Writings From the Heart
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Comment from tati
Thank you for sharing this very thoughtful poem. Since I joined fanstory, I started to write my parents' adage, several of them in "Daddy Dearest" (that children were always precious in parent's eyes), in "My Mother's Story" (that we should appreciate and take care our own body) and in Mother (it was about writing). This way I feel I have carried over some of their advice to my children and grandchildren. This is truly a wonderful reminder. Thank you from my heart, GW.
tati, May 02, 2010
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Thank you for sharing this very thoughtful poem. Since I joined fanstory, I started to write my parents' adage, several of them in "Daddy Dearest" (that children were always precious in parent's eyes), in "My Mother's Story" (that we should appreciate and take care our own body) and in Mother (it was about writing). This way I feel I have carried over some of their advice to my children and grandchildren. This is truly a wonderful reminder. Thank you from my heart, GW.
tati, May 02, 2010
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thank you
Comment from Oatmeal
deepwater,
Wonderful theme. The flow was nice. All arrangement is understandable. Very reflective, all thoughts are very well described, understandable and comprehensible.
I saw no SPAG and no typos. Everything looked in place.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
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deepwater,
Wonderful theme. The flow was nice. All arrangement is understandable. Very reflective, all thoughts are very well described, understandable and comprehensible.
I saw no SPAG and no typos. Everything looked in place.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
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thank you
Comment from DragonSkulls
I really doubt it. What a great piece you have penned deep. I see that things like values and morals are few and far between among the kids of today, let alone tomorrow. Unwritten things seem to be dwindling to myths of a past. Great write. /Ron
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I really doubt it. What a great piece you have penned deep. I see that things like values and morals are few and far between among the kids of today, let alone tomorrow. Unwritten things seem to be dwindling to myths of a past. Great write. /Ron
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thanks Ron
Comment from words
Liked your pondering on:
ill this generation pass the secrets of our forefathers foreword
to be carried over to their sons?
Short, simple and to the point, my favorite type of write.
I do think the answer is, yes. But, I guess history will tell us.
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Liked your pondering on:
ill this generation pass the secrets of our forefathers foreword
to be carried over to their sons?
Short, simple and to the point, my favorite type of write.
I do think the answer is, yes. But, I guess history will tell us.
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thank you words
Comment from Jarlsbane
I think this is a most profound question you ask in this poem. Indeed, I wonder what is being passed on to our posterity... honor or shame?
foreword = a preview found at the front of a book
forward = to move ahead
-jarls
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I think this is a most profound question you ask in this poem. Indeed, I wonder what is being passed on to our posterity... honor or shame?
foreword = a preview found at the front of a book
forward = to move ahead
-jarls
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thank you
Comment from AnnaLinda
GW,
I like your short, but very deep and reflective
poem. I especially like your entry line. Your
poem encourages your readers to think a little
deeper.
I think your use of a question is very effective:
"will this generation pass the secrets of our forefathers foreword
to be carried over to their sons?"
I might personally capitalize the 'will' as it is a new
thought and sentence, and you also capitalized your first
sentence. Just my thoughts on that.
Very well done!
Linda
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GW,
I like your short, but very deep and reflective
poem. I especially like your entry line. Your
poem encourages your readers to think a little
deeper.
I think your use of a question is very effective:
"will this generation pass the secrets of our forefathers foreword
to be carried over to their sons?"
I might personally capitalize the 'will' as it is a new
thought and sentence, and you also capitalized your first
sentence. Just my thoughts on that.
Very well done!
Linda
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thank you Linda
Comment from laren
This is a very nice short poem whith a question. We need to reflect about that. It's not easy. It's very well written. I really enjoyed reading your poem.
Congratulations!
Laren
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This is a very nice short poem whith a question. We need to reflect about that. It's not easy. It's very well written. I really enjoyed reading your poem.
Congratulations!
Laren
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thank you
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You're welcome,
Laren
Comment from dragonqueen1983
you have an interesting poem here. ti reminds us all of a time before writing where onlyt word of mouth was used. well done. keep on writing
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you have an interesting poem here. ti reminds us all of a time before writing where onlyt word of mouth was used. well done. keep on writing
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Comment from Pili Pubul
Good question, I hope so , it is truly up to us. A lot of depth in a few words. Your poetry always leave me thinking.
Thank you for sharing.
will this generation pass the secrets of our forefathers foreword
to be carried over to their sons?
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Good question, I hope so , it is truly up to us. A lot of depth in a few words. Your poetry always leave me thinking.
Thank you for sharing.
will this generation pass the secrets of our forefathers foreword
to be carried over to their sons?
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Comment from GentleWind
I enjoyed this piece so much. It reminds me of the family who strives to teach the young the wisdom of the ones who went before. May we always be willing to teach our young ones the truth so they may live in peace and security.
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I enjoyed this piece so much. It reminds me of the family who strives to teach the young the wisdom of the ones who went before. May we always be willing to teach our young ones the truth so they may live in peace and security.
Comment Written 01-May-2010
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