I Wandered the Desert
rhyming quatrains in 6/5/6/5140 total reviews
Comment from words
Ah, I love this one Brooke,such a gentle reminder that life is a participatory experience .
You have such a life touch with the profound.
Wish you would publish collection of your gentle wisdo
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Hugs, your fan, d
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Ah, I love this one Brooke,such a gentle reminder that life is a participatory experience .
You have such a life touch with the profound.
Wish you would publish collection of your gentle wisdo
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Hugs, your fan, d
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Thank you, Diane - you and my daughter sound just alike :-) Brooke
Comment from Lena Borghi
Hi Brooke,
Love the message here.
Good rhymes and great sing-song rhythm.
Enjoyed this. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Lena
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Hi Brooke,
Love the message here.
Good rhymes and great sing-song rhythm.
Enjoyed this. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Lena
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Lena, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from c_lucas
The problem lies in the fact that we want answers without Knee Mail. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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The problem lies in the fact that we want answers without Knee Mail. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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charlie, thank you for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
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You're welcome, Brooke. Charlie
Comment from Joy Graham
I haven't seen you use this syllable scheme before but it worked perfectly to tell your story. Excellent abcb rhyme scheme with solid simple rhymes. The picture and message make me wonder what the message was about but your last line sums it all up perfectly. We all wander the desert throughout our life searching. Many times angels step in and pull us through. This is a lovely entry for the faith poetry contest. Simple yet elegant. Good luck to you in this contest. You have a contender here yet again!
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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I haven't seen you use this syllable scheme before but it worked perfectly to tell your story. Excellent abcb rhyme scheme with solid simple rhymes. The picture and message make me wonder what the message was about but your last line sums it all up perfectly. We all wander the desert throughout our life searching. Many times angels step in and pull us through. This is a lovely entry for the faith poetry contest. Simple yet elegant. Good luck to you in this contest. You have a contender here yet again!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much, Joy - yeah, I'm not sure if I've ever used 6/5 before or not :-) Brooke
Comment from Robert Lee Brown
Brooke, this a great contest poem entry. It contains wisdom that most people don't have. They pray but their prayers are not answered and; through their own errors lose faith in prayer. Best of luck in the contest. This is a very insightful write but many judges can't understand it. Bob
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Brooke, this a great contest poem entry. It contains wisdom that most people don't have. They pray but their prayers are not answered and; through their own errors lose faith in prayer. Best of luck in the contest. This is a very insightful write but many judges can't understand it. Bob
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Bob, thank you so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Brooke, that is really lovely. Its simplicity makes it far more powerful and has so much more meaning. It is a lovely poem of faith, searching for something that was beyond being found. But just a simple prayer will find you, as you find prayer. Good luck in the contest. xsx Sandra
I love that photo of Sawyer as an Easter Bunny, lol, he looks so cute! :)
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Brooke, that is really lovely. Its simplicity makes it far more powerful and has so much more meaning. It is a lovely poem of faith, searching for something that was beyond being found. But just a simple prayer will find you, as you find prayer. Good luck in the contest. xsx Sandra
I love that photo of Sawyer as an Easter Bunny, lol, he looks so cute! :)
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much, Sandra - yes, he is a cutie :-) Brooke
Comment from Gungalo
I wailed to the Heavens
for what wasn't there --
perhaps what I needed
was more than a prayer.
This is a very good set of quatrains Brooke. To wander the desert for anything is not good. You know that. LOL and what is more than a prayer?
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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I wailed to the Heavens
for what wasn't there --
perhaps what I needed
was more than a prayer.
This is a very good set of quatrains Brooke. To wander the desert for anything is not good. You know that. LOL and what is more than a prayer?
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Thank you for reviewing, Gungalo :-) What is more than prayer is lifting a hand to do something without just expecting a prayer to give us whatever we ask for. Brooke
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You are right Brooke.
Comment from fastdigits
Ah, as always, in perfect rhythm
as your words dance down the
screen and with just the right
amount of wit and humor splattered
around to bring the curl of a smile
on the face of all who read your
work.
Well done and good luck
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Ah, as always, in perfect rhythm
as your words dance down the
screen and with just the right
amount of wit and humor splattered
around to bring the curl of a smile
on the face of all who read your
work.
Well done and good luck
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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fastdigits, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with seeds/weeds. Good rhythm and flow. Good alliteration with waves/weren't...search/sky...scattered/seeds...for/flowers. Good eye catching photo followed by a clear message.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with seeds/weeds. Good rhythm and flow. Good alliteration with waves/weren't...search/sky...scattered/seeds...for/flowers. Good eye catching photo followed by a clear message.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Righteous Riter, thank you for reviewing. Brooke
Comment from CR Delport
I know this is a faith metaphor, but the desert is the last place I would wonder. This is well written as always. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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I know this is a faith metaphor, but the desert is the last place I would wonder. This is well written as always. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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CR, thank you so much :-) Brooke
