Comment from Sheri58

Excellent

Looks good! Straight to the point and no questions as to what the meaning. Nice photo to start it out. Perfect selection.
Sheri

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2006

Comment from goldferris

Excellent

I have to admit, you sure do know what you are doing when it comes to poetry, especially haiku. It seems like you take from both a creative and scholarly view, judging by your author's notes. I enjoyed this poem. It felt old-fashioned to me.

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2006

Comment from jwsteele

Excellent

Another fine haiku. You seem to have a talent for these. I like the form and have to give it a go myself sometime. I like the 5-7-5. It seems there are so many variations. But I don't agree with that. When you break the from you break the poem imo.Excellent poem.

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2006

Comment from Signaler

Average

Hi AlCREATOR WRITER, Good haiku structure, how ever, the portrait is not clear. The last line... life goes on hope in. Just doesn't make sense no matter how many times I read it. I'm sure it is a typo.

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2006

Comment from mblundell68

Excellent

Come singing or sweeping, life has to go on!
Oh Rain! ;
Rain sings, blooms new life, death sweep; life goes on;
how true!
Excellent thoughts conveyed through your poem!

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2006

Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

HI ALCREATOR, Great traditional Haiku about the necessity of rain. Love the picture. Keep writing I enjoy your work.
gert

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2006

Comment from pbearse

Excellent

You sure packed a lot into these three little Haiku lines--They brought life, swept away death and allowed space for the new born..Good one one

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2006

Comment from mayflowerbg

Excellent

Hi, ACWriter!

There is a rule I don't always follow, too. It says: "Always end a haiku with a noun! " But here I think you don't need to end with a preposition, just rearrange the words in the last line:

"life goes on in hope"

See? It doesn't hurt the meaning and the flow is nice, and the rule is OK.
Of course you can always break a rule, but you must have an important reason to do it.

Have a nice day (evening)!

Maya

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2006

Comment from Nescher Pyscher

Average

Al, this one kinda read like you were forcing it to fit the criteria of the Hiaku; as opposed to writing a Haiku for its own sake.

It's hard to do, I know, but this one didn't get there.

I hope you don't think I'm beating up on you or anything, I just think these could be better.

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2006

Comment from Doreen Dulally

Excellent

And rejects amateur reviews, ................. think that's sad now that you have achieved your goals

Well I'm an amateur

and I hope if ever I'm lucky enough to reach number one ...I'll know it's with the help of all reviewers not just the experts

I wonder sometimes why all you brilliant people are not out on the worlds stage

Instead of here ...where I'm struggling to make just a mark....and can only do so by reviews

tuts ...........never underestimate the underdog ..they say the higher you are the harder you fall

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2006