Ten Worms Emerged
a counting poem for children141 total reviews
Comment from words
I thoroughly enjoyed your counting ditty.
I loved earthworms as a child and was conflicted as my father had me collect nightcrawlers for bait. Not wanting to disappoint my father, I learned to bait a hook with them. LOL
Sawyer is a lucky guy, he has his own personal poet. How many kids could boast that?
On that note, bet that you could market a line of personalized poetry for the nanny-set kids. They would make terrific birthday, and holiday gifts.
Hugs, your fan,d
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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I thoroughly enjoyed your counting ditty.
I loved earthworms as a child and was conflicted as my father had me collect nightcrawlers for bait. Not wanting to disappoint my father, I learned to bait a hook with them. LOL
Sawyer is a lucky guy, he has his own personal poet. How many kids could boast that?
On that note, bet that you could market a line of personalized poetry for the nanny-set kids. They would make terrific birthday, and holiday gifts.
Hugs, your fan,d
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Diane, thank you so much - the thought of touching a worm makes my skin crawl almost as much as the recent election results do :-)
He was so cute today. He is a Beatles fan, so as they pulled up the driveway to home after a morning at My Gym, Sawyer started singing, with enthusiasm, "Our house is a very very very fine house." The song was not playing, and Miranda had not said anything to prompt his spontaneous song singing :-) Brooke
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is yet another interesting rendition of the ten little Indians that the author has created with this piece of work. This is very nice indeed. Well done.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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This is yet another interesting rendition of the ten little Indians that the author has created with this piece of work. This is very nice indeed. Well done.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Tomes, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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My pleasure
Comment from PatVallesMangan
As a retired special education teacher, I would have loved to read this to the younger children when I had the opportunity to work with them. You give excellent visuals and the story hooks young and old. With my children sometimes I would let them act it out to truly understand and this would be perfect for that. The rhythm is just perfect for some children to memorize. I truly enjoyed. Blessings! ~ Pat :)
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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As a retired special education teacher, I would have loved to read this to the younger children when I had the opportunity to work with them. You give excellent visuals and the story hooks young and old. With my children sometimes I would let them act it out to truly understand and this would be perfect for that. The rhythm is just perfect for some children to memorize. I truly enjoyed. Blessings! ~ Pat :)
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Thank you, Pat, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from lakeport
The worms emerged, that's a very lovely expressed story poem,very nice rhyming and flow. I enjoyed reading it. God bless you.Hugs!lakeport.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014
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The worms emerged, that's a very lovely expressed story poem,very nice rhyming and flow. I enjoyed reading it. God bless you.Hugs!lakeport.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014
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Erich, thank you so much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
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you are very welcome,Hugs!lakeport.
Comment from Benjohnsonjr
Thank you for a delightful poem that I will read to my little ones. To be honest I did find some of the ideas repetitive. For example several met a watery fate and two were dispatched by birds. Maybe they could have all died n different ways. That's just me though. Other than that a lovely read.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Thank you for a delightful poem that I will read to my little ones. To be honest I did find some of the ideas repetitive. For example several met a watery fate and two were dispatched by birds. Maybe they could have all died n different ways. That's just me though. Other than that a lovely read.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Thank you, Ben - I tried my best to vary the causes of death - sorry if it didn't work for you. Brooke
Comment from angelface2
Aw how sweet, Brooke. Love the picture. This sure is a cute one for little ones learning to count. Would make a nice picture book. LOL. Miss Sally. :>D
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Aw how sweet, Brooke. Love the picture. This sure is a cute one for little ones learning to count. Would make a nice picture book. LOL. Miss Sally. :>D
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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thank you so much, Miss Sally :-) Brooke
Comment from DSMalott
Spiders, vultures and now worms. :)
The making of a great poem collection, maybe.
Strong visual qualities.
Strong rhyming scheme.
Strong quatrain structure and meter pacing.
Loved it.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Spiders, vultures and now worms. :)
The making of a great poem collection, maybe.
Strong visual qualities.
Strong rhyming scheme.
Strong quatrain structure and meter pacing.
Loved it.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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DS, thank you so much for your gracious and generous review :-) Brooke
Comment from RGstar
I like the count-back effect of this one, Brooke. It stands very much in line with the repeating aspect which children love to recite or hear. The subject matter cleverly written despite the unfavored subject of the worm. These worms, however, seemed of good character and nicely personalized, and though each met its fate, they certainly would enhance the experience for a younger audience.
Well done.
Best wishes,
RGstar
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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I like the count-back effect of this one, Brooke. It stands very much in line with the repeating aspect which children love to recite or hear. The subject matter cleverly written despite the unfavored subject of the worm. These worms, however, seemed of good character and nicely personalized, and though each met its fate, they certainly would enhance the experience for a younger audience.
Well done.
Best wishes,
RGstar
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much, RG :-) Brooke
Comment from boxergirl
Great job, Brooke, with your counting poem about worms. It is both entertaining and informative for youngsters. The abcb rhyme scheme works well and the plight of all the worms kept me engaged.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Great job, Brooke, with your counting poem about worms. It is both entertaining and informative for youngsters. The abcb rhyme scheme works well and the plight of all the worms kept me engaged.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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boxergirl :-) Brooke
Comment from royowen
The "ten went out" poems that you write are very good Brooke, I enjoyed it as I enjoyed the others, you wording and attention to detail is second to none, you must be compiling quite an arsenal of kiddies poems by now, have you published Brooke? Nobody is as prolific as you, nice abcb rhyming, well done, blessings, Roy,
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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The "ten went out" poems that you write are very good Brooke, I enjoyed it as I enjoyed the others, you wording and attention to detail is second to none, you must be compiling quite an arsenal of kiddies poems by now, have you published Brooke? Nobody is as prolific as you, nice abcb rhyming, well done, blessings, Roy,
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much, Roy - I need to get moving on publishing :-) Brooke
