White the World
a poem in rhyming couplets139 total reviews
Comment from krys123
Brooke;
progressive alliteration in "soft the sound as snow is swirling" and "where the Winter's waved her wand" and
"wind is whirling" and again "winters waved her wand" and
"Pure the pearls the world is wearing" and "world is white" and lastly "Winter's waved her wand", inventive and ingeniously creative imagination, marvelous metaphorical concepts.
And tremendous descriptive and expressive imagery: "Crisp the air as wind is whirling,"
sending flakes of luster twirling."
One right after another you let the reader get fascinated with ongoing alliteration and hit with snowballs from fabulous imagery.
Thank you for sharing and posting and let me complement you on your very beautiful picture that complements your poem so well.
Alex
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014
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Brooke;
progressive alliteration in "soft the sound as snow is swirling" and "where the Winter's waved her wand" and
"wind is whirling" and again "winters waved her wand" and
"Pure the pearls the world is wearing" and "world is white" and lastly "Winter's waved her wand", inventive and ingeniously creative imagination, marvelous metaphorical concepts.
And tremendous descriptive and expressive imagery: "Crisp the air as wind is whirling,"
sending flakes of luster twirling."
One right after another you let the reader get fascinated with ongoing alliteration and hit with snowballs from fabulous imagery.
Thank you for sharing and posting and let me complement you on your very beautiful picture that complements your poem so well.
Alex
Comment Written 14-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much, Alex :-) Brooke
Comment from donaldww
Winter is on its way (isn't it always?) but hopefully snow won't come for at least another month.
In this poem, Winter has "waved her wand," the "wind is whirling", spreading pearls of snow over what the world is wearing, brightening everything, including parkas and niqabs.
Cheers,
DW
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014
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Winter is on its way (isn't it always?) but hopefully snow won't come for at least another month.
In this poem, Winter has "waved her wand," the "wind is whirling", spreading pearls of snow over what the world is wearing, brightening everything, including parkas and niqabs.
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 14-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014
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I had to scrape a coating off my car windows this morning before driving - but some states have a couple feet, so I'm not complaining :-) Thanks so much, Donald :-) Brooke
Comment from Ben Colder
Somebody waved the wand or left the ice box open. Well, Sawyer , she took us out of the stars and stirred old man winter. Well done Brooke. MADE ME TURN UP THE HEAT.! Blessings to you all.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014
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Somebody waved the wand or left the ice box open. Well, Sawyer , she took us out of the stars and stirred old man winter. Well done Brooke. MADE ME TURN UP THE HEAT.! Blessings to you all.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much, Ben. Sawyer, raised in Southern California, actually remarked to his mom a week ago that it was getting a little chilly when the temps dropped from 95 to 80. LOL :-) Brooke
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LOL.
Comment from TAB_that's me
Great alliteration Brooke and great rhyme in your couplets. This is a fun little ditty of a poem. I'm sure you have lots of snow by now in your part of the country. We'll be getting some tomorrow.
teresa
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014
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Great alliteration Brooke and great rhyme in your couplets. This is a fun little ditty of a poem. I'm sure you have lots of snow by now in your part of the country. We'll be getting some tomorrow.
teresa
Comment Written 14-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014
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Teresa, thanks so much :-) We had our first coating last night. I sure hope the worst stuff doesn't come for many many weeks :-) Brooke
Comment from Gargantuan2
Well, now that I know it's a wand causing this cold onslaught, I will keep an eye out (OUCH!!). Again beautifully written words for nature in its course. :)
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014
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Well, now that I know it's a wand causing this cold onslaught, I will keep an eye out (OUCH!!). Again beautifully written words for nature in its course. :)
Comment Written 14-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014
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LOL - thanks so much, Gargantuan :-) Brooke
Comment from Spitfire
This ALMOST made me like snow. Thinking of it as pearls is lovely. Adding the wand adds a fairy tale quality. On another level white implies purity and wouldn't that be wonderful to say of the world?
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014
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This ALMOST made me like snow. Thinking of it as pearls is lovely. Adding the wand adds a fairy tale quality. On another level white implies purity and wouldn't that be wonderful to say of the world?
Comment Written 14-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014
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Spitfire, thank you. Nothing makes me like snow, but I keep trying to convince myself since I'm stuck with it. LOL :-) Brooke
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You can always move to CA and see Sawyer more often. :-)
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Hey, if I could afford it, I'd be there :-)
Comment from Just2Write
Normally, I hate winter - but your poem is so exuberant that one almost jumps for joy (well, not quite...)
I liked the repeating sounds pearling, swirling, whirling, twirling - Positively giddy with action words and the feeling of coming winter.
Just a wee comment - the winter - is not a proper name, and I would think doesn't get a capital W. Personifying winter and using Winter as its name - then a cap?
Perhaps changing the word 'the' in the Winter for something else would fix - cold Winter?
As always just a suggestion and nothing more. Yours to like or lose.
Rose.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014
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Normally, I hate winter - but your poem is so exuberant that one almost jumps for joy (well, not quite...)
I liked the repeating sounds pearling, swirling, whirling, twirling - Positively giddy with action words and the feeling of coming winter.
Just a wee comment - the winter - is not a proper name, and I would think doesn't get a capital W. Personifying winter and using Winter as its name - then a cap?
Perhaps changing the word 'the' in the Winter for something else would fix - cold Winter?
As always just a suggestion and nothing more. Yours to like or lose.
Rose.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014
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Thank you, Rose - I thought about making it cold Winter - but the cold has an accenting much stronger than the - so I just decided personified winter was going to have a the in front of it LOL Brooke
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As you like it... That's the beauty of poetry.
R.
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:-)
Comment from evilynne
Winter will be here soon enough! But your poem is enchanting and winter has a beauty and magic all of its own.
Oh, come on, now I want to go out and play in the snow! Evi
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014
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Winter will be here soon enough! But your poem is enchanting and winter has a beauty and magic all of its own.
Oh, come on, now I want to go out and play in the snow! Evi
Comment Written 14-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014
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Evi, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from royowen
Already the winter poems are appearing Brooke, our winters are mild, the coldest it gets is about 50 deg. So it's a mild inconvenience, even if it does, we clear off to Bali, our Indonesian neighbour, always tropical, always warm, always cheap! Loved your winter poem, beautifully expressed, even a little wondrous! No frustration yet! Lovely abab rhyming, rhythmic metered tempo, well done, as usual, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014
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Already the winter poems are appearing Brooke, our winters are mild, the coldest it gets is about 50 deg. So it's a mild inconvenience, even if it does, we clear off to Bali, our Indonesian neighbour, always tropical, always warm, always cheap! Loved your winter poem, beautifully expressed, even a little wondrous! No frustration yet! Lovely abab rhyming, rhythmic metered tempo, well done, as usual, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014
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Roy, thank you so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Tatarka2
I loved the alliteration in this one. I think, for purposes of reading to small children, the poems containing identifiable characters might be more interesting. This was lovely, though, and certainly should be included in your collection, when it is published.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014
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I loved the alliteration in this one. I think, for purposes of reading to small children, the poems containing identifiable characters might be more interesting. This was lovely, though, and certainly should be included in your collection, when it is published.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014
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Thank you, Tatarka, for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
