Ezekiel Had Half a Smile
quatrains in 8/6/8/6 pure whimsy163 total reviews
Comment from 24chas
This was a nice piece, Brooke. Good flow and the rhythm in it was pleasant as well. I think you captured the theme in a good manner. Nice job.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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This was a nice piece, Brooke. Good flow and the rhythm in it was pleasant as well. I think you captured the theme in a good manner. Nice job.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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Thank you, chas, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from AprilShower
He looks a bit devilish in this picture, like maybe he's teasing his mother. I enjoyed the picture and the poem, Brooke. Well done. I have no suggestions.
April :o)
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He looks a bit devilish in this picture, like maybe he's teasing his mother. I enjoyed the picture and the poem, Brooke. Well done. I have no suggestions.
April :o)
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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April, he definitely has his devilish side :-) Thanks so much. Brooke
Comment from Paddywack
Love it again, Brooke. Beautiful concept. The first two verses I particularly liked, the last verse did quite have the same impact (for me) How about:
If you have only half a smile,
just grow that smile and see
what happens when you use both halves
to set your whole smile free.
Paddy
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014
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Love it again, Brooke. Beautiful concept. The first two verses I particularly liked, the last verse did quite have the same impact (for me) How about:
If you have only half a smile,
just grow that smile and see
what happens when you use both halves
to set your whole smile free.
Paddy
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014
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Paddy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from boxergirl
Oh boy, is he ever going to have the girls swooning with that half smile. Loved the poem too. 8-)
Great rhyme scheme and repetitions of half a smile gave it musicality. 8-)
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Oh boy, is he ever going to have the girls swooning with that half smile. Loved the poem too. 8-)
Great rhyme scheme and repetitions of half a smile gave it musicality. 8-)
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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boxergirl, yeah, he already has a little girl named Chloe who is always trying to invade his space to give him big bear hugs. LOL
Thanks so much for your generous and gracious review :-) Brooke
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Well, Sawyer makes me use my smile in its entirety (love how you used that word in the second stanza)! Another gem of a poem, Brooke, - a feel good read with charming rhymes and a lovely cadence to it.
I can see why its your favourite expression - he really is adorable.
Av
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014
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Well, Sawyer makes me use my smile in its entirety (love how you used that word in the second stanza)! Another gem of a poem, Brooke, - a feel good read with charming rhymes and a lovely cadence to it.
I can see why its your favourite expression - he really is adorable.
Av
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014
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Av, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Kingsland
I really liked the positive mind thoughts behind this free flowing piece of poetic art. This was well written with an excellent cadence that just added to the delight of the read... John
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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I really liked the positive mind thoughts behind this free flowing piece of poetic art. This was well written with an excellent cadence that just added to the delight of the read... John
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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Thank you, John, for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from FrannyG
Absolutely gorgeous, Brooke. The last verse is my favourite and beautifully written. It makes one think 'What a great idea!' and then smile. Beautiful writing.
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Absolutely gorgeous, Brooke. The last verse is my favourite and beautifully written. It makes one think 'What a great idea!' and then smile. Beautiful writing.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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Franny, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from michaelcahill
This is a perfect piece and it does this time need that image to go with it. What a look. It really does look like if it ever comes completely forth that the sun would never have to shine. This would make a perfect framed piece above a fireplace daring anyone not to read it, see it and not smile. Love it, mikey
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This is a perfect piece and it does this time need that image to go with it. What a look. It really does look like if it ever comes completely forth that the sun would never have to shine. This would make a perfect framed piece above a fireplace daring anyone not to read it, see it and not smile. Love it, mikey
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
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mikey, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Pili Pubul
Oh, Brooke I was so taken by Sawyer's picture , it took me a bit to get to the poem, and you wrote the perfect poem to complement that delightful
half smile. Second stanza my favorite, very moving. Pili
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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Oh, Brooke I was so taken by Sawyer's picture , it took me a bit to get to the poem, and you wrote the perfect poem to complement that delightful
half smile. Second stanza my favorite, very moving. Pili
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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Pili, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You are so welcome. Pili
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Wow! Does he look mischievous! LOL That poem is so true
if he let go with the other half the sun would be ashamed to shine. I can see why you love this expression. My son had a smile like that. I always wondered what he was up to. LOL
This is very enjoyable. xxx Nancy
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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Wow! Does he look mischievous! LOL That poem is so true
if he let go with the other half the sun would be ashamed to shine. I can see why you love this expression. My son had a smile like that. I always wondered what he was up to. LOL
This is very enjoyable. xxx Nancy
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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Nancy, thank you so much. He does have a mischievous streak. Yesterday he was feeding Potato the cat from his spoon, which he knows is a no no. Of course, he is so cute that his mother has a hard time sounding harsh when she lays down the law. LOL :-) Brooke
