Fire Inside
A short poem162 total reviews
Comment from squid152
Not sure about the last line only having 5 syllables. Liked the poem overall. Great presentation! Loved the artwork!-Squid
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Not sure about the last line only having 5 syllables. Liked the poem overall. Great presentation! Loved the artwork!-Squid
Comment Written 11-Jun-2012
Comment from azwildrosa
Your first, congrats on writing a great 5-7-5. This proves to be a difficult task for many but you've managed to pull it off well. This is a great poem for this entry. it flows nicely and has rhyme. Thank you for sharing and best wishes to you in the booth.
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Your first, congrats on writing a great 5-7-5. This proves to be a difficult task for many but you've managed to pull it off well. This is a great poem for this entry. it flows nicely and has rhyme. Thank you for sharing and best wishes to you in the booth.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2012
Comment from c_lucas
Sometimes one's love life needs a mere spark to turn it into a raging wild fire. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
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Sometimes one's love life needs a mere spark to turn it into a raging wild fire. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2012
Comment from Dustybones
I am not a expert reviewer. I think you have done a very good job with this. I like it as it is very poetic as well as a 5.7.5. Once I wrote a few, I "saw" them everywhere. It was funny to me that almost every thought could become one.
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I am not a expert reviewer. I think you have done a very good job with this. I like it as it is very poetic as well as a 5.7.5. Once I wrote a few, I "saw" them everywhere. It was funny to me that almost every thought could become one.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2012
Comment from ephraim crud, COS.
they're easy to slice
together -and here's the proof:
see, a piece of cake!
but i'm a reasonable bloke
and'll give you five.
thank you for sharing, Vincent,
and good luck for the contest!
regards, eph.
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they're easy to slice
together -and here's the proof:
see, a piece of cake!
but i'm a reasonable bloke
and'll give you five.
thank you for sharing, Vincent,
and good luck for the contest!
regards, eph.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2012
Comment from dragonpoet
This is well written. Usually this kind of poetry doesn't rhyme but this works well. It could be read as she lights the fire or passion or that her fire spark problems and ruins lives.
Very good first try.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
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This is well written. Usually this kind of poetry doesn't rhyme but this works well. It could be read as she lights the fire or passion or that her fire spark problems and ruins lives.
Very good first try.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 11-Jun-2012
Comment from Crackerberries
Intersting write and very well done for your very first 5-7-5 poem. They aren't as easy as one might think but you've done very well. Only suggestion use advanced editor next time and center poem under artwork. Great job.
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Intersting write and very well done for your very first 5-7-5 poem. They aren't as easy as one might think but you've done very well. Only suggestion use advanced editor next time and center poem under artwork. Great job.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2012
Comment from Hollyhock
It was worth working at this poem though.
You have created a consistent extended image throughout, without having to resort to tortured phrases to fit the demands of the 5-7-5.
You have pattern and rhyme, the whole poem has life and warmth and can be read on several levels, love, support, inspiration and hope, to name a few.
Well done, I enjoyed it very much.
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It was worth working at this poem though.
You have created a consistent extended image throughout, without having to resort to tortured phrases to fit the demands of the 5-7-5.
You have pattern and rhyme, the whole poem has life and warmth and can be read on several levels, love, support, inspiration and hope, to name a few.
Well done, I enjoyed it very much.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2012
Comment from kiwisteveh
Pretty good first attempt I ould say - it is hard to condense anything meaningful down to 17 syllables. I liked the (near) rhyme and the metaphor.
Good luck in the contest
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Pretty good first attempt I ould say - it is hard to condense anything meaningful down to 17 syllables. I liked the (near) rhyme and the metaphor.
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 11-Jun-2012
Comment from Scarbrems
A nice work saying a lot in a few words. Good imagery. It is very difficult to write these and inject some meaning into a short poem, but you did it well
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A nice work saying a lot in a few words. Good imagery. It is very difficult to write these and inject some meaning into a short poem, but you did it well
Comment Written 11-Jun-2012
