and rhyme. Good luck. Nancy

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014

Nancy, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

It is lovely to read your poem, Brooke, there are so many sad poems on here today. This is beautifully uplifting. You have written so many lovely descriptive words, and the last stanza pulls it all together with a smile! :) Sandra xsx

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014

Thanks so much, Sandra :-) Brooke