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Comment from mrsmajor
I know this poem is supposed to give us some understnding, but what that is is not clear to me, I think you have missed the exact syllable count in your Rictameter, fourth line has 7 syllable.....I give you 4 stars for the effort at wrtitng this form, but I have no idea what you are saing..
Regards
Victoria
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
I know this poem is supposed to give us some understnding, but what that is is not clear to me, I think you have missed the exact syllable count in your Rictameter, fourth line has 7 syllable.....I give you 4 stars for the effort at wrtitng this form, but I have no idea what you are saing..
Regards
Victoria
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
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You are quite welcome..
Comment from Deniz22
I don't get why your words have no meaning, no rhyme, no honey
ao I guess I'll just read them with no gleaning and say "thanks for the money!"
I don't get why your words have no meaning, no rhyme, no honey
ao I guess I'll just read them with no gleaning and say "thanks for the money!"
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
Comment from write hand blue
I've been generous to award you three stars, why? you may ask.
If I wrote something which started with a 'background' that was about 50% unintelligible I would be slated by the reviewers. I don't see why you should be any different.
You have been told this before but you carry on... WHY?
The stars are for the 'background' I couldn't read any further...
PS you could save yourself a lot of dollars by buying a dictionary.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
I've been generous to award you three stars, why? you may ask.
If I wrote something which started with a 'background' that was about 50% unintelligible I would be slated by the reviewers. I don't see why you should be any different.
You have been told this before but you carry on... WHY?
The stars are for the 'background' I couldn't read any further...
PS you could save yourself a lot of dollars by buying a dictionary.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This thought-provoking poem, I think, speaks of the type of person who starts out greedy, blows his money trying to make more, finally succeeds in acquiring wealth, then loses it again. ??
This thought-provoking poem, I think, speaks of the type of person who starts out greedy, blows his money trying to make more, finally succeeds in acquiring wealth, then loses it again. ??
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
Comment from Mai Mai
Hmm... Well... This seems to be one I just don't get. I will allow that maybe the fault is with me and not penalize you in rating. Good luck.
Mai Mai
Hmm... Well... This seems to be one I just don't get. I will allow that maybe the fault is with me and not penalize you in rating. Good luck.
Mai Mai
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
Comment from TiffanyLeeBaldwin
Short but well written. This style of poetry is new to me .. but so is poetry. I am in love. Great vocabulary and amazing thought put into your work. i look forward to reading more of your poetry.
Short but well written. This style of poetry is new to me .. but so is poetry. I am in love. Great vocabulary and amazing thought put into your work. i look forward to reading more of your poetry.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
Comment from donaldww
This poem is greedy! It probably means something in the mind of the poet. In the mind of a reader, not so much. It leaves no deep mark, in fact no mark at all. It gave away its resources on L4:
Think, boast, chat, pride poor like fools = 7 syllables, need 8
Salue, et bon chance!
DW
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
This poem is greedy! It probably means something in the mind of the poet. In the mind of a reader, not so much. It leaves no deep mark, in fact no mark at all. It gave away its resources on L4:
Think, boast, chat, pride poor like fools = 7 syllables, need 8
Salue, et bon chance!
DW
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
Comment from prayingpoet
Seems as though you have chosen words (any word ) to type and hope they make sense together (they don't ) sorry. Wish I could be kinder and don't intend to be rude. I guess if you want to keep us reading and rating you, we will do so as long as you keep handing out $1.25 or more, people will keep reviewing.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
Seems as though you have chosen words (any word ) to type and hope they make sense together (they don't ) sorry. Wish I could be kinder and don't intend to be rude. I guess if you want to keep us reading and rating you, we will do so as long as you keep handing out $1.25 or more, people will keep reviewing.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
Comment from Laurie Clayton
Hello there,
I'm afraid that I can't comment on the form of the poem, as I have no experience of the rictometer.
I think that I get a sense of ambiguity to what you are trying to say, but for me, it needs a little more substance, a little more of your thought process on show.
Perhaps, I'm not getting it ay all,
Best wishes,
Laurie
Hello there,
I'm afraid that I can't comment on the form of the poem, as I have no experience of the rictometer.
I think that I get a sense of ambiguity to what you are trying to say, but for me, it needs a little more substance, a little more of your thought process on show.
Perhaps, I'm not getting it ay all,
Best wishes,
Laurie
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
Comment from angelmagnet
You capture the great sorrow of today's living. It is rare to find those that are not the center of their universe. That's how I interpret your lines.
You capture the great sorrow of today's living. It is rare to find those that are not the center of their universe. That's how I interpret your lines.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013